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Only a few months after the beginnings of their unusual relationship in The Social Experiment, Twilight and Caramel seek to find out where the stable ground is in their relationship; how to account for responsibility, honesty, loyalty, respect, and devotion; and what it truly means to love another.

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Hey, everyone. OtterMatt here. Just for the record, I’m not coming back to FimFic. Not ever. I’m sorry to say it, but my life has moved on, as it were, and writing just isn’t a part of it anymore. That being said, I love these stories of mine very much. There’s a lot of myself that I put into them, and at least a couple people have told me that these stories meant a lot to them as well. So, for those people, and for anyone else who enjoys my work in the future, I’m charging my friend Spabble here with curating my completed stories. Thank you all for the love, the faves, and the support as I grew and learned. Keep doing what you love, and the best of luck to you all.

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Should it be right for all the wrong reasons...? Whelp only one way to find out! :derpytongue2:

TSE was great, and I have to see where this story goes. This one's going on top of the Read Later list.

Well, there are a lot of little things I could nitpick, but I do quite like the overall direction of the story. I'm certainly looking forward to the next chapter.

Delightfully heartwarming so far, and I don't doubt it will continue to be.

Comment posted by ShagDragon deleted Mar 8th, 2013

Hello again. :pinkiehappy: Came across this by accident.
Y U NO tell me?
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And dat ending:
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Also:

His head spinning and his cheer forgotten, he turned to make the rest of his walk home, unaware that across the street a cloaked white mare was frowning and walking the other way, back along the path he had come from.

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That... was not what I expected at all. The ending to this has got me hooked and I want to see how this ends. Good job on this one I'm still impressed by your writing. Lets hope they get it right in the end.

“I’m sorry, Caramel… No.”

Well, why the hell not?

Sooooooo excited!!! That ending made me laugh and now i am thoroughly intrigued. Continue on Good sir, continue on :moustache::moustache:

OH Snap Twilight what are you doing? Damn girl..... I hope the author makes this right... seriously....

I guess Twilight doesn't want to get married for the WRONG REASONS... she wants to be married for the RIGHT REASONS (love will be discovered in this fic which will lead to a 'yes') :twilightsmile:

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That is the best answer for this... that there can ever be.

Well. I definitely wasn't expecting that.

I suspect Twilight is going to realize a few things after Caramel gets hurt emotional by her and by her family...

When she was young princess Celestia offered to marry her when she was ready, so she's saving herself?:trollestia:

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:facehoof:
Also author! You should add a chapter onto this story's precursor that has a link to this story cause the only reason I know about this is because I stumbled upon it in pure happenstance. I have the first story in my favorites so had you added a chapter I would have gotten a notification versus possibly never knowing you continued this awesome story.

It always amazed how powerful a single sentence, when inserted at the right moment, can grab the reader by the ears and smash their head into the desk repeatedly in a spout of "I need to see what happens next" madness.

You have demonstrated this effect to a startlingly potent degree. Congratulations, you gave me a concussion.

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES she is waiting and I can;t wait to find out why. It drives me nuts that no one ever writes a story with a no to that questions. I mean sure its most likely gonna change but still

Buck Daisy and Lily, up their flanks, with a dull, rusty, wooden carving knife

Well...didn't see that coming...:applejackconfused::derpyderp2:

2237249that has been heated over hot coals

Wow, I have to admit, I didn't expect to see a sequel to the Social Experiment!

It's such a wonderfully adorable story - that was easily what got me the most, it was just so darn adorable :pinkiehappy:; from beginning to end, my "awww's" just wouldn't stop :pinkiehappy:.

The length of the story was very short, but happily, I can see that this is not the end by a long shot, if the "incomplete" is proof of anything...I felt weird a bit, because I didn't know exactly where the story was going, and why it was so short, but happily, it seem this is beyond a one-shot....you are taking the wonderful premise of "Social Experiment" and fleshing this new story in Twilight's life :twilightsmile:.

So, what did I think of it? Well, the premise itself was very typical - the usual "Meet the Parents", and Caramel is, of course, terrified....really, what I think I got the most from this chapter, is just how much Caramel sticks out like a sore-thumb: it was intentional and deliberate, but it couldn't be any bigger.

What it comes down to is the fact that this is Twilight Sparkle we are dealing with....and Caramel is, well....who is he again? :facehoof:

The poor colt was terrified out of his mind, but unlike all the other "Meet the Parent" scenarios (at least, not the typical ones), is that this terror could, in some small sense, be understood....because again, this is Twilight - the girl whom seemingly everything centers around...the only way things could be bigger, is if she were an Alicorn in this story....and it's not like she knew Caramel growing up, or they were childhood friends - he only met her, just now at (if Celestia's words are anything to go by) 20 years of age....after the 3 or so years of ups and down, Nightmare Moon/Discord and everything in between, friendship....It's as if Caramel has just entered the most sanctified of inner circles -- Caramel, a nobody farm pony....the overall feeling I got from him, and the story, was....well....":ajbemused::rainbowderp::rainbowhuh::trixieshiftright::duck:"....you get the idea.

And he feels this, he knows how much he sticks out like a sore-thumb, the relationship wasn't exactly planned...he's...he's well...

Well, he's right for all the wrong reasons :trollestia::eeyup:

And in fairness, and what I hope to see in response to all of this, is development to make up for it -- if this is a Princess and the Pauper story, an Aladdin kind of tale, it's not like Caramel didn't have his own, well, journey to go through in his own 20 (or however old he is, I don't think we know) years of life....that's what I honestly hope to see next - I don't just mean seeing the men probing him for information to make sure he is worthy good for Twilight....but to actually get real insights and history from the man himself....that while he may not have been destined for world-changing greatness from Day 1, that doesn't make him any less a person with his own history, life-lessons and everything that comes from it: who are his friends? His family? How did he grow up? Who is Caramel? this is where he, the plain old boring farmpony nobody knows, could really really surprise everyone....that while he may not be a bearer of the Elements of Harmony and saves the country on a regular basis.... that doesn't make him any less special, wise, and every bit worthy of her future magistrate Twilight Sparkle.

I can also say, when it comes to Caramel...just how much I adore his personality - it's...well, it's Twilight! :twilightsheepish::twilightoops:....really! the entire story, his awkwardness, his extreme self-consciousness...he acted, from beginning to end, just as I would expect Twilight to act, which, in a small way, made Twilight seem very weird...because she showed a patience, maturity and compassion that normally would be reserved for her, not from her....it's usually her that's freaking out, after all. Her support of Caramel, was not only wonderful, it also spoke volumes of her maturity to a point that it almost made me feel she was acting unlike herself :rainbowhuh::twilightblush:

Was there anything else? I did feel the bit with Daisy and Lily was (my words for them if I was there? They are apparently drunk, don't know what they are talking about, and it's really known of their business anyway)....curious -- I honestly thought it was a bad dream, with Caramel's unconscious fears coming to the forefront....he knows he didn't take advantage of Twilight, nor mean too, and he said last chapter that he has every intention of being responsible (so the fears he displayed in this chapter was a bit weird....but understandable - because now everyone is expecting from him)...but he's still afraid because the reality of the situation is continuing to seep in, and it's scary.

Of course, I need to get into Twilight as well....what about her? Talk about growth! As before, she is showing a level of compassion and support that is almost surprising of her...she still has her little nervous quirks, which I'm happy for, but honestly....and especially with her study of love, she almost reminded me of Cadence - she had a sense of maturity that just surprised me. She really feels like on top of the world, as well she should :pinkiehappy:. I'm happy to see that she is still pursuing her study of Love....especially given this point in her life, it couldn't feel more appropriate, not to mention sensible as, as expressed in the last story, friendship is is a form of love.

Honestly, I love this story so far....it follows a very conventional premise (the whole "Meet the Parents"), but with MLP, and with such an adorable presentation and cast of characters....what did I think of the ending? I'm not surprised....Twilight and Caramel are both, appropriately, acting like idiots...Caramel is scared and feels small for reasons he shouldn't have too, and Twilight is afraid to tell him he loves her, even though he wouldn't be scared of that.....and now, in a very typical Twilight move, she has reflexively responded to a very delicate situation, no doubt because her overly-elaborate planning isn't meshing with her rising hormones :facehoof:. Of course, the greatest moments of her life come from when she makes mistakes or big changes like that....the whole relationship started like this after all. I can't wait to see the light at the end of this train-wrecked tunnel.

Overall, I love it....I really do - the title just matches perfectly with who Caramel is, what the relationship is (after all, he was the last one in her meticulous list from the last story, and I said it was exactly why it worked out so well :raritywink:)....I can't wait to see more from this very unlikely couple :heart:

"A sequel," I said. "Meh," I said.
I'm not saying that anymore.
This has intrigued me greatly already.

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Sorry to say my friend but you can't have a rusty wooden knife, nice idea though

i´m going to do something that will shame myself :twilightblush:

MOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :flutterrage:

ahem, now that i got that out of my system :twilightblush:

my humble opinion is that love, love is cliche, love is the single most abundant topic in literature, not just in ponies, but in all of human history, and is one of the most beautiful things to read and write :heart:, done right, which you did :heart:, from the previous story to this one, its a beautiful piece you have put together.

i think its the first story i read here that actually make me screamed MORE! when i got the end of the chapter

the comedy part, i just love reading a story and that it makes my day,

If you had gotten married without inviting Luna and I to the ceremony, I would banish you and put you in a dungeon in the place where I banished you to

make that not a day but the whole week :twilightsmile:

The romance that you have made them share, its one of the most warmth that i have read here thank you for that

have my fav and a thumbs up i´m aboard for the ride :twilightsmile:
i know its way early for it but since i know i would love this story
Trilogy?:pinkiecrazy:

So wait...She actually thought about it, and said NO?!

Not something more politic like "NOT YET", but a flat out NOPE?

There's rejection and then there's "JOKE'S ON YOU BOY! YOU GOT USED"

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You can if you cover said wooden knife with rust yourself.

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I love this. I love you for taking the time to write it. You're onto a few points, ones I dare not touch on for fear of potentially tipping my hand, but you made me giggle once or twice. Your critiques are also pretty good, too. The only thing I'll say in response is that this story (like almost all of my stories) takes place in my story-verse (for lack of a real term), which has pretty much separated from canon after season 2. In the show, Twilight is about 17 or 18. In this story, she's about 25, so you sorta have to take her personality differences with a grain of salt. Besides, she's been through a lot so far (thanks to my writing, lol), and I think it's all tempered her a bit by now. Rest assured, though, your opinions will be among those on my back burner while I continue this. :heart:

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I give myself WAY too much credit, because I know I haven't ACTUALLY been married for that long (just a few years), but I like to think that I know a bit about what love can really be, and I'm striving to bring that feeling across. I'm thrilled that I managed to do it, at least for you! :pinkiehappy: And yes, this will be released in three parts.

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Worry not, my friend. There is much more story to come. All shall be made clear. :coolphoto:

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Man, I hope you recover. Sorry for writing so violently! :trollestia:

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This comment just made my morning. You should know that.

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Rest assured, it's a very deliberate wording, though it might not be totally apparent why until part 2 is released.

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In all seriousness, though, I felt like a mad genius when I read these. Oh, but it feels so good.

To anyone I missed, I've definitely read your comments, and thank you so much for reading!

Woo! Social experiment sequal! Instafav!:rainbowkiss:

Hi. I have no insightful comments, no in-depth analysis, no metaphysical breakdown of themes or subtext.


I just want to say this is an amazingly well-written story, incredibly cute, heartwarming, and I can't wait for more. :twilightsmile:

and suddenly the shit gets real.:applejackunsure:

Quite lovely, in every way. Glad this continued, and I am even happier to not see a "Sad" tag. Sad stories are not particularly fun.

I honestly expected more of a reaction from Shining, though I get the feeling that he is just holding back his temper. Thankfully that bomb seemed to get defused in short order, but there will still be something simmering. Cadance will probably talk some sense into him, as she knows Twilight better than most and can see her without the overprotective eyes of a big brother.

If anything, I feel that Daisy's and Lily's words were out of place. Slightly drunk maybe, but do they have any reason to make those claims? What have they heard, and from where? Does Caramel have a history of bad relationships? Has not Caramel been dating Twilight for a while, enough so that their relationship would be common knowledge? That scene just needs more context, which I am hoping will be revealed later on.

This is one of my favourite pairings. Keep up the good work.

Huh... I expect Caramel's reaction to be something along the lines of:
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Well, why the fuck did he do something insane like that? Silly Caramel.
(...)
Thanks to you, OtterMatt, I ship CaramelxTwi now. I hope you're happy. :twilightangry2::rainbowlaugh:

Honestly I think more writers should take the time to write like this, gives the characters life and persona in the story.

Awesome story! There really isn't enough CaramelxTwilight out there :twilightsmile:

And I may just be reading too much into this, but I see a scene similar to an art piece I drew some time ago :raritywink:

“I’m sorry, Caramel… No.”

Why must it end at this?/Such an abrupt cliffhanger/ It vexes me so.

Yay, more of this. Twi is taking it slow, which is good. Hopefully she can convince Caramel of this in a non devastating way :twilightsheepish:

Awwwwww sheeeeeeiiiit, son! Cue awkwardness, and a distinct lack of snoo-snoo for Twilight that night...
Oh yeah, and thanks for doing more on this, loved the first story! :yay:

Twilight!! How COULD YOU!?!?

Caramel is gonna be heartbroken...

Enjoyable read :twilightsmile: I'm eager to find out what happens next.

Alright so some time ago now I read the fic this is a sequel from. It was a good standalone and I liked it. It depicted cuteness while staying reasonably close to how I think Twilight would react to said situation. Also, the scenario itself that made the story possible is just... It's Twilight. Nobody else would make this story without suspension of belief. And so, I loved it !

With that in mind, I was delighted to discover a sequel came. And you didn't disappoint ! This is still cute, and the characterization is still good.

ALSO DAT CLIFFHANGER I WANNA READ MOAR ! :pinkiegasp:

I'll be waiting for your next chapter :twilightsmile:

Dayyym Twilight, you just made shit real!!

Comment posted by CuriousCurse deleted Mar 10th, 2013
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