Set in the universe of "Memoirs Of A Reality Jumper" and its spin-off "Jumper."
After finding a strange creature in the woods one day, a young mage must help them return to their own world, he'll do anything he can to help the creature get home, even if he has to give up his own home to do so.
My First Fanfic, earlier chapters a bit sloppy due to lack of editors, they get better over time. (a rewrite of the prologue is currently being planned, will begin once chapter 20 is published)
rated Teen for language, minor gore/violence , and possible mild innuendo in later chapters.
Extra tags: Slice of Life (Early chapters are primarily SoL, adventure aspects will come later)
prereaders/editors:
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My little pony: friendship is magic is property of Hasbro.
The Final Fantasy series belongs to Square Enix.
Well, I'm not sure if anyone has ever done a true FF1 crossover before but it looks good so far. Is the main character one of tbe retiered light warriors?
2176670 No, it's been about 200 years since than. As for FF1, That is where most of the city names And Idea's come from come from, but I also used parts from other games in the series, as well as different games altogether (this will be seen in the next chapter), its mostly just based on Final Fantasy as a whole.
This is the last chapter I've written so far, I won't get around to writing till Friday or Saturday.
On a related note, I've considered writing a few side-story style chapters from time to time, focusing on events mentioned in previous chapters (such as the scene were Trace dueled the elf). Let me know if you'd like to see this kind of stuff, and I'll see what I can do.
The relationship between Twilight and Trace in this chapter seems a bit rushed and comes out of nowhere. All we got was the narrator saying they became closer and a few characters talking about it, not a single scene actually showing it happen. An entire chapter could of been devoted just to the festival they went to and would of been a good opportunity to show them start to fall for each other. I guess it could be done with some flashbacks in latter chapters, but showing it as it happens would be preferable to after the fact.
Setting that aside, I do like the rest of the story so far. The Chaos Seeds and the mysterious sender leave allot of options open for where the story can go.
Looking forward to more.
2203037 Yeah, I just wanted to keep the 'Prologue arc' as short as positive, I'll probably write a few chapters later.
As for the sender, lets just say it was someone from Traces past.
I'm confused, what is this chapter doing? Are you reflecting on a day during the Prologue?
2224136 Its supposed to be the day after part 2 of the prologue.
2225064 Alright, fair enough.
My question though is why not just include it in the prologue itself? When I saw the chapter title, I expected an Interlude of Celestia worrying for Twilight's safety, not to be thrown back in time. It all came off rather jarring.
Do you happen to have a proofreader to bounce ideas and structure thoughts off of?
EDIT:: Ah lol, just noticed the restructuring you did, then please ignore my first question.
2225094 I wanted the prologue to as short as possible, not that much happened between part 2 and 3, I have 1 Interlude more planned that takes place in that time frame, and might do one with the Princess at some point.
extra notes-
Here is were I found the poem.
just read the whole story and I found it to very good, I look forward to more
2968858 Thanks!
Hope to get next chapter out in about two weeks (trying to set up a reasonable schedule)
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cool can't wait
Ugh where to begin...
Screw it, I'll just put them all under the same category. To be blunt, you have many capitalization errors throughout this chapter. Most of them are the start of sentences that need to be capitalize while others were just random words you had capitalized (like purple, turned, and possibly).
If you'd like, I could post every single error I find. I probably would have already done so, but I just don't have the time right now (since I am at work and my shift will be ending soon).
2977584 Thanks for letting me know, feel free to post them if you want.
the Prologue chapters are pretty much unedited, I plan on getting around to it soon (after I get chapters 8, 9, and 10 out, I'll take a break to get them fixed)
Oh my.....A Chaos Seed, mm? Sounds evil.
More... More... More...
I am don' t know wat to say. I am storting to line this story more and more.
Moar nao
As always, a rivitting installment. I look forward to more.
(YAWN) UGh.....what time is it?11 PM. I should really go to bed......
Well....a few more chapters won't hurt....
...Gysahl Pickles. Imagine finding one so foul-smelling that you could not eat it.
........Can you imagine how horribly taunting that would be? It is something so good, no regular person can eat it due to it's smell preventing you from even bringing it to your mouth, the scent promising an incredible reward if you can...Cruelty.
nice i thowt it was funny
Finally an update! But I cant stop feeling something bad is going ro happen. Anyway good job like always.
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irish? huh. could you please add transactions to eny foreign languages, please? I read on phone, and if I open translation app to check it, the page returns to tje top, and I have to scroll down and find the place I was on before. with only two sentences it is bearable, but still it would be nice.
3900093 Noted, will make sure to do so in the future (and probably go through old chapters at some point to fix them)
Use Irish because unfortunately trying to put together sentences and phrases using "real" elvish is too much of a pain for me, and last I checked Irish was a rarely spoken language in most places
(I apologize for the delayed replay, fimfiction never gave me a message saying you commented)
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there is no problem, and thanks for answering. Irish sounds elvish enough for me. you could always try using some elvish from Tolkien's stories for example. but translation and getting those runes here would be hard.
I wanted tears
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Sorry to disappoint, was still kind of crap at writing during the first few chapters (plus very little editing), hoping to get around to rewriting them at some point, and hopefully getting some proper editing done then
3936360 Or the "Ancient language" from the Inheritance series (Eragon)
Why are all these jumper stories in a coma? Seriously, none of them have been updated in forever.
6165750 Simple answer: various personal/real life issues getting in the way
Can't speak for everyone else but I've mostly been stuck with writer's block and a huge lack of free time since I got a job between chapters 16 and 17, I've got 2 days of free time unless something in real life comes up, and I do try to work on the next chapter, just slow going sadly.
6166871 http://goinswriter.com/how-to-overcome-writers-block/ this might help please do not give up on this story I do not want to see this story end up on the pile of Unfinished stories in in gaveyard called dead stories its to good for that
img04.deviantart.net/3ce6/i/2013/029/1/0/lie_down__try_not_to_cry__cry_a_lot_combo_by_badflippy-d5t596e.jpg how i feel if you gave up
Did this story change authors whilst I was turned the other way? What's going on?
7163507 changed my name
7163502 I'll keep that bookmarked for the future, thanks man
and don't worry, there are few things I stubborn about, but writing is one of them, it's gonna take a LOT of bullshit to get me to throw this away.
7163531 Ah. Neato.
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It's... Unlikely at this point sadly
Part of me wants to and I still get ideas for bits of the story, but as soon as I go to write them up it's like all motivation vanishes. Doesn't help that a lot of my focus has shifted away from fanfic in the past few years.