Spike and the Red

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Spike, upon discovering that he is not the first dragon to have been raised by ponies ultimately seeks to go on a journey to learn about this fellow and what it means for him with the help of Scootaloo who after all these years, still seeks her cutie mark.

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jakcspellgud

jakcspellgud #1 · Mar 8th, 2013 · · ·

good concept but it needs a lot of work i'd get a proofreader if i were you

Tyek

Tyek #2 · Mar 9th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Good concept, characters and dialogue, but you need a bit more description of what the characters are doing as they speak.

Keep at it. Try and find a prereader / editor / whatever to help edit things a little bit.

Rocinante

Rocinante #3 · Mar 13th, 2013 · · ·

Your dialogue is really good. Love the concept.

Only thing I would try working on, is making it a bit more descriptive.

Good job, keep it up.

Obsidian Quill

Obsidian Quill #4 · Apr 5th, 2013 · · ·

I actually surprised
This is a great set up and really catches my attention and make me eager for the next chapter and get a lot of issue out of the way real quick to focus on the two main characters.. So I love the focus so far, I really look forward see this story grow. keep it up!