• Published 16th Mar 2013
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an apple doesn't fall far from the tree. - Derpylicious

big mac,applejack and applebloom are all close sibiling's...or are they

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chapter 1.

The mare sat in the run-down cafe, the same to which she went to every other time her parents had a fight. She would grab a few bits and go down there for at least an hour, and they never even knew she was gone. She looked up and noticed a buff red stallion sitting across the room. He was looking back at her, and so she shifted to his table, wearing a smile.

"Howdy, partner?!" she said her sugar sweet tone "anypony sitting there?"

- "Nope"

"'You new in town? I would have remembered a handsome stallion like you, sugarcube"

The stallion's cheeks blushed sharply "not too bad yourself. What is your name?" he asked

- "Applejack"

- "Applejack?" he showed interest, "So we both have apple names and cutie marks?! I am Big Macintosh"

"I gotta go soon, so how bout we meet here tomorrow? Again?" asked Applejack.

- "Eeyup"


And so, they met every day, for about three months. Then started meeting elsewhere, first from discreet chatter, to close distances, to holding hooves and even kissing.

"Big Mac?"


-"Will we ever..." she started,

-"Definately! I love you!" he smiled.

"I...I just think..."

-"Think what?"

"Well, you say you love me, sugar cube..."

- "I do!"

"so, when?"

He smiled and rolled over to her "Well, if you can't wait..."


"I feel a little off today, Big Mac!" winced applejack "I'm gunna... oh no!" she ran to the toilet as fast as she could, and predictably, threw up again. When she was done, she came out to see Big Mac's grave facial expression.

"Take this..." he handed her a small strip of plastic, which turned out to be a pregnancy test. Her face was blank, flushed away from all emotion. She said nothing as she shifted into the stall and back out again a while later "was it...?".



She got home that night and not saying a word to her parents, slipped upstairs and started to pack her bags.

"Applejack?" her mother gasped entering the room "what are you doing?" her face was a confused twist of chaos.

"I gotta go, mama..." Applejack continued packing like she had said nothing.

"but why?..." her mother said, as her eyelids were cups of water which were soon to be spilled.

"Because, mama, I ma'self am gunna be a mama!" Applejack snapped, which returned her mother's tears back into their glands as her brows strained with anger.

"Is that red stallion, ain't it? The one with tha apple cutie mark?" the irritated mare asked.


"I saw you with him! Holding hooves, ya were! I should have thought there was more to it, BUT NOW LEAVE! Get out of my sight and NEVER come back!!" Applejack's mother grabbed the pony and tossed her out of her room with much fury. Applejack had now finished packing not only her valuables, but also her rotten memories as she walked out of the house. And so, she headed back to the cafe to find Big Mac, who also had a suitcase.

They set off together that night. Big Mac, tired, Applejack, throwing up. They travelled around many towns to find home, but no jobs were there to be found.

"We gotta have a place to live, ya'know..." Big Mac sighed.

"Well, what about that place there?" Applejack raised her hoof to point to a little flat nearby, with a hanging post of dying, decaying wood saying "FOR RENT" in the window.


They knocked on the door and a boring looking white mare stepped out, with a horrible face of disgust as she had seen it all in her many years.

"Howdy! We hear about the flat to rent" Applejack smiled

"How old are you?"

"16, both of us" Applejack continued "looking for a place to stay temporarily"

The mare then saw Applejack's slightly swollen belly and looked stern "married?" Big Mac shook his head.

"Are you..." she then bowed her head and whispered, eyes narrowed at the pair "in the family way?"

Applejack sighed, "I know what it looks like, but we are an honest string"

"I will NOT have you two living in sin under my roof!" the elder raised her voice, shooing the pair away as she protectively crawled forward "I was almost about to accept you but with a foal on the way! How dare you ask a Celestia cowering nag like myself like this! You have some nerve!" and so she returned, slamming the door in their faces.

"That was... easy..." Applejack bowed her head, as she felt the shame of much innocent fault derive from the eyes of many passing by ponies around.

- "Eeyup"

They walked miles and miles, into a little town called Ponyville, Applejack was now heavily bearing the burden of her womb.

"We can stay here, for now" she said, curling up on the floor and closing her eyes. Big Mac wanted to keep going, but he had learned it was harder to argue with Applejack when she was asleep. He sat next to her but before he could close his eyes, a voice shock him alert.

"Y'all got some place to sleep tonight!" said an old creaky voice. Creaky, but yet had a detail of friendliness on it's outlines with typical country accent.

Big Mac responded to the voice "nope!"

"Well then, what do ye think of me so bad that ah wouldn' invate ye into my barn?! Come on in, sugarcubes!" the mare was old enough, but still managed to hall a large stallion to his hooves "you, AND your lady"

Applejack woke up "huh.. what?"

"Ayum Granny Smith and your friend tole me that you've have no place to stay tonight"

Applejack staggered to her feet, her belly now in full view, mute, and Granny Smith's eyes widened at the sight.

"oh, Sweetie!" she put her hoof round her back and helped her into the house that juxtaposed with a deep, fruity orchard.

"A farm, isn't it..."

"Indeed! And you'll be needing some time to sort yourself out, won't ya? Poor thingie!"

"I'm wiling to offer any help, madonna. In return for your generosity"

"Well, what's your name?"

"Big Mac"


"Come on! You can do it! Push...PUSH!"

"Tell me...to push...one more...bucking...time... and amma rip... your bucking... tail off!" She screamed again as her spine curled outward, bringing out the flesh as his hoof became a reflection of all her agony through must squeezing. Big Mac only bit his lip, but remained strong through the stress of the eventful scene

"Aaaaaand she's here!" Granny Smith called out with glee as wiped the tiny foal with delicate towels. She barely had any mane, but the rare hair was as red as the skins of delicious apples, and her thin coat was a tuft of pale yellow.

"it's... It's a she?" Applejack let out, swollowing the last bits of her water in extreme thirst. "We have a filly?!" She arched her head forward and looked at the tiny filly, who has barely even opened her eyes. She then took a glance at Big Mac, who's cheeks shone in liquid pride as he couldn't help smiling at his daughter.
Applejack smiled, and relaxed "Applebloom, the name shall be..." at last she said, putting herself into a well deserved rest.


"She cannot know!" Applejack terrorised, now calm. "She will think she is our sister" tears like rain from her eyes, "we will tell her that Big Mac and I are her brother and sister"

"Are you sure, sugarcube? That's mad!"

"Yes... YES! I AM! That is the only way she will have a fair life... I hope..."

Author's Note:

thanks to my wonderful proof reader poisoning orchid!

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Comments ( 55 )

My Little Pony: Capitalization is Magic.

2274969 :rainbowlaugh:
I think your comment is better than the stroy

2274969 not sure if insulting or not...

xDan #4 · Mar 16th, 2013 · · 2 ·

my little pony: capitalization is magic


Applejack and Big Macintosh are canon brother and sister.
Apple Bloom is their little sister.
They have canon parents, who are (canon implied) deceased.
So...yeah....I'm not sure how to even react to this. You pretty much completely ignored the canon. At least add an "Alternate Universe" tag if you want to do that.
Plus the spelling/grammar/capitalization errors... :facehoof:

2275171 ok I will add a tag, and thank you for giving me advice rather than just disliking and leaving

2275158 ok...repeat a comment...for no reason...


You're welcome. If you can, try and get an editor to help you. There are groups for proofreaders and people who are looking to edit/pre-read fics.

2275171 also the grammar take that up whit my editor

xDan #10 · Mar 16th, 2013 · · 1 ·

Are you really dense enough to not see the joke?

2275230 are you really stupid enoth to post a comment twice?

I'm the proof reader and corrector. Explain my errors, if my grammar is insulting such audience, I apologise.

I, however, do see the joke how you address yourself with a TF2 profile picture in an MLP forum

2275294 best...girlfriend/editor ever....


if there is an issue with proof reading, I should've been contacted directly. Not you

2275316 to be fair, I should link you in the story.

So you're saying that everyone MUST have a picture of a pony on a pony website. What are the repercussions for not having one?

2275497 looking like a idiot?

I'm really not sure if I should explain it to you.


I'm talking about the picture in general. It is your face on Medic's body. The content looks humorous, therefore, I claim it to be a joke.

2275525 but to be honest it is not your pic that makes you look like an idiot its your personality.

It's not mine, actually, it's knighty's

Well, ain't that fine and dandy?

2275549 you have a pic off someone else's face on your profile...dude that's creepy!

I could say the same for you.

2275565 uhhhhhhh...how? i only have one pic..of a pony

Yeah, I know! Putting a picture of a children's TV show as your avatar is incredibly creepy, man!

if you will criticise someone else, make sure you know your own errors first. Otherwise, you are no better. And for one, your attitude had been more repulsive than the subject of the fanfic

2275573 it is a MLP site also what do you assume my age and gender is

Fair point. Counter point: Why should I care what other people think about my attitude and general way of self-expression? If I should be ridiculed, then by that logic every person on this site is just as bad as me. Take you, for example - although you might see yourself in one way, I, as well as any other person, could see you as the most detestable and vile piece of wretched filthy scum to ever inahbit this universe. But I do not. Rather, I see you as a level-headed person who is defending the author for whatever reason and does not understand the intended irony of an capitalization title regarding capitalization. What is your point in saying this?

The intended audience of the show: a small girl.

2275606 two thing I am NOT a SMALL girl (well I am a girl) and she is sticking up for me because she is a devoted and kind girlfriend, something I expect you to without.

that's what people saw it as.

2275616 alternate universe head cannon...

What? Please elaborate.

2275630 what do you mean...I am insulting you...that is all

my point is that any criticism and appreciation deserve explanation, which is something you didn't offer

2275646 that tends to be what people do in an argument.

What argument?

please, guys, this argument is getting nowhere. Derpylicious, you have been told about your mistake and corrected yourself. Dan, I understand your point, but I'd like you two to forgive and forget about this.
Isn't this what MLP is about?

This is completely irreverent but your profile pic cracks me up. Not sure why, but if you added the word "wat" to the pic it would be even funnier. :rainbowlaugh:

LOL i have to agree with that


If you're the proofreader, then there's a lot that you missed. You need to be a grammar nazi if you want to be a good proofreader rather than "lol I had my gf read my story and she was like "ya its ok""

Like, I had my (ex)-gf read my fanfics, but she was very grammar-nazi-esque and would mention almost everything (although she still fell into the "Well im going out with you so I'm going to ignore then things that suck so you don't get mad", and pretty much almost ruined my fanfic).

I suggest finding an actual dedicated editor, because if this is the kind of quality that an EDITED story is, then its the fault of you for not writing it better and the fault of your editor for not getting on you about the quality.

Also it's not required to have a pony avatar, and I feel like you're just being like "um um um oh well i gotta get him on something. . . um. . . YOU HAVE A FUNNY LOOKING NOSE. HAH. TAKE THAT"

And I'm scared to even read the story, because of your attitude as well as the low quality of the writer and editor.

What scares me is that this isn't your first story.

2277858 actually she is a grammar nazi... and ok I was a little childish to be fair.

i'm not responsible for the subject of the story. Only grammar. The source of the idea comes from the author and I have written NO fanfics.

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