Drastic Measures
“Lethe, come on!” Hoplite whined as he buckled the last piece of his armor on.
“You’re still complaining?” Lethe replied as she rolled her eyes, playing with Hoplite’s helmet in her hooves.
“This is serious, Lethe!” Hoplite exclaimed as he reached a hoof out to his helmet.
Lethe hissed as she pulled it away.
“Come on!” Hoplite complained.
“Why should I?” Lethe asked as she raised an eyebrow.
“Shining Armor is going to tan my flank if I tell him I lost part of my uniform!”
“So it is my fault that you decided to bet all of it away in a game of strip poker?”
“I…” Hoplite muttered as he fell to his haunches. “I thought I was going to win…”
“You should be thanking me instead!” Lethe exclaimed as she held onto her prize. “Even though you bet your helmet for the rest of your gear, I still gave your stuff back. And now you’re mad at me even though, out of the generosity of my heart, I gave the rest of your uniform back.”
“But I still need my helmet!”
“Well you should have just folded instead.”
“But I had four aces!”
“And I had a straight flush. Tough luck.”
“There was no way you had a hoof higher than mine!”
“But I did.”
“You had to be cheating.”
“Hey!” Lethe snapped as she brought her head right in front of Hoplite. “I didn’t cheat, got that? I won because I can read you like a book.”
“But—”
“No butts! Not even Celestia or Luna’s! I won. You lost. That is all there is to it.”
“But you’re not even going to use it…”
“I will.”
“How?”
“Hmmm…” Lethe replied as she rubbed her chin.
“Lethe, seriously, just give me back my hel—”
“Aha!” Lethe suddenly exclaimed. She took the helmet and placed it on top of her own helmet. She stood at attention and puffed out her chest, two helmets stacked atop her head.
There was a loud thud as Hoplite’s face hit his hoof. “Lethe… what are you doing?”
“That is no way to speak to your superior, Private!” Lethe snapped.
There was another loud thud. “Lethe… we are both privates.”
“Nuh uh.”
“Yes huh, now stop acting like an idiot, and give me my helmet back.”
“Don’t sass me, Private!” Lethe chastised sternly as she pointed her hoof at him.
“Lethe, for the last time you don’t outrank me… we are both privates.”
“That is double private to you!” Lethe stated with a grin.
“Wait, what?” Hoplite asked as his eyes widened. “How does that work?”
“Double the hat, double the stat,” Lethe replied with a smirk.
“It does not work like that!”
“Somepony sounds jealous…”
“I’m not jealous!”
There was a soft click as the door between them opened slightly, a blue hoof appearing as neither of the two guards took notice.
“Ahem,” a soft voice called out.
Both Lethe and Hoplite snapped to attention. “Princess Luna!” they both said in unison.
“At ease, you two,” Luna replied as she walked out and stood in front of the two. An eyebrow arched up as she took a look at the two. “Private Lethe, may I ask why you are wearing two helmets?”
“Won it in a bet, ma’am,” Lethe replied, her face serious.
“And Private Hoplite, may I ask why you are not wearing a helmet?” Luna asked.
“I… I lost it in a bet…” Hoplite muttered as he wilted.
“I see,” Luna said as she rubbed her chin. “And I can presume that this ‘bet’ was between you two?”
Both guards nodded, Lethe more vigorously.
“Very well,” Luna said with a slight shrug. “Private Hoplite.”
“Yes, Princess?” Hoplite replied as he stood back at attention.
“You should never bet against Private Lethe,” Luna remarked with a smirk.
“That’s double private, Princess,” Lethe interrupted.
“Yes, Double Private Lethe. As I was saying, Private Hoplite, she doesn’t lose,” Luna replied with a smile.
Hoplite hung his head again. “I know…”
“Anyway,” Luna said, “my sister is finally asleep. I am going to make an announcement about what is going on, so I want you to make sure that Celestia is not disturbed. Do not let anypony bother her. Is that clear?”
“Aye aye, Princess!” Lethe replied with a salute, a wicked, toothy grin on her face.
“Lethe…”
“Yes, Princess?”
“No lethal force.”
“What?” Lethe whined, her helmets rattling.
“Lethe…”
“Fine…” Lethe said as she fell on her haunches, crossing her forehooves.
“Good, now, make sure no pony disturbs my sister.”
“Yes, Princess,” Hoplite and Lethe replied with a salute, Lethe’s shoulders drooping slightly.
The two guards watched as Princess Luna walked out of sight. Hoplite glared at his partner. “Why didn’t you tell me Princess Luna was here?” he hissed.
“Hey,” Lethe replied as she raised her hooves. “Don’t get mad at me because you passed out when you saw your boss in socks.”
“I did not!” Hoplite cried out, his face turning red.
“Yeah, yeah. You just took a nap, right?”
“I—”
“Mmmhmmm, just resting your eyes.”
“I-I…” Hoplite stammered.
There was a thump as Hoplite sat down. “Did Princess Luna get mad when she saw me?”
“Nah, I just threw your armor on and said you were not feeling well. Just needed a minute to lay down. It worked.”
“Oh… thanks.”
“Yep.”
“Can I have my helmet back?”
“Fat chance.”
There was a loud murmur throughout the throne room. The entire palace staff and both the Day and Night guard stood shoulder to shoulder in the cramped room. Most of the Night Guard and the staff that worked the graveyard shift yawned and rubbed their eyes. There were a few shouts between ponies, shoving one another as they tried to make room.
Soft hoofbeats filled the room as Luna appeared from behind the throne. She stood there, closing her eyes and puffing out her chest. She hated to admit it, but she did like when ponies gave her a bow, especially after her long vacation.
Seconds passed. There was no sound of shuffling hooves or ponies scrambling to bow, just silence. Luna opened her eyes, gasping ever so slightly as she looked at the crowd.
They all stood there, their eyes wide and jaws open, a blush on most of their faces.
“What?” Luna asked nervously. “Is… is something wrong?”
Again seconds passed.
“Is that a nurse outfit?” a pony called out in the back.
“Oh,” Luna said with a blush. “How silly and inappropriate of me.” With a clap of her hooves, Luna’s crown replaced the nurse’s cap on her head. “There, much better.”
The crowd continued to stare, their blushes more prevalent.
Luna coughed into her hoof. “Now, I know many of you ponies are wondering why I have summoned you. Sadly, my sister has caught the flu.”
A loud gasp came from the audience.
“Now, now, there is no need to worry. It is just a simple illness, and my sister will make a full recovery.”
There was a collective sigh of relief among the ponies.
“Now, being a good sister and following an ancient law that my sister had placed, it is my duty to take care of her until she recovers.”
The ponies in the crowd nodded in agreement.
“With my sister and I unable to perform our normal duties, beside raising and lowering the sun and the moon, it is up to you fine ponies to run Equestria in our absence,” Luna announced with a smile. “I am confident that you are up the task. You are the best of the best.”
Another loud gasp filled the room.
“Wait, what?” a pony cried out.
Silence filled the room.
Suddenly, another pony cried out. “Wait, you mean we have to work?”
“What?” Luna asked, her face scrunched in confusion before she let out a laugh. “Oh, I see, this must be some clever, modern joke. Tis most funny. Surely my sister didn’t do all the work while I was gone.”
Yet another silence descended upon the room.
“Sure…” the crowd mumbled.
“Excellent,” Luna said with a smile and a clasp of her hooves. However, her smile slowly disappeared as she saw the desperate faces of her little ponies.
They must be so sad knowing my sister is sick, Luna thought as she rubbed her chin with a hoof. Always about my sister, probably worrying over her large posterior. What about me? Where is my thanks for taking care of her? Shouldn’t I get some affection too?
Luna gasped as her eyes widened. “Excuse me, my little ponies,” she called out. She watched as the entire room looked at her. Taking her cue, she took a few steps away from the throne before stopping. Remembering the advice from Chef Ram Sea, she gave her flank the slightest of shakes with a flick of her tail.
There was a loud crash.
Luna looked back. Most of her subjects had collapsed to the ground. The few that were standing were trying to hide their beet-red faces. With a satisfied ‘hmph’, she took her leave.
After exiting the throne room, the Night Princess gave a small jump in the air, pumping her hoof. “The Moon Flank still has it!” she cried out.
Hoplite’s head felt empty and cold without his helmet. His eyes scanned the bat pony next to him, his helmet sitting half-hazardly on top of another helmet.
He let out a large sigh.
“Something wrong, Private?” Lethe asked.
“We are both privates…”
“Double private.”
“Lethe… just no.”
“You know, if I am a double private, then that must make you a half private.”
“What?!”
“Well, you don’t have a helmet, so….”
“It does not work like that!”
“Then how does it work, hmmm?”
“I… I,” Hoplite stammered.
“Exactly!” Lethe exclaimed. “You don’t know, now shush.”
Hoplite hung his head for the hundredth time that day.
The two stood there, a silence between them.
“Hey, hey!” a voice called out.
Lethe and Hoplite both turned their head towards the end of the hallway. Lethe let out a loud groan as she saw none other than Prince Blueblood walk up to them.
“Why him?” Lethe whispered to herself.
Blueblood stopped before the two guards, his nose held high. “I need to speak with the Princess.”
Hoplite tugged on his breastplate. “Um, sorry Prince Blueblood, but Princess Celestia is not seeing anyone right now.”
“What, why not?” Blueblood replied as he raised an eyebrow.
“Sorry, but we have orders. Princess Celestia is not to be disturbed at all.” Hoplite stated.
“Nonsense. I just heard the news that my aunt is sick, and I want to see her. I am family after all, so I think I count as an exception,” Blueblood calmly stated.
“I am sorry, Prince Blueblood, but we have our orders.”
“I do not have time with this. I will deal with the consequences later,” Blueblood said as he gently pushed Hoplite out of the way.
Lethe’s eye twitched, her teeth clenching.
“Woah there,” Lethe replied as she jumped in front of prince. “Didn’t you hear him? She is not seeing anypony right now. So beat it.”
“Excuse me?” Blueblood exclaimed, a hint of annoyance in his voice. “What did you say to me?”
“You heard me, beat it,” Lethe said, jabbing Blueblood’s chest with her hoof.
Blueblood jump back, a look of disgust in his face. “How dare you touch me you… you peasant!”
Lethe frowned as she took a step forward. “Who you calling a peasant, chump?”
Blueblood took a step back, his face contorting in rage. “W-what did you call me?”
“You heard me, chump.”
Blueblood body quaked in anger, his face turning red. “You insolent b—”
“Holy crap, there is a changeling behind you!” Lethe interrupted as she pointed her hoof.
“What?” Blueblood yelped as he instantly turned around.
There was a sparkle in Lethe’s eye and a wicked grin on her face as she grabbed her extra helmet and swung it down with vicious force.
There was a loud crash as Blueblood dropped to the floor, a large bump on his head.
“Lethe!” Hoplite gasped.
“What?” Lethe asked as she looked down at the pony before her.
“W-what did you do?”
“Following orders, duh.”
“You just attacked Prince Blueblood!”
“No, I was making sure that doofus didn’t bother Princess Celestia. Remember our orders?”
"But... but Princess Luna said no lethal force!"
“Hmmm,” Lethe said as she rubbed her chin with her hoof. She gave Blueblood a gentle buck. The prince let out a gurgle in response. “See, he’s still alive. Pretty sure he has a thick skull.”
“But… but,” Hoplite replied, his eye twitching frantically.
Lethe, however, looked down at her extra helmet. A large dent had appeared in it. She pushed it towards Hoplite. “You can have your helmet back. I don’t want it anymore.”
There was a clanking of armor as Lethe and Hoplite carried Blueblood.
“By Celestia’s Sun, why did you hit Blueblood?” Hoplite groaned as he carried Blueblood’s hindlegs.
“I was following orders!” Lethe hissed as she held Blueblood’s forelegs. “Also, Luna has a Moon, you know.”
“What?” Hoplite asked as he blinked. He shook his head. “What does that have to do with anything? Regardless, you knocked him out!”
“Following orders.”
“Don’t you think you went a tad too far? Seriously, he just wanted to see his aunt.”
“He called me a peasant!” Lethe exclaimed as she threw her hooves in the air, dropping the prince.
Hoplite grunted as he stumbled forward. Sighing, he gently placed the prince down. “Lethe, you can’t hit somepony whenever you want, especially Prince Blueblood. He is royalty after all.”
“I don’t care! Nopony insults me like that!”
There was a thud as Hoplite’s hoof met his face. “Look, just let take care of this, okay?”
“Fine,” Lethe said with a groan, picking up Blueblood again.
Hoplite looked down at Blueblood’s lower half. He turned his head away as he picked him up again. “Why am I carrying his lower half?”
“I gave you back your helmet, didn’t I?”
Hoplite looked up at his helmet. “Yeah, with a massive dent in it.”
“Not my problem.”
Hoplite let out a loud sigh. “So… where are we taking him?”
“Don’t worry, I got this.”
The two guards continued before stopping in front of a plain wooden door.
“Ok, we’re here,” Lethe said as she dropped the prince again.
“What, where?” Hoplite asked as he looked around.
“There,” Lethe said as she pointed at the door.
Hoplite turned his head.
There was a heavy silence between the two.
“Lethe…”
“Yeah?”
“Thats a closet!”
Another silence.
“And?”
“We can’t do that!”
“Yeah, we can, and yeah, we are.”
“That is so illegal!”
“Do you want him to see you when he wakes up?”
Hoplite looked away, biting his lower lip. “Fine, but this is all on you!”
“Yeah, yeah,” Lethe replied with a roll of her eyes while opening the door. “Just shut yer yap, and help me.”
“I can’t believe I am doing this…” Hoplite said as he picked up the unconscious prince.
“Then don’t,” Lethe replied as she dragged Blueblood into the closet. “Pretend this was all a dream. It’ll help my cover story.”
The two guards looked down at the prince, his head resting on a broom.
“You sure he will be okay?” Hoplite asked.
“Yes,” Lethe replied as she slammed the door shut. “Let’s get out of here before somepony sees us!”
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Yes, I am still here.
Sorry for the long wait, but I have been really busy with stuff. Research, class, grad school, etc.
I do love those two...
Hope you guys enjoy it!
who needs to see a movie when you can just watch those two. that right there is enough entertainment
Dat lethe
That was hilarious! I especially loved that scene with Blueblood and Luna shaking her flank like that!
I'm surprised Hoplite didn't try this, though:
Hoplite: Princess Luna ordered that Celestia not be disturbed. Everything but lethal force has been authorized to carry out those orders.
Blueblood: You wouldn't!
Hoplite: Not me, here. *points at Lethe*
Lethe: How much blood can you lose before bleeding to death? Just curious.
AWATED JUSTICE!
thanks for the update!!
YES!! Man i love Lethe and Hoplite, they are best OCs
the world needs more shenanigans
Things you shouldn't do with Lethe:
Invade her kitchen
Play strip poker
Call her "peasant"
>> Double Private Lethe [beatdown] Prince Blueblood
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So do I...my friend, so do I...
That's why I'm hoping to cameo them in my latest story.
Luna should use that Moon Flank of hers more often.
I have no idea where I'm getting the idea from, but I imagine Lethe sounding like Vanellope from Wreck-It Ralph and Hoplite sounding like Nicholas Cage.
and the fic lives again
Those two are so CUTE TOGETHER
I approve of Mooning.
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~Someone's been playing a little too much Titanfall~
I think it's me. But it could also be you. I'm not too sure. That insomnia's really killing me.
*Five seconds later*
>> Life [Insomnia] ultra1437
Oh my god, lulu! You naughty girl!
"Pretend this was all a dream. It’ll help my cover story.”
Lol!
4130540 it's a sexy mass destruction weapon
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and, seriously? Ponies are so lazy that let Celestia do all the work alone?
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Its the government.
This is AWESOME! I love these two characters!
Revenge is best served cold
But nurse Luna is awsome
This whole chapter was hilarious. Double Private Lethe, the Government being shock by having to work, Luna's flank, Blueblood, all brilliant. Great job! Looking forward to more, as always
I missed those two characters! I seriously could not stop laughing by the end of this chapter!
Lethe forgot to lock the door and put a bookshelf in front of it
I'm pretty sure you'd get a medal for knocking out Blueblood.
Hmmm.....Lethe has Team fortress logic. Bravo
4135125 What do you mean by that? Just curious.
Oh, I get it! She's called "Lethe" because she only knows how to use Lethal force!
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Yep!
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Indeed
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They are actually my favorite characters too, along with Ram Sea.
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That list is probably much longer.
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Still kicking.
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Dawnscroll's line.
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Actually....
Blueblood didn't really do anything out of line. I mean his aunt was sick, and he just wanted to check up on her. I mean yes, Lethe and Hoplite did have orders, but he is royatly and family. There is probably some exception in there.
Problem is, Lethe has a problem with authority. Soo....
But yeah, BB was wrong for calling Lethe a peasant. But at least his heart was in the right place (seeing if his family is okay.)
But it is Lethe, so logic gets bashed and stuffed in a closet.
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Indeed it is. More hats=more stats.
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Team Fortress 2 is a game created by Valve. At first there was no add on to the game, but then they started to introduce hats. Hats are a big, big, thing in the game, and there a few of them that are highly sought after. Believe it or not, Valve makes money from TF2 mainly by hats (or so we think.)
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Actually, I think Lethe is Greek. Same with Hoplite.
It still seems fitting regardless XD.
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Still funny as hel!
Neon, Frau Lethe! Zat is not ze Jaegermonster vay! Hyu win hat, und hyu vear hat vit pride! Und if hyu hat get dent, hyu still vear hat, hyu just make head fit hat!
4136147 I play the game. But now that you mention it, it does have the same idea as a Noble Amassment of Hats, right? I think, I can't remember all the names.
You know, my friend, I know that Lethe is probably your own creation and all that, and that she may or may not have a problem with authority, but for me, she's just nothing more than a stupid, stuck-up b*tch!! I HATE characters like that!
That poor Hoplite guy is just being tortured just for the sake of getting tortured. The rest of the story's great, but each time there's a segment with Lethe and Hoplite, there's nothing more than that I want to say 'F*ck You!' to her! Yes, there's also Midnight Blossom and Comet Burst in The Golden Armor, but what makes the relation between Midnight Blossom and Comet Burst great is that they are in love, and that Midnight Blossom is nothing more than a fun prankster towards Comet Burst, and that they both work together.
Lethe on the other hand... She had tried to KILL Hoplite just for a misunderstanding! Also, Comet Burst is a stallion who can stand his own. Hoplite on the other hand... He's nothing more than a whimp. If I was in the same position of him, I would have smacked Lethe four times on the first night alone! If you aren't going to bring her to justice of smashing Hoplite's helmet into his face, then I have no hope for this fanfic anymore.
I don't want to say that this is bad or anything, but Lethe is just a character that I truly despise! Comet Burst and Midnight Blossom in The Golden Armor had some redeeming qualities, but Hoplite and Lethe just don't have anything!
Sorry for the rant, I just had to get this off of my chest. For the rest, this fanfic is pretty funny, but there are just a few flaws that stick out as sore thumbs, such as that annoying plot point of Luna wanting some recognition that is coming up more and more. I can understand that Luna wants some more attention, but by shaking your a** at the front of a crowd of people isn't going to help any matters.
P.S. Show us some more Ram Sea. The human Ramsey is already funny, but an Equestrian version of the foul mouthed Scottish cook?! Even better!
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Yep!
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I see your point, but let me make some clarifications.
So first off, Lethe, Hoplite, and Chef Ram Sea DO NOT belong to me, they belong to Dawnscroll. I had no input in their creation when Dawnscroll made them for his story, (which I totally love), A Slice of Life. Simply put, I liked the story and the OCs so much, I asked Dawnscroll if I can use them. Dawnscroll helps me with the chapters that I use his OCs in. Basically I make the chapter, and he goes through it making sure that his characters are not going off from his canon. This story is set in the same universe as A Slice of Life.
I have talked to Dawnscroll about his characters, I wanted to know more about them. I do not know what Dawnscroll is planning for them. But here is what I do know. Lethe and Hoplite's relationship, as of right now, is supposed to be very ambiguous. We don't know what exactly is going on between the two. I don't know who Midnight Blossom or Comet Burst are, so I cannot comment about them.
But here is my take on Lethe and Hoplite. This is from reading A Slice of Life and working on this. I do not think she is a jerk overall. Let me explain. Remember that there is back story to them in A Slice of Life. So here is what I think. Remember, this is what I think, and I have no idea if it is right or not.
1: Yes, Lethe constantly has fun (or pokes fun) at Hoplite. But I think there is a deeper connection between the two. In A Slice of Life, the two cooks, Copper Kettle and Silver Whisk, ask Lethe if she can do the same thing she does to Hoplite to them. To them, having the attention of a mare is totally worth. But Lethe responds by saying no, saying that Hoplite is the only one. She only does this to Hoplite really. Hoplite is hers so to speak.
Here are some examples:
And
So like I said, Hoplite is special to Lethe. We don't know how special, but for some reason, Lethe really only does her whole speal with Hoplite.
Lastly for Lethe, yes she did strangle Hoplite thinking he knocked her up. But look at her expression at the end when he told her the truth.
and
So for me, it seems to me that Lethe holds Hoplite to some importance to her. So I don't think she is a jerk. She does not deal well with authority, hence why she is still a private.
But because she does not deal with authority well, she is actually close friends with Luna. Luna wants friends, and it is hard to make them when everyone treats her like royalty or NMM. But Lethe treats her like her friend. Yes, Lethe is loyal to Luna. Why she said "Luna has a moon you know" when Hoplite said "By Celestia's Sun.
Now to Hoplite. I believe, that deep down, even through all the teasing Lethe gives, Hoplite enjoys her company in the end. At first he did not like her, but even through everything they been through, they are still a duo. If Hoplite truly, truly did not like Lethe, he could have begged or pleaded to be with anyone else. But he hasn't. In the end, he always go with Lethe's plan. I think he like the attention he gets from Lethe. Here is a line that sums up Hoplite's feelings for Lethe.
In that quote, Hoplite does not know what he really thinks about Lethe. He gets annoyed with her, he gets frustrated, but he still sticks through it. He still does it. So that leads me to believe that Hoplite is not the punching bag we think, but rather he lets Lethe do this. Because in the end, a cute girl is giving him attention. And I think deep down, he likes it.
Lastly, in terms of Luna. So yes this is set in the same universe of A Slice of Life. Both princesses tend to act over the top and silly.
But remember, Luna is upset because her sister still gets, to what she thinks, more attention. It is always "By Celestia's X" Where X is some innapproiate body part. Luna likes to be fawned at too, even it is a little bit.
So what she did, was to see if ponies thought she was attractive. Look she did not twerk or anything. It was just a small flick of flank. She just followed, and remember whos advice this was, Ram Sea's idea. The fact the she got that reaction is a self confidence boost. So she is not shaking her butt, but a classy flick so to speak. Something to catch them off guard, something to prove to her that she can compete with her sister.
And to your last question, yes. Ram Sea is coming back. Maybe sooner than you think...
So in the end, Hoplite and Lethe's relationship is very ambigious. We don't know if they have feelings, or they are just friends in their own way. So far, I think that is how Dawnscroll wants them right now.
Well I hope that helps.
4138562 Thank you for your kind words, my friend. Thanks for clearing that up for me.
I do remember these lines, and, well, it could very well be that there's something we don't know yet between Lethe and Hoplite, and I forgot that they aren't yours but from another writer's story.
In fact, I HAVE Slice Of Life on my personal favorites and I really wish that he would end up updating his story more. The last chapter of his was waay back somewhere in last year. Lethe and Hoplite may share a relation we do not know the existence yet, but I'll be honest, every time Lethe in on screen with Hoplite, there's always a brewing fit of rage in myself. I just can't help it.
Also, I'm more of a visual reader, I don't know about others, but when I read the line with Luna showing her flank, I DID saw something along the line of just flinging her butt, not twerking. Come to think of it, how DOES a Feral Mare twerk, anyways?
None of the matter, I just wanted to say to you, however which direction Dawnscroll takes with these two, whenever Lethe is being the b*tch she is in this and that other story right now, she makes me p*ssed. But that doesn't mean I don't like the story so far.
Keep up the good work, hopefully a new update will come soon and may your further writing projects be as grand as this one!
P.S. More Ram Sea?! And as soon as I would think?!
Well, get on working then, dang it!
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You and me BOTH want Dawnscroll to freaking update A Slice of Life. I have been waiting a long time for that. Hopefully this will inspire him to make more.
I put down "with a slightest of shakes", to me that sounds just gave it a flick. So those are the words that I thought I used. Just a flick.
For me, I don't understand how Lethe is being a jerk. The only time for me that she did go out of line was that she hit Blueblood because she got offended. But her being a jerk? To Hoplite?
Maybe because I have my own opinions on it, but I think Hoplite, whether he realizes it or not, gives in to Lethe's demand and ideas because he wants to. I think he has fun with it. He never had to play poker with Lethe. Lethe never forced him into it, but he gave in. Because maybe, maybe he would have more fun playing a game than standing there doing nothing. He never had to help Lethe with Blueblood, but he did.
I don't think he wants to admit it, but I think he craves the attention. Like when Lethe was sleeping on her, I bet he did like that. Because in the end, as Hoplite said to himself, he thinks Lethe is cute. And here is a cute girl giving him all this attention. I think he wants, and goes a long with her games and schemes.
Does this equal a relationship, I don't know. Hoplite already has a crush on Celestia. But that to me is out of his league. So he makes do with Lethe.
So in the end, I can't see Lethe being a jerk. What exactly is she doing that is making you see her that way? I can see her being lazy and eccentric. She only does what she does really to Hoplite alone.
If Hoplite didn't want the attention, and Lethe kept teasing him, then yeah. But I honestly see Hoplite enjoying just as much. He just does not want to admit it.
4138758 What does Lethe seem to me to be a jerk? Well, multiple reasons.
1. And that's the main reason, according to me, she's just being b*tchy towards Hoplite. In the latest chapter, after playing poker with Hoplite, she gave him most of his armor back, but she kept the helmet. I DID find the 'Double Private' rank quite funny, to be honest because it's just ridiculous, but just... The way how he kept his helmet away just for the sake of fun, even though Hoplite himself said that if Captain Armor finds out that he's missing his helmet, that he's going to be p*ssed again.
2. Whatever she's going to do with Blueblood is regarded as highly illegal, and she just goes with it. She even tags Hoplite along the way. Okay, granted, I DO know that she said that he just go along his way and that he eventually just tags along, it's still really annoying. Also, I know that Lethe got p*ssed because Blueblood called her a peasant. Again, granted, I would be pretty p*ssed too if someone said something like that to me, too, and Blueblood actually had no reason for calling her that name, but Lethe had barred the way for him to go look up on her aunt. Even if he's a total jerk, he does have his heart at family and that kinda made me rage a bit.
3. And the last reason, is by far the name calling of Lethe with Hoplite. Nothing horrible here, but it's just annoying that she just doesn't respect him, even though their actually the same rank.
Well, I pretty much summed all my pet peeves with her and I hope that this will help you measure her up a bit more. Not that I want you to tone her down a bit, since she's not your own character, but maybe you could send a PM or something to Dawnscroll to help him give her some much needed character development. She's a good character, not great, and underneath the massive pile of turd that she is, there are some pieces shining through, like you have noticed. It needs to be developed a bit more, and Lethe could be a great character.
P.S. Comet Burst and Midnight Blossom are the main characters in the fanfic The Golden Armor, and I think that Dawnscroll wanted to put his own take on these characters. They're also a pegasus stallion and she's a bat pony mare herself. Comet Burst is the serious guy, who takes his role as a Equestrian Guard really seriously, but Midnight Blossom is a fun loving, pranking girl.
It's written by a guy called Comet Burst. Here's the link.
http://www.fimfiction.net/stories/updated?unread=1&tracking=1&page=3
P.P.S. Sorry, I kinda forgot the real names of the characters in this story. They're actually called Comet and Angel respectively. I just remembered them as the picture Equestria Prevails drew with the pegasus guard and the bat pony night guard you have on your chapter with Celestia going to her sleeping room, too. The character that was the bat pony was nicknamed Midnight Blossom. Sorry for the miss-understanding.
Hmm. Ill answer your points.
1: Yes, Lethe took her helmet. But we don't know what she really was going to do with it. If Hoplite was going to get in trouble for losing it, Lethe would get in trouble for taking it. All they would have to do is find a pony with two helmets, one belonging to a completely different guard. What I think personally when I was writing it. She was just having fun with him. She did give everything back in the end. Like when Luna came back, Lethe bailed Hoplite out so he didn't get in trouble. I don't think she would let Hoplite get in trouble for that. I think she just found it funny at the moment. She was going to get bored with it anyway.
2. Hmm, gonna be honest on this one. Dawnscroll and I had disagreements at first when I made this scene. I did have to change it in the end. Not going to in detail here but I did change it. But this scene was out of fun really. I think if Dawnscroll thought about it, we can make a backstory for both of them. Maybe to explain their behavior. But that is another thing all together, one where I hope another series is made focusing on these two (and Ram Sea).
But we need to look at why she did it. Yes, she was insulted. But it is clear that she does not like Blueblood to begin with. That, and Blueblood pushed (albeit gently) Hoplite. I don't Lethe liked that. I don't think she likes it when Hoplite is disrespected (unless it is her that is doing it of course). Again, I think Hoplite holds a special place in Lethe, and Lethe is, in her own way, protective of him. I would say she is slightly possessive of him.
But yeah Blueblood, she did overreact there, but she was following orders. Celestia is sleeping, and Luna was serious about no one disturbing her. But yeah Lethe did go overboard (but part of the reason is that she just does not like him), and hence why she was set on putting him in a closet. She did not want to get in trouble, nor did she want Hoplite too.
3. Name calling? Do you mean calling Hoplite a private? As they are they are both privates. I mean Luna and Celestia calling them Private Hoplite and Private Lethe. Is that a problem? If so I did that so I can dot he double hat joke, that is Lethe reasoning to calling him a private just so she can set up the punch line.
And I hope it is clear that it is totally okay to have your opinion on Lethe. I just like having discussion is all. So hope not coming off that I have some problem or something.
Hoplite and Lethe were introduced in April 2012. The story you are referring to was made in Jan 2013. I don't know where Dawnscroll got the idea for these two, but it was not from that story. I think he told me it was an accident, I can't remember. But as for their looks, yeah their just normal looking guards. Nothing special about them.
But I want Dawnscroll to give more depth to them, well I just want him to make a story XD.
Also, I am trying to add a surprise to the Ram Sea one.
4136147 A hoplite was an ancient Greek soldier and I'm pretty sure there was something about Lethe in the presentation about ancient Greek war I gave today. Don't really remember.
Oh Hoplite, one day you will stop being Charlie Brown, one day...
That aside, great chapter! Tons of humor, sexy Luna showing her... values
, Blueblood getting what he deserves, and a good transition between what has happened between Luna and Celestia and how the outside world sees it, as alays a blast of a story that always leaves you with a smile 
PS: Wow Dawnscroll is still active? Paint me surprised.
This story is beautiful! Truly can't wait for the next chapter!
4130273 How about a movie starring those two?
can't for next chapter.
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that is brilliant. it might just put a number of comedies to shame
4146585 That number could easily be described as "all except Mel Brooks and Monty Python".
4147293 hmmm.......
they ring a bell but I cant place them
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Lethe was a river in Hades, and also means oblivion, forgetfulness, or concealment.
4140868
Hmmm, wouldn't say that. I think he secretly likes it when a pretty girl is giving him all this attention.
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Thanks!
4145161
I wish
4146585
Hehe, that is a lot of praise, thanks.
4147293
Yeah I think there is a very long list of funnier things ahead of this XD.
4149459 Hades is the god and the Underworld is the place Hades ruled. I cannot recall Hades being a place in Greek mythology.
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Yes and no. Yes as Hades IS the Greek God of the underworld. But also Hades itself is commonly used as the name of the underworld itself. It is...confusing.
Anyway I just wikipeida it. But the river Lethe was one of the rivers in the underworld.
4154185 I wouldn't trust wikipedia. Anyone can edit that stuff. ANYONE!!
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It is some place in the underworld. Just semantics at this point XD.