Why would any pony give up what most could only dream to achieve?
Some things are hard to explain with words, but I will try.
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It's weird, I don't usually write in first person. I tend to hate that.
But in this case... It's related to me too, in some way. I can't talk about for now, but soon I will be able to.
I'm taking a leap of faith towards the unknown. It's frightening and exciting.
A very quick and short silly thing which didn't pass in any pre-reader's hands. Eep!
This was very wellwritten.
Without using the actual .. "keywords" (ex: princess, ruler, alicorn) you described Twilights situation, and her thoughts about it, with depth.
Great one-shot
Liked & Faved.
And good luck with whatever it is you are doing next :)
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Heh, I just found one error. Then again, I'm no good with grammar and writing rules, but, here's the only typo I spotted:
This disconnection with others was in no way helping me; I just felt worst.
Assuming it should be worse*
At first I thought this was a blog post, and I freaked. Don't scare us like that, mon!
Since this hasn't been through pre-readers, do you want us to refrain from pointing out typos?
2153781 Oups! Thanks!
2153787 Never! Point all of them!
Heartwarming, much as I like Alicorn!Twilight.
2153822 Here goes:
*Had hung
Usually written as one word; no hyphen necessary. Also, "Double nonsense!" is not a phrase I've heard before.
Should be split into two sentences; the semicolon cannot adequately replace a question mark.
Is the second half a question. Why is there no question mark.
*Into, not in.
*Bond or bonds.
[](/bonbon "Can be seen with BetterPonyMotes; I have no idea what this looks like if you don't have it!") Bon-bonds!
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*never stops
What can't truly blossom? The antecedent has not been mentioned recently enough.
[](/derpwizard "Also, there's no 'u' in 'Oops!'")
2153930 "What can't truly blossom?"
What is Twilight tasked to study, why Twilight left everything.
Thanks for the fixes. :)
The minute I saw the section about Shining Armour, I got the feeling that this might be a bit autobiographical.
The real test of the 'upgrade' version of Twilight Sparkle is whether the writers will be able to keep the character true to herself despite her new powers and probable new role. If they can, then this will work. If they can't then they've made a mistake.