Kindle wood had been imprision since Luna was banish. But Celestia now needs his help. every pony has fail her so far. so she make a deal with Kindle.
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Kindle Wood? Kindlewood? Pick one.
Has he been imprisoned or in prison? Pick one, doesn't really matter.
Since Luna was banished. Past tense.
You are in desperate need of a brave, brave editor. Read this.
Out of curiosity, what is your native language? Something Balto-Slavic, I'm guessing.
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Apology for poor english,
Where were you when Luna was banish?
I was at home eating smegma butter whan pjoltr ring
"Luna is banish"
"no"
(that's all I could think about when reading the description)
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I might take a stab at editing at least some of this later if you want?
just some rough editing, something to do during school to keep away boredom.
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See what I did there? it's called fleshing it out. Plus correcting your tense errors. It took me 10 minutes to re-write those few paragraphs. read back through it and edit.
The first paragraph is the most important, it got to draw the readers in. Make them feel you characters, bring them alive with description as you fail to do.
The reason I didn't add it into my edit is because I don't have a clue about Kindles appearance, all I know he's called Kindle, he has something to do with fire (hence the name and the burning building in his dream) and he's male.
Grab a pen and pencil or use notepad on your pc and jot down kindles appearance, personality, how he fits in your universe, and the out line of the plot.
I hope this helps. Also don't just copy and paste the paragraph in to your story, else you wont learning anything. Write your own you can use mine as a guide if you like.
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I'm Latvian and I find this offensive.
Nah, 's okay.
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they won't hurt you
WELL YOU MIND AS WELL JUST STAB ME!
no engish is not my first lanugish i'm not from this planet. and i have to post for my editor to fix it. he can only work on one at a time.