I do enjoy this story, quite a bit. I forgot it was something that was produced in the past, I was gunna give you a bunch of critiques. :P That being said, there are... quite a few spelling errors throughout the story that make me shudder. >~> Love the story though!
“Do you prefer any lotions or oils?” I say giving her the full treatment.
“Well.. I mean..” I see her stiffen up a little. “I kinda like the smell of vanilla.”
I smile a little. “So let me get this straight.” I pick up a bottle of vanilla oil and drip some onto my hands. “You told me you didn't want oils -after- I already applied it?” I say giving her a knowing smirk.
After the shock of the teleport fades I wrap my hands around Celestia's neck as I join her in the hug.
I have never lost my shit laughing like I have when I read this sentence. I'm no expert, but I don't think you hug people with your hands around their neck.
i just realized how far out of the loop i am. only read 4-5 chapters when yoni was still in control.
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7706779 You still have Zoidberg, YOU ALL STILL HAVE ZOIDBERG!
Wait so is like Twilight not one of the possible love interest's anymore?
I do enjoy this story, quite a bit. I forgot it was something that was produced in the past, I was gunna give you a bunch of critiques. :P
That being said, there are... quite a few spelling errors throughout the story that make me shudder. >~>
Love the story though!
But... she didn't say she didn't want oil.
I have never lost my shit laughing like I have when I read this sentence. I'm no expert, but I don't think you hug people with your hands around their neck.
7735357 I thought he was choking her out at first lol
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Wasn't that once a death threat homer made to Bart before they stopped using the choking gag on the Simpsons?