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Fox-Sama


Ballad of the Brony: A Documentary on Bronies and Friendship is Magic. I think is fantastichttp://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=UE7I_IDX98g#!

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Once sheltered in her happy life and private schooling, Twilight Sparkle is tossed into a new town, a new school with new ponies. These are some of the things Twilight Sparkle must deal with after being forced to move in with her brother in Ponyville. Can she cope with the stress and can she make some friends? Or will the threat of socializing with her peers overwhelm the poor unicorn?

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very nice! I look forward to more soon!

This is pretty cute, dood. I look forward to MOAR...but take your time.

This chapter, I like it! Keep up the good work!

This is a weird thing to say, I know, but I feel like this should be humanized. I mean, it's a high school AU. It goes against the natural order for it to NOT be humanized.

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No. Bad shell! It shouldn't be.

So is this some kind of Bizzaro!AU where Luna never went full retard and turned into Nightmare Moon or something?

So let me get this straight:
Luna never became Nightmare Moon.
Celestia got tired of Twilight being lonely more quickly than in canon and sent her to Ponyville to have friends.
Pinkie Pie has already been living in Ponyville for some time.
Twilight will live with Shining Armor and Spike.
Twilight quickly becomes friends with Pinkie Pie.(faster than in canon!!!)
Twilight will become friends with the rest of the elements, only this time there will not be any magical artifacts.
If the cover image is anything to go by, this will be a Twidash story.
Rainbow Dash will get injured at some time in the story.

but I hate my name

That seemed really out of character for Pinkie. Have her say she likes pinkie more or something. Her saying she hates...Well anything is weird.

First off, I like it. Good start. Will read more.
I feel for what is happening to her. On the other hand she is doing better with this Betrayal then she does in "A Canterlot Wedding". Twi needs lots of Hugs.
It is nice that you saved Twi in the end by getting Pinkie to 'help' with the dishes.
<Anything below this is just comment on how I feel about what Twilight is having to deal with.>

I don't know how Twilight can put up with betrayal; from EVERYONE (but Pinkie).
It is sad how normal it is in real life for parents to treat kids like dolls. If the kid does not have as many friends or play a sport, their kid must be missing something. So, they go and 'fix' it.
You can see how happy she was. People she should be able to trust, don't think about her feelings. They don't even ask why she does not "hung out’ with [her] peers". It sounds like she uses to have friends, but they only used her.:fluttershysad:

Yes, Twilight should interact with more people. Maybe do what they did in the show. Send her there long term for something. One of the best ways to learn, is to teach. Tell her that while Ponyvile does well in their young filly and colt education, cost cutting is keeping Ponies that want to learn; from it.
You give Twilight what she wants (to grow/learn/teach), while at the same time 'allowing' her to find true friends (AKA. frenemies).

Also, if I was twilight, I would have kicked my BBBFF in between his lags. The parents, Shining Armor, and Celestia have a lot to be forgiving for.(Betrayal is a big thing for me. :rainbowdetermined2:)

I'll give this story a shot, but I was kind of hoping for a sequel to All the Time in Equestria.

Comment posted by Fox-Sama deleted Mar 12th, 2013

I just love both stories, at least so far... I admit that while i would love the sequel, i woudn't be offended by you updating this story...

I am intrigued, amused, and I shall be keeping a close eye on this. I'm glad to see you're back to writing!

Did the world need a high school Twidash romance that wasn't humanized?

Yes. Yes it did. Off to a very fun and playful start. :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

Definitely needed a TwiDash of this variety, and even though we haven't even met Rainbow yet in the story, it definitely has promise.

When I saw the story title and description, you had my interest. Now, you have my attention :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

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How in the hell did you beat me here? I wake up at bloody 6 AM and checking fimfic is the first thing I do!

On a more important topic, story looks awesome, normally I avoid AU like the plague, but seeing both Bats and Timaeus on here giving it good reccomendation made me read it, and it was well worth it. Looking forward to where this goes, and, of course, the Twidash.

OOooooooo~!

Love it! :pinkiehappy:

Let's see...
Well, this was one of the first stories that I fell in love with immediately, just because of the flow. It's.... almost perfect. It's addicting, for some reason. Don't know why. It makes me love it immediately. I haven't had this fun reading a few thousand words since that advance shipping fic I found a few months ago.
The concept is a awesome idea, and I love the characterization. It felt real, like the actual characters were in it. Plus, I like the idea of the whole high school thing, without it being one of those "I'm pairin' the entire cast with OC's of myself!" thing that's been done a million times.
Sorry, I have a chip on my shoulder when it comes to romantic OC's.
After that, I love how you worked around the whole Twilight moving to Ponyville thing differently, while making it believable. Not many writers can rework things like that and make them stick. And for that, I thank you.
After that, It just feels... loved. Like you put love and care into writing it. It didn't read as if it was forced, or that you were writing it for the fav's, It felt like you wrote it to tell a story that you needed to tell. And that was awesome.
It was just.... great. Thank you.

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I win because I woke up at 5 and checked FimFic right away! The early bird gets the worm Kodeake! VICTORY!

Fun story and off to a great start please continue.

Well. Everyone, take a note. This is how you write a fucking amazing hook.

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Hello friend that I see EVERYWHERE. :3

<3 DarqFox

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of course tim is everywhere(on the twidash fics i read)
he can be anywhere at anytime even in two places at the same time by going some place at one point in time fixing it and going to another place at the same time he went to the other proble(yime travelling box guy)after all he does have the tardis

>Cover Image has a clearly beaten and crying Dash being consoled by Twilight
>Gilda is in the tags
>AU No Holds Barred

PLEASE tell me this is going where I really hope this is. I've been waiting for a story like this forever.

Wow, I love where this is going, i'm interested to see how this will lead into the cover photo!

Definitely a good start FOX… but seriously… You need to put out more chapters so one could get a better feel for it, and at a much higher pace then currently. I know coming from me that's a bit of an oxymoron, but I was writing two stories and once, realized that wasn't really working for me, and then did something about that.

Although there is one thing I can comment on… This story deserves a dark tag already!!! I mean honestly! Turning your little sister into a dishwashing slave!!! I hate doing the dishes!!! Shining Armor needs to get his butt kicked pronto!!! You just don't do that to your little sister!!! Ahhhhh!!!

Also, I know the pain Twilight feels that being transferred to a new school, as I was growing up I moved a lot… No seriously a lot! The longest stretch a head in one class was three years… The shortest was a couple months. And for some reason many grown-ups don't understand just what that does to a kid. They just things they'll bounce back because they are made of rubber and magic, so there's no problem. I really feel for Twilight in this story, being uprooted when you don't want to just sucks.

That's all for me Fox! Have a nice one! And you should really start writing more on the story, since I think you could really turn it into something special.

It's not dead! :pinkiehappy:
Twilight calling the principal a bitch? :pinkiegasp: :twilightblush:

it's alive! so, when's the next update due?

Nice, hope there's more soon.

A very pleasant surprise to wake up to on a Saturday morning :twilightsmile:

And poor Twilight, I can only imagine how much that must suck. You pulled off the confusion, desperation, and anger at basically being sent away from everything she knew and loved quite well. And yes, that principal is a bitch.

EDIT: Suck it Skeeter.

Nice! Though I really would've liked if Twilight pulled Rainbow through the mud with her magic. At least twice. And maybe slam her into the puddle a couple of times... I really like Rainbow usually but I just feel like she kinda deserves it for being a bitch. In the show she hadn't been a jerk when they first met but here... Make her pay!:flutterrage:

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I am truly happy that some one caught on to the similarity of this and Episode one of Rainbow's and Twilight's first meeting.
I thought long and hard on this and I am glad it was for nothing.

Thank you for reading. and don't worry Twilight can only take so much before she snaps. But then again how can Twi stay mad at such a cute pony?

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Fear not the Evil mar....principal will have.. ops. I see, to ave forgotten what I had planed for her LOL.

you you know what that means. I will need some Ideas. what should I do with her?

For some reason, this isn't showing up in my list for updated chapters I have not read. Luckily I was doing random searching online for something unrelated, and saw the pic, which linked me to here. Not sure what would cause it to not show up. Added email updates just so I can track this if the site isn't going to for me.

*Edit*

It did finally show up.

I also finally got around to reading it, looking forward to more :).

odd, this didn't show in my updates. Good thing I check my favorites semi-regularly. Anyway, look's interesting so far, looking forward to more.

So, Rainbow's with Lyra... :duck: Is this going to be a TwiDash or no? ~.- :twilightsheepish: just curious

... Chapter 3? Are you still alive? If yes, please update! If no... Well... Don't update? Not that you would be able to anyway...
Edit: I just realised that was a bit morbid and that kind of humour is perhaps unsuitable. Please forgive me! Unless you are dead. In which case I'm entirely justified.

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Yes I am alive, and I am getting ready to start writing again , Sorry for being gone had a little problem wit ha fire.

But I live!! and will beback writing soon. on that note, I will need a new beta'test reader. if anyone wants the job you let me know!!!

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Well, I suspect many if not all of my friends are out judging from the state of their writing. However, if you'd have me, I'd love to help where I can! I'm far from a good writer myself but I'm fairly adept at spotting errors. If you can put up with my sense of humour, that is.
P.S. I'm glad you are indeed alive. Otherwise we'd have had to miss out on more chapters. And we can't have that now, can we?

Oh god I drew that? GAH I have improved since then...

5202795 so is this story dead...or what?

5202795 so is this story dead...or what?

5202795 seriously, is this story ever going to be continued?

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