A stormy and dark night would have completed the visual picture that was her current predicament. Despite being in complete symbiosis with the multiple minds of the Goddess, she had somehow been overtaken by a mere shotgun. Her horn was flung off and with it any magic that she could cast. Inadvertently, this also severed her connection with the greater mind that did all the thinking for her.
Her tale begins in a somewhat humble town called Fondsprings.
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Fallout: Equestria was originally thought up by Kkat.
Fallout and all subsequent games are owned by Bethesda Game Studios.
I gain no profit for writing this and it is solely meant for entertainment purposes.
Comedy tag not included due to my inability to keep the story amusing as a whole.
Chapters (20)
Huh, I didn't think one vote would be enough to convince me to publish this.
I guess that shows what I know.
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Cheers!
I'm... intrigued by your premise. A F:E fic that seems to simultaneously mock and earnestly pursue the Mary Sue? You are on my "Read Later" list for a rainy day.
Well done. You've joined the multitude of fics that is my read later list
Looks hood so far
I'll download that as eBook and start to read it today, since I finished another F:E story today.
This is actually really good, I would like to see the hiatus turned into an incomplete and you post new chapters.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
5045459 , Be careful what you wish for.
There may be unforeseen consequences that can never have sufficient preparation.
5058657 I just want to see this story finished.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
Mmm, good new vegas memories. Worth seeing where this goes :D
Dovah-corn!
You do know that stimpaks in Fallout Equestria are healing potions right?
Shouldn't she start healing from the radiation coming off the exploded carriage? Alicorns heal from radiation after all. Not to mention, get more powerful and bigger when they absorb a lot of it.
Looks like Piani Just- *Puts on sunglasses* -took out the trash.
Piani is now the dragonborn!
I'm starting to think you are making references that reference her name, what with that Aura Whisper skill from Skyrim she now has. Well at least she won't need a Pipbuck to see were everyone is now.
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Just because one heals from radiation does not make one immune to fire damage or the force of impact from exploding debris.
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That's why I asked. She got heart from the explosion so shouldn't she be getting healed from the radiation coming off the carriage now that the explosion is over? Fire damage or not her regeneration factor should have kicked in a little, right?
5254538 , Hrm... maybe a little. However, she didn't really stick around that particular carriage long enough for her to notice anything.
Intentionally bad or not, I still think it's great. It's definitely going in my favorites shelf.
Fondsprings...? Really? Even if this is intended to be bad, I expected better of you.
Ah, yes. Casual hematophagy. That won't draw unwelcome attention at inconvenient moments, no-sir-ee.
If only canon Boone were this insightful. ED-E is the best companion.
This makes me wish the New Vegas campaign could be delegated to various companions so that you could complete the objectives in parallel... but I guess that would be multiplayer.
I may be extremely late to the party, but I want to say a few things.
One, for anyone who is familiar with New Vegas, this is an absolute romp. You say it's meant to be deliberately bad, and that shows, but I make the case that parody requires more than passing knowledge of the subject being parodied and, more importantly, no small amount of skill. You have written what amounts to a condensed retelling of the main plot of New Vegas, but with characters who, while initially cardboard cutouts, and despite their silly depiction, evolve to become genuinely likeable and original.
Two, about that skill. Now, obviously, from a storytelling perspective, this isn't terribly original (although, the argument could be made for originally terrible, but delightfully so). That said, from a technical standpoint, your narration, sentence flow, structure, dialogue, scene pacing, and consistency are all good. Surprisingly good, in fact, considering my initial impression of the first few chapters and your description of your character in that forum thread (The cathartic one).
I can't help but think that, given your prolific library, you could have done yourself more justice than a parody.
That brings me to three. Merry-Stewed, in my opinion, does not feature as its protagonist a Mary Sue. Sure, the literal bloodthirst is edgy, but it's lampshaded as being strange. Sure, Forte Pianissimo is the Dovahcorn and learns a Shout, but as far as strange abilities go, Aura Whisper already has an equivalent in Fallout (or at least in Fallout 4, in the form of Berry Mentats).
Sure, she's an alicorn and she's overpowered--except she isn't. You nipped that in the bud right away.
The amnesia... okay, I would say that's cliched, but that's literally Courier 6.
I could go on and on, but I'll end it by saying this last chapter made me want to see more of Forte's adventures. You wrote a compelling story, an 80k word novel, admittedly not the greatest in ideas, but still fun and enjoyable to read, in about two years, then topped it off later with what wound up being my favorite chapter. I've been working on one story for nearly seven years now, though I published it only in 2017... and I have about as much feedback on it as this story.
I can understand why this story would fall under the radar; I admit, I would not have heard of or read it had you not posted in that thread. It's basically a copy-paste of New Vegas, "deliberately bad."
Except you failed there, in my opinion. I thoroughly enjoyed it, and wish there were more of Forte's story to read.