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Dear Princess Celestia,

I haven't written you in such a long time. I suppose that since I've lived in the castle as of late, I have found it unnecessary. I wish to tell you this is person, I really do, but I feel I cannot stay here any longer. Spike and I are leaving to the countries south of Equestria. Perhaps we will be able to bring peace and harmony to the ponies there. This will be my last letter to you, my mentor, but I have so much to say. I don't even know where to begin. I suppose it started after my coronation, so maybe I should tell you that first...

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Comments ( 5 )

Good, good... Although there are some minor mistakes, overall, it was quite touching. :derpytongue2:

Great job, a few minor simple errors. Definitely pulled the heart strings. Good job. :rainbowkiss:

"I don't know too much about Applejack's life before I me her." I don't know why, but I don't think that was the word you wanted to useā€¦
"I know that she died in the most peaceful wa possible" For the second time, a letter is missing. "I know that she died in the most peaceful way possible"

A nicely written story, but you need to correct your 2 small errors to do it justice.

aleet should be elite.

:fluttercry: My heart

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