True, but if the chapters are complete but not published, then the story should be marked as Incomplete until all the chapters are posted. Otherwise, first time readers like myself would confuse it as one-shot before they even read the first chapter and leave.
7675242 I just never knew people disliked one-shots enough to avoid them. HiE, sure. Anthro, I get it. But a one-shot? Never heard of it before. But, whatever, I'll change it just for you. How about that?
7675245 I can see people disliking one shots on the preconception that it's just an idea haphazardly thrown together without much care or effort.
But in regards to this story, what really throws me is when I read the authors note it makes it seem like this is from a dark period of novice writting you are hesitant to admit the existence of. And yet, during my reading I struggle to find any heinous writiing-crimes to justify such a notion. True the storie's not without some technical mistakes (typos mostly), but nothing worth more than a passing thought. -an exception I believe i recall is a brief switch between first and second person naritive
Overall this story is rather simple and has a pretty uplifting feel to it. It gives an appealing amount of character and world depth and has a sense of continuity wich is always a staple in good material (assuming pinkie is not involved) .
My only grievance is that I came across it too soon/too late, and now must wait day by day to read more of the story I enjoy.
All this being said, I eagerly await the remaining chapters and think there will come a time where i simply must read your "better" works. Perhaps one of them may even be awarded a golden star. Until then, I thank you and hope you have a pleasant day.
Ah yes, I somewhat remember this story. You've definitely improved by leaps and bounds since then.
I think the reason I wasn't so happy with this story originally is the feeling of wish fulfillment that it reeked of. Though, to be fair, everyone starts off with that in fanfiction. And you HAVE improved significantly over the years. I'll see how much of this I can go through before it becomes unbearable once again.
Regardless, I'll still look forward to anything new you make. I know you've improved quite a bit and very much enjoy your stories now.
monty python movie sucked? Dude, really, that is like the greatest comedic work of art ever created and it is called The Holy Grail and you will remember it.
7675237 I might have got more enjoyment from that comment than I truly should have! Imma read this through for the comment section if nothing else now. Not that I don't like the story, just such a hilarious response. Liking the story btw.
Twilight decides to chips in. “It's known as short range Telekinesis. It's how ponies pick up objects without distortion fields like unicorns. Like I said, Anon, everypony has magic in them. It's just different for every race.”
That didn't sound right to you at all though, but you decided to keep your mouth shut. You really liked having your head attached to your neck, so it would be best to not anger the sun princess by explaining to her student that the world revolves around the sun due to gravity and not a pony. Twilight was off talking about some pony star with a beard.
7675245 * Puts hand up. Yeah. While I won't refuse to read oneshots, as a rule I usually don't unless it is from an author I already follow or linked to a fan-verse I am familiar with.
I am an invested reader so I tend to only look for stories with enough lengh to invest in. (the fact your story has 100k words was one of the deciding factors to read it.)
Firstly, "human's"? You don't need the apostrophe or the 's' there.
Secondly, if you want to get actually technical, our species is called homo sapiens sapiens.
Is this really complete? Or is that a mistake?
Forget this story existed and I forgot what happened last time.
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The only question is, if it is a mistake, will he fix it?
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The real problem is not knowing how to read the A/N at the top of the chapter.
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True, but if the chapters are complete but not published, then the story should be marked as Incomplete until all the chapters are posted. Otherwise, first time readers like myself would confuse it as one-shot before they even read the first chapter and leave.
Well if nothing else, this story is a testament to your improved writing
Can't say i read the original, so I'm glad you've decided to repost these
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lol, k. Well, if it's a problem for everyone then they can gladly leave. It's not going to hurt my feelings.
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Well, I didn't leave thanks to Silver Octave mentioning the mistake, but I almost did.
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I just never knew people disliked one-shots enough to avoid them. HiE, sure. Anthro, I get it. But a one-shot? Never heard of it before. But, whatever, I'll change it just for you. How about that?
Not that I don't appreciate the change, but I just thought I should bring it up.
But she addressed him AS captain just before this.
So you're reposting the original? It's been so long that I don't remember this story at all.
7675245 I can see people disliking one shots on the preconception that it's just an idea haphazardly thrown together without much care or effort.
But in regards to this story, what really throws me is when I read the authors note it makes it seem like this is from a dark period of novice writting you are hesitant to admit the existence of. And yet, during my reading I struggle to find any heinous writiing-crimes to justify such a notion. True the storie's not without some technical mistakes (typos mostly), but nothing worth more than a passing thought. -an exception I believe i recall is a brief switch between first and second person naritive
Overall this story is rather simple and has a pretty uplifting feel to it. It gives an appealing amount of character and world depth and has a sense of continuity wich is always a staple in good material (assuming pinkie is not involved) .
My only grievance is that I came across it too soon/too late, and now must wait day by day to read more of the story I enjoy.
All this being said, I eagerly await the remaining chapters and think there will come a time where i simply must read your "better" works. Perhaps one of them may even be awarded a golden star. Until then, I thank you and hope you have a pleasant day.
Ah yes, I somewhat remember this story. You've definitely improved by leaps and bounds since then.
I think the reason I wasn't so happy with this story originally is the feeling of wish fulfillment that it reeked of. Though, to be fair, everyone starts off with that in fanfiction. And you HAVE improved significantly over the years. I'll see how much of this I can go through before it becomes unbearable once again.
Regardless, I'll still look forward to anything new you make. I know you've improved quite a bit and very much enjoy your stories now.
monty python movie sucked? Dude, really, that is like the greatest comedic work of art ever created and it is called The Holy Grail and you will remember it.
7675237 I might have got more enjoyment from that comment than I truly should have!
Imma read this through for the comment section if nothing else now. Not that I don't like the story, just such a hilarious response. Liking the story btw.
This most certainly shows its age, but why the hell not
Whoever came up with that idea is genius!
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I was thinking the same exact thing!
I was fine with everything but the Luna scene. Too many conveniently placed ponies with weak excuses for even being there...
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I have 2 agree she lives in canterlot what is she doing in ponyvill
2nd person moment
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* Puts hand up.
Yeah. While I won't refuse to read oneshots, as a rule I usually don't unless it is from an author I already follow or linked to a fan-verse I am familiar with.
I am an invested reader so I tend to only look for stories with enough lengh to invest in. (the fact your story has 100k words was one of the deciding factors to read it.)
so yeah, we are out there.
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lol. beware the insidious green text.