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Dec/04: I'm putting this on hiatus for a few months until I can come back to work on it. Don't worry, I WILL be coming back to this when I have the time!

When the Cutie Mark Crusaders find that their special talents aren't for things that have been seen in Equestria in centuries, they aren't sure what to make of it. At least, not until a surprise letter from Princess Celestia reaches them, telling them that their lives are about to take a rather unexpected turn.

((First time Fanfic writer, so let's hope this goes well! I'll be updating when I can. Comments and reviews are welcome, I'm new to the whole fanfiction thing!))

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Comments ( 58 )

Still in the setup stage of the story. I'm not a fan of skipping right into the thick of things with no explanation, so bear with me as I get this party started!

169253 Very well...but this is true: otherwise this'd be in the MIDDLE of the story, and we don't want that, right?

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Great start, can't wait to see where it goes! I am glad you have a mind for decent pacing, i cannot stand writers who try to write a climax into every chapter. Love the buildup! Keep it up.

Eeeenteresinig.:pinkiecrazy:

Tracking...

Definitely gonna watch this, looks clever and well written. Good luck, and continue soon.

Definitely gonna watch this, looks clever and well written. Good luck, and continue soon.

Can't wait to see where you end up taking this

Part the second up! Only one more of these setup-type posts before we can start getting into the thick of it.
I have a chunk of 3d modeling and some scripting I need to get done tomorrow, but I'm going to aim for getting the third chunk written and posted sometime tomorrow evening.

Scootaloo would think of Cutie Mark Crusaders Black Ops. XD

Well, the last chunk of the prelude is shaping up to be a bit longer than I was expecting. This ain't going up tonight, I'll work on it more tomorrow.

Slalkerloo drop!

Keep up the good work mate :raritywink:

Just a note: I don't mind bad ratings, but please tell me what I'm doing that you don't like! If nobody tells me what to look out for in my writing, it's hard for me to fix it!

:trollestia: I HAVE NOT READ BUT IS NOT GOOD!!!! :trollestia:

Sorry to the few people watching this about the wait, school is eating most of my time. The next update will roughly double the total wordcount of this fic though, and should be up within the coming week.

The Last line!
:rainbowlaugh:
So much win!
:scootangel:

An absolutely silly but deliciously welcome update. I can't wait to see where you decide to go from here.

Off the top of my head.

CMC Black Ops Codebreakers
CMC Black Ops Spies
CMC Black Ops Infiltrators
CMC Black Ops Counter Terrorists
CMC Black Ops Hostage Rescuers
CMC Black Ops Riot Breakers
CMC Black Ops Sabotagers
CMC Black Ops Royal Gift Shoppers
CMC Black Ops Security Specialists
CMC Black Ops Bodyguards
CMC Black Ops Packet Retrieval
CMC Black Ops Royal Guard...

This one will be amusing.

Ps. Anyone notice how bullets also have a spin. XD

Offense, Demolitions and Engineering cutie-marks eh?

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Actually, due to the way that I intend to write this, any one of those might show up over time. Possibly all of them.

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Awesome! I have no idea what that site is :D

Nice way of handling things! It seemed as in character as possible (Despite the necessary bit of fanon thrown in for Stalkerloo) and the scenes played out just right! Great going! I look forward to more.

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Awesome, now get crackin' and give those crusaders something awesome and fun to do [lazy] so I don't have to steal your premise and do it myself.[/lazy]

CMC's are a lot of fun to write when I'm not pulling a rainbow dash and going... meh, I'll do it later.

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Now that classes are done for a few weeks, I intend to be spending a good deal of time writing. My productivity on this, at least for the next few weeks, should be several times what it was before.
Since now I don't have to worry about building 3d models, making an original minigame from scratch, and debugging java code every week.

i read this last night I WANT MOOORRRREEEEEE :rainbowkiss:

Man I'm glad I started reading this. I needed a laugh and I got one. :yay:
And Scootaloo, how did you get so good at sneaking? You're not doing anything bad are you?:scootangel:

Cherry pie filling. Cherry pie filling everywhere!
"Here chik-chik-chik-chik... I took care of Rainbow and now it's YOUR turn."
"Rarity be mad hatin!?forever if she finds out I was doing this!" *will be? Rarity Y U be hatin?
Note to self and anyone interested in sel-preservation, do NOT steal anything from Sugarcube Corner, do NOT steal from Pinkie Pie and probably most important DO NOT BREAK A PINKIE PROMISE! Ok? :pinkiehappy:

I approve of this.

~Chuck

i want more of this fic please please

Well, here comes trouble.

wow, this update was rather unexpected, after two months of being dead,
another awesome chapter!

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I don't intend to let this die, it's just that school got absolutely STUPID busy and I pretty well haven't had time to write. Don't worry, there's plenty more of this in store, it's only waiting on time for me to work.

Huh... Looks interesting. Adding to read list.

Wha..
Why is Sweetie Belle impersonating a top?
.....I'm confused.

Huzzah! Keep up the good work.

Cheerilee does not to care at all that the fillies started the school on fire using what sounds like some sort of mortar and then skipping the end of class. In fact it seemed as if everyone was not phased by such actions- was this intentional as comedy or is ponyville really that uncaring about it's only school?

Sooo... I have a feeling Celestia is going to start dropping the CMC down chutes while smirking a lot. And issuing missions and gear including like a blowdryer flamethrower, of course. Not necessarily immediately, just eventually.

2 months... I thought that you were dead...
Just kidding, I'm not one of those idiots that thinks the author is dead. It is highly unlikely after all.

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That's a combination of kids being kids and Cheerilee figuring Buck it, we're insured and I'd rather be napping. I'll let the professionals handle this. The weather team was all over putting out the fires, and the school will be repaired enough to be up and running again by the end of the weekend. It's not that nopony cares, it's just that the ponies freaking out and having to commandeer a chunk of Rainbow Dash's house to use as firefighting clouds is another story all together.

Faved and liked. Cutie Mark Crusaders Black Ops are best Cutie Mark Crusaders.

And despite the highly unlikely scenario, everypony is still written in character! Even Cheerilee, who I had no problem picturing as a world-weary schoolteacher. :twilightsmile:

Hooray for the dangerous lawn darts!
Improvised siege engine made from PE gear. :rainbowlaugh:
And maybe welcome back to the land of the possibly not so sleep deprived! Unless you are sleep deprived, then it's just welcome back! :pinkiehappy:

"Meanwhile, up in Canterlot, a book keeper was frantically cross-referencing a somewhat damp letter and a book that clearly hadn't been opened in a long time. A shaky hoof went down the page, passing over various symbols and brief descriptions, before finding first a broken brick, then a spinning hoop, and finally a blueprint. After a moment of fumbling, the word URGENT was stamped across the form in bright red ink, before the form was doused in green dragonfire; the color only used to send letters directly to Celestia."

I belive the bolded part is a bit ambiguous for a hint. Is this the 'book of cutie marks' or the book of [classified] cutie marks? XD

A small addition to this section would greatly enhance the Top Secret feel of things.

Have gift, perhaps it will inspire you:

A book keeper set down the 'Cutie Mark Compendium, Volume Fourteen' on top of the others and sat there for a moment looking puzzled. Then his eyes widened as a tought struck him and he reached into the shelf pressing a hidden mechanism. A small slot opened in the wall behind the shelf and with shaky hooves he pulled out an ancient, slender book. He blew off the slight layer of dust of this rarely used book to reveal it's title and the slighty faded red stamp over the title.

Warfare Cutie mark Compendum
Top Secret

With a gulp he opened the first page made of unusually durable parchment and ran a shaky hoof down the hoof drawn page, passing over various symbols and brief descriptions, before finding first a broken brick, then a spinning hoop, and finally a blueprint. The symbols were slightly different of course however symbolism was his talent and the meanings were quite clear. A bead of sweat ran down his neck as he tried very hard not to think too much of what he has been reading and what needed to be done to earn these cutie marks at the same time. The thought of fillies with such dangerous... No. Cutie marks come when needed and wanted. Who was he to judge.

After a moment of fumbling, he filled out the cutie mark reference section and reached deep inside his desk for the stamp he had not used in twenty years. TOP SECRET was stamped across the form in bright red ink, before the form was doused in green dragon fire; the color only used to send letters directly to Celestia.

He sighed and ran a hoof across his face before reaching for his emergency hard cider. The bottle was almost full but he had a feeling he was going to dent it's content a bit today before he could get back to work. His hoof shivered as he poured himself a generous helping. Celestia preserve us. I'd never thought I'd see the day.

EDIT: Ok so I've laid it on a bit thick but Equestria has apparently been at peace for a thousand years. I tried to give it a slight secret agent man feel. XD

EDIT2: A though, adding a star burst behind Applebloom's cutie mark too would be a nice way to tie them in together as a group. Useful idea? Possible?

In case you were wondering? I really enjoy this story premise. I loved the part where everyone's assumption about the Filly's potential cutie marks was wrong.

At last, the story is moving along...

I look forward to the next installment.

FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU filler chapter :facehoof:

Ouch... Poor pinky.

Oh well, time to party! :pinkiecrazy:

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I know, I know, but it was a necessary evil. Don't worry, it'll be picking back up in the next chapter, I know this one was pretty slow.

639151 hmmm not sure if the squares in AJs letter is intentional or i just dont have the characters installed... :ajbemused:

assembling an improvised siege engine out of PE gear and using it to set the school on fire
Fuck yes!

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It's supposed to be text with the strike through effect on it, though since I couldn't find a function for that with the text editor here I kinda had to jump through some hoops to kludge something together for it. For those of you who can't read it, the crossed out words are flour, pie crusts, eating contest, app-

then it cuts to the next line where she just gives up on any sort of bluff.

If anyone else is having a problem with the font, let me know! If it's a widespread issue I'll find some other way to deal with it.

"...shematics for a battery of wide-bore party cannons..."
"Could probably give pause to a dragon."
"...Scootaloo looked up to see four long, smoking barrels retract into the roof of Sugarcube Corner..."

SHE KNOWS!

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Seriously, at this point? Aliens Invade Equestria? Ponyville doesn't notice.
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Also: My email account received two update notifications and I squeed like a little girl thinking there were two chapters... :facehoof:

I don't mind fillers so much so I thought this chapter was alright.
The thought of Scootaloo getting excited about breaking and entering is funny. :scootangel: Plus, ya figure a place like Canterlot would have decent security for something like that and I want to see how Scoots reacts. :pinkiehappy:

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