The road of life is long, and winding. It's hard to follow, but you can stay on it the whole way through. Sometimes you don't want to, though. Sometimes you shouldn't. Sometimes you need to make the wrong decision. Sometimes you need to run off the path, and get lost in the woods so you can find yourself.
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Really nice writing style. Flows quite smoothly in my opinion.
Have my stars and a track while I'm at it.
Nice story
, tracking 
This story needs a feature. You are a great author, just need that to get yourself rolling. Dont thank me, just take my stars(I have 5)and a slot on my track page.
I like where this is going. Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the next chapter.
Once again you have, through the simplest most calming writing presented a gentle start to what has captured the imagination and admiration of your readers. You need no more premise to write this than to just continue to tell this gorgeous story. These stories speak directly to my heart, as do you.
Wow
Please, first. Anyway, took ya long enough. Hard to recall the first.
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Ah, well... yeah. But the next ones will be a little bit timelier, at least.
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lol One can only hope they do. It feels like a fantastic start to something. Can't wait to see where it goes.
aww
I think I've read like every story on the M/M section and more than my share of stories on this site in general, but I'd really just like to say that your story really stands out as something more than average. It's honestly one of the best stories I've read in a long time.
I really found your writing style unique and very attention grabbing. There wasn't really a point in the story where I felt like I should scroll past boring details, everything found it's place and sort of fit perfectly. The characters were great too. A lot of people write O.C. stories on this site and a lot of them just seem like the author putting himself in the world of MLP, but your cahracters felt real and alive. You're really a great author and, I hope, you'll write some kind of a sequel or at least a follow up in the future.
I'm gonna have to agree with what the guy above me said. This really is a wonderful story, the way you write really paints a picture and portrays emotion so well. For this story it was really the emotional and maturity journey that Sunny makes as he figures out what he wants. The style of writing really plays into your overall theme as well, like when he feels in control he sees things in vivid detail, but when he stresses out, everything became hazy.
I read your blog post about your feelings about your performance and writing. While I'm in no position to question or rebuke your criticisms, I can't help but feel you're being overly harsh on your work. An author will always find fault within their work, and I believe that's a sign of a good artist, but at the same time failure is relative depending on where you set the bar for yourself. From what I've read in the story to your critique, you must've set the bar pretty damn high, because I'd hate to think I have a bad enough taste in stories to really enjoy this one.
The best M/M fic I have ever read. Just consider continuing! Pleeze......
Seriously, it's better than winding roads even.
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I... tend to set multiple bars for any given story, really. On the one hand yes, if people enjoy it then that's fantastic, because that's what I set out to do: Write something people could enjoy, and possibly something that they can take something from. On the other hand, though, at the same time I always set an artistic bar for myself, and with this story I simply don't feel that I achieved what I set out to do. The finished product may be enjoyable, but it's still in many ways not at all the story I had hoped it would be.
My high standards are, for me, a way of pushing myself to excel and to become better. I may only rarely reach the heights I aim for, but failure still pushes me further than just trying to write something simple. So I still consider Clarity an artistic failure on my part, but from the standpoint of people enjoying it it's certainly a success. I am glad that you enjoyed it, and hopefully when I decide to re-tackle the concept it will end up being even better.
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As long as you keep writing and don't end up like those authors who give up due to their insecurities and self-inflicted doubt in their ability to write, more power to ya. As a reader and commenter/amateur reviewer, I've learned that if I don't comment with words of encouragement and gratitude, the author just doesn't feel as validated if I were to only give a thumbs up. So to hear that you're continuing to strive to write (and improve), I'm relieved that you're not that type author. I shall be awaiting your next project whenever it comes out.
Wait a sec, Fully Clothed Mares thats a play on word! One of my favorite bands is Bare Naked Ladies, did you try to do that or did I just see that?
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Hah, you don't have to worry about that. I'm the sort whose failures only convince him to try harder - the only thing keeping me from writing as we speak is having more pressing issues. Of course it's not to say that I don't appreciate kind words; were it not for the graciousness and support of my fans I wouldn't be half the writer I am.
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That is indeed a reference! The song he's singing is a Bare Naked Ladies Song called 'For You'(which is VERY good). BNL is one of my favourite bands, myself.
I knew it! I still think my favorite song from them is Call and Answer, one of my all time favs, I cant believe I found that somewhat easter egg!
>Fully Clothed Mares
That bit aside, this has been a sweet story. A number of spelling errors toward the end that kinda jarred the narration, but it didn't affect the feeling of hope and happiness that the ending left on me for the darling couple. Sucks it's not quite set for them, but it still looks optimistic, so
Right, that makes 5 good M/M fics I've read in this fandom. Not the best (that goes to "What The Eye Sees") but still good. Now having read what you have to offer, I'm off to broaden my horizons further; there's still more heartfelt man on man action to be had. Onward!
I really want to leave a lengthy comment but I feel that anything I say will be inadequate. So I'll just leave you with this: that was easily to most beautiful M/M fic I've seen on fimfiction.
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Aww, but I do so love lengthy comments...
Aheh, but thank you very much! I'm glad that you clearly enjoyed it so much.
This story deserves way more likes than it got, sadly I can only give one but at least its something.
Wish I had anything constructive to say but I'll leave it at that I liked the story, it was very cute and Neon was a very intressting character.
I think the best part of this was your mastery of description. So many writers on this site do not understand that to have truly immersive scenes, description needs to appeal directly to the senses of the reader. Your description immerses the reader extremely well in the point of view of the main character, and that makes the reader identify much more strongly with his experience.
Also, dat sex scene.
I knew I recognized your name from somewhere...didn't realize until a little while ago that you wrote Feedback, which I've always considered to be one of the best Vinyl Scratch stories just for how unique your depiction of her was. It's good to see that strength in developing your characters translates into your other stories as well.
It's rare to find M/M shipping in this fandom, and even rarer to find it done in a way that's both poignant and engagingly fresh, with narration that flawlessly straddles that razor-thin line between "too purple" and "not purple enough". I should've put you on my watchlist long before now. And if I'm to judge by your blog post that this is what you produce when your writing is passionless, I can't wait to see what you can do with an idea you're truly enraptured by.
I read this about three or four months ago on my phone.
I can only hope there will be a sequel to this...
Have 5 moustaches!
The wierd thing is that I feel exactly like Sunburst... But I'm only 17, I still have much to do
Anyway, great story, and also really cute
Well done, a good m/m fic , loved this version of canterlot too.
Thanks
Well, that was certainly an experience. My only criticism is the instances of the use of the word "fur" when it should be "coat". Other than that, good work. Would read again.
I really like this writing style. It is accessable and personal, kind of like listning to an old friend recounting recent events. It pulls you in as a reader and doesn't let go. I cannot wait to read more.
Heh...though I must admit I am a sucker for shipfics, I honestly think that this is far more than merely a romance story. The process by which Neon gradually lifts Sunburst's mental fog illustrates a profoundly moving truth about the final destination toward which we all reach out; where right is wrong and wrong is right, it is often vital to cause oneself to stumble and fall for its own sake. Rising up once more from the earth one becomes whole.
Definitely one of my favorite MLP fanfics, if not my very favorite.
Can you write more? This has so much potential.
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I made a blog post about it after I finished that you may be interested in reading, but the long and short of it is this: When I completed the story as it stands I had good, hard think back over it, and while I love that people enjoyed it and there's definitely good in there, overall I just don't feel like it turned out as well as it might have. There's too many loose elements of it that I just wouldn't feel good about carrying on with it in any way that wouldn't require a complete overhaul. Before I do that, though... I'd rather just start fresh. I do actually have a solid idea for the story that Clarity 'should' have been, but at the same time I frankly have a lot of other projects on my plate with varying degrees of importance.
Besides... The story is finished, really. There's more that could be told, yes, both on the romance and the development fronts, but it's a solid run that covers all the points it needed to cover. Anything else would be overstaying it's welcome, I think.
Nevertheless, I am glad you like it enough to request more, even if I can't in good conscience provide.
5475100 While I wish you would, I am proud of you for this answer.
... Wow.
I'm going to have to read this over and over again. Not only because it was wonderful, but because I can relate to Sunny's thought process and plight. Problem is that I don't have my answer yet.
I wish I could do more than fave and like!
wow, really good story with a really good flow. I get sunburst with the roommate thing. That happened last year and will probably happen again this year.
A sweet story.