This story deserves far more attention than it's been given.

I really enjoyed several aspects of the story- most notable how 'human' several of the characters are- they feel like real people you could encounter in your day to day life, and aren't merely set pieces used to advance the story, a trait altogether too common in modern literature. The plot exists to advance a character, not the other way around.

Well, this is quite enjoyable so far. Consider this on my list of fun fics!

this is really good you got your self a watch

I'd just like to express how captivated I am. I don't read many fictions as I become bored of overused tropes and stilted conversations. It's a crutch I often see. However, you, my friend, are an artisan and your writing style has me hooked. Your descriptions of the repeaters and the ironclads and their dogfights were fast-paced, sleek and amazingly vivid. And then you can just flip a switch and intricately dismantle a character's intentions, wants and needs and that something seldom seen.

I am also surprised this hasn't received higher appraisal, and more attention, but then you can't change what people like to read. I like story, being engrossed in a world that I never want to leave. Whereas the top reads seem to follow themes of human projection into equestria, sordid and overdone sexual skits and brazen fan-service. They have their place, indeed, they must. What I'm trying to say in a round about way is I think you rock as a writer.