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Phil Ken Sebben


I used to write stories but don't anymore. Ha Ha! Permanent hiatus.

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Anon and Rarity hate each other, but when they get stranded on a desert island, can they work together to stay alive?


Thanks go to Sawhorse for the cover art.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 86 )

Awesome story bro.

Feeling the LOVE

BRONHOORN

2196857
Thanks! Glad you liked it.

Mind = Blown.

2197993
I hope that's a good thing, haha.

dont like the ending

2198063 After I pick it off the floor I'll tell you...:twilightsheepish:

2198069
Sorry. I didn't know how I wanted to end it. I had another "arc" planned for it, but it didn't fit with the rest of the story at all. Maybe I'll do a sequel or an epilogue or something that better explains it.

I seriously expected anon and rarity to be together at the end. Did not really expect some other other stallion.:unsuresweetie: not really satisfied. Good story though.

2198812
In my head, Rarity and Anon wouldn't go well together. They hated each other up until this point, and I don't think anything happened that would really constitute them getting together. The closest I could see them is good friends.
I'm glad you liked it otherwise, though.

2198220
cool good story bro

Great story, loved the end joke with the cupake, it was brilliant. :pinkiehappy:

2201080
Haha, glad you liked it. Not to toot my own horn, but I thought it was pretty funny, too.

I think the ending was very rushed.
You had a lot of suspense and interesting development going on, and it just fizzled out with a nary a whisper: there was no climax, no resolution.

I'll be following you as an author because you can come up with some interesting premises, but I'm sorry - this gets a down-vote from me.

» Mike

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I wouldn't say it's rushed, myself, seeing as I rewrote the ending like 10 times; it's more that what I WANTED to end with didn't fit the tone with the rest of the story and it felt out of place, so I ended with what I had. I might do an epilogue at one point, detailing what I REALLY wanted to go into.

2307270
Thank you! Glad you liked it!

Even though I am a Rarity hater, I enjoyed this story from start to end.

I found it excellently written, with a reasonable, non-bitchy portrayal of Rarity. And full of adventure, seriously what's with the lack of Adventure tag? Stranded-on-a-deserted-island type of stories are textbook examples of adventure stories.

However the ending could be better. I realize that her husband was introduced purely to prevent any kind of shipping, but it is too obvious of a writer's device.

It could be better without him, simply show that Rarity and Anonymous are just friends, or even leave the entire issue hanging.

2766879
I'm glad you liked the story. And yeah, I'm not a big fan of Rarity either, that's why I took up writing her, to challenge myself. As for the Adventure tag, I guess if they did more exploring or something, but I didn't consider just sitting there an adventure.
As for the ending, it was an experiment that I guess didn't work. I TRIED to leave it open to interpretation, and I've gotten a few theories about it. Some people told me they thought Anon liked Rarity but she mistook what he said and got with someone else. Some people said Anon was just trying to get her to stop focusing so much on work and find someone. So I didn't try to prevent shipping, I just didn't think it out very well. But technically, whatever you make of it is true, since I left it open.

2766932

You did well!

I love when people write of a character or in a setting they dislike, just to correct certain flaws the fans of said characters or settings don't see. The resulting deconstructions are usually much higher quality than the originals! For example I really loved Starman Ghost's TCB: Not Alone, too bad he didn't share this view and discontinued and deleted his story :/

Also, it's okay if people start theorycrafting about an ending that is open for interpretation, it highly increases the enjoyment of a work for any given reader. This is part of the reason Derpy Hooves is so popular, she basically has no fixed canon qualities, everything else is open to interpretation, and fans can cherry pick the qualities that are best for them.

...They didn't hook up. :pinkiesad2:

2970177
Alas, no. But they're good friends, now.

I finally got around to finishing this read. I was hoping they'd get together.

This is my favorite of your stories; showing how Rarity can be useful despite not having much love for her. I think the fact you dislike Rarity is one of the leading causes for why it intrigued me that you wrote her so well in this story. The fact she brick-wall style didn't get together with Anonymous despite the hint at desire he had for her at the end does feel like a bad end though. I enjoyed the rest of it alot though!

Here's an army of Raritys to keep Anonymous company~
:raritycry::raritydespair::duck::raritywink::raritystarry::raritydespair::raritycry::duck::trollestia::raritycry::raritydespair::raritywink:

2991056
I see a Celestia in there...
Really glad you liked it, though. This is probably my most liked story, next to Picking up the Pieces. And I like your interpretation of the ending; I've actually gotten that one a few times.

2992631
I think you should try more like this. Singling a character out into an unusual situation and seeing how well you can think how they would respond to it proved to be a spectacular experiment! Odds are not having to think of the process of six character personalities at once helps a ton too; just being able to focus on Rarity alone (well also Anonymous too) lets you really focus. It also lets the readers focus too. You ended up with something you just couldn't have managed if you had all seven characters in play.

Edit:
Then again I guess it's worth considering a challenge if you wanna try with multiple characters.

2992764
I've kind of had an idea for something like that. Since before I even thought of this one, in fact. It might be something to look into...

....why are you the one crying?!

Nothing you've said has been false and she has been dead weight at best!
The only thing you have to be sorry about is speaking the truth without using tact.

Epic I was laughing all the way:pinkiehappy:

3224157 Because hes not a heartless frog.:ajbemused:

2992853 So is this before the rape? Or is that a different universe?

4534748 Different universe. All of my stories are different universes with different characters, unless I specify it's a sequel/prequel/what have you.

4535896 Lol so rarity is hated in many different universes? Thats hilarious:pinkiehappy:

4536611 She's definitely not my favorite.

4537277 Same here but I find her personality more humorous than womanly:ajsmug:

Mad

So far this is a pretty cool fic, :twilightsmile:

Mad

3224157 Because it's more important to forgive than it is too fight. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Mad deleted Jul 22nd, 2014
Mad

First!!!! Sorry I couldn't resist :trollestia:

Mad

Poor Anon and Rarity, will they survive the storm!?! Stay tuned to find out in the next chapter of! A lifeboat made for two!

Mad

Ten spikes awarded to you sir! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Y'know I'm kinda glad they didn't end up together. Almost any other fic (hell most any other medium) would have had them date at least.

4793712 Yeah, haha. I saw them as friends but never "together".

Despite them not liking each other, they can co-operate and seek benefits for each other without being asked to. I like this fic's mindset.

Funny, even after the wake-up call, she continues to be a prissy little load. Anon really should stay alone, but alas, he's a wimp that feels guilty for saying the truth to an ungrateful fucker.

"Would you like to smell for yourself?" you say, shoving it in her face. She reacts as if you were offering her a bowl full of shit, but gives it a small sniff. Smelling nothing, she gives it another, stronger smell. Apparently satisfied, she rolls onto her side, allowing you full access to the gash.

No, penis! Bad! Bad! Down! This is not one of those kind of stories! :trixieshiftleft:

5568573 lel. I didn't even consider it could be taken that way

Im going to call it they are becoming best friends at the end. :pinkiehappy:

Eeeeh rain is good, rain means water and they need water. Why are they not collecting it?

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