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Sweetie Belle, alone and dejected, comes across The Great and Powerful Trixie, who was ostracized for her prior misdeeds involving the Ursa Minor. Trixie becomes Sweetie Belle's tutor, giving Sweetie (and perhaps herself as well) both the guidance and companionship she needs.

This is a S1 fic. Events take place before 'The Return of Harmony, pt 1'.
Writing for this fic began before Season 2, so events do not match canon storylines.

This fic was featured on Equestria Daily on Oct 18th, 2011

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Chapters (6)
Comments ( 172 )

I Really liked this story, cant wait for the other chapters!

I like it! :D

This is totally awesome and I'm totally gonna read the rest!


Also, Moustache

Woot already I can tell this is going to be a great fic. You set the scene nicely with rich detail and the characters are once again spot on. Keep it up.

looks interesting. :trollestia:

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

Spiffing good show, if I do say so.

This seems like actual dialogue from an episode! Really good storytelling. Puts you in the scene. Look forward to what's next! :pinkiesmile:

Well, like I said in the IRC, I really appreciated this bit of story. It flows smooth, and the conversation is believable - plus it is very amusing to watch Trixie paint herself to a corner like this. Both Trixie and Sweetie Belle seem very in-character.

The fight between Sweetie Belle and Rarity was probably the best bit (and not only 'cause Rarity is the best pony) - it was in-character, believable and touching. Pretty much how I'd imagine two sisters fighting I guess.

This story has a LOT of potential, and I can't wait for the next chapter! That out of the way, it's been a month since you wrote this. As we say on touhou-project.com: "Get back to work, n*****."


I am a slow writer, and in between this first chapter and the impending second I acquired a tablet and starting trying my hand at art, and also had essentially a week vacation out of town. I want to present a well-refined chapter, so please excuse how long I'm taking. I'll try my best to keep going. :twilightsmile:

I came to this story intrigued by the novel combination of protagonists. Now, I'm intrigued by where you plan on going. I can't say I entirely like the idea of Rarity as a physically abusive guardian, but the dynamic between Sweetie and Trixie is fascinating. I look forward to seeing what happens next.

:raritydespair: will be featured in Chapter 3, so hopefully that will address some of your feelings about her role in the story. Thanks for your comment!

Now this is going to be an interesting storyline I mean Trixie a teacher, and a great and powerful one at that. this is going to be good. :rainbowlaugh:

Excellent as usual.



:pinkiehappy: Love this story.

"physically abusive guardian"
Ummm? I may have missed something, but I don't believe Rarity was ever stated as being abusive?

Anyways, great story! I love how Trixe is portrayed with some actual depth, just be careful not to give her so much character progression that she stops being Trixie. :twilightsmile: :trixieshiftleft:

Ugh... Not going to repeat one's really long comment that just got deleted, so here's the tl;dr version: Great job, love the story, but find a pre-reader. Spotted a few grammar mistakes here and there (Only minor), and you called SB a he at one point. (Ctrl+F FTW!)

Keep up the amazing work! Loving this fic so far!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria


I have several pre-readers, but things slip through the cracks sometimes. Thanks for pointing it out.

I want to make love to this author.

Keep up the excellent work!

tracked, favorited, and loved it!

keep the good job, I'm really loving this story! *-*

Interesting. I'll be following this great and powerful story, I think. :trixieshiftright:

Once again, AJ is the best pony. :ajsmug:

Sisterhooves Social kind of ruins that little bit of Rarity's and Sweetie Bell's parents death lol

Glad to see that this is being continued. It's got a much different feeling to it than other Trixie stories, probably because she's been placed in a position of responsibility unlike anything she's probably ever experienced. It's sweet and touching to see Trixie take this seriously and unwind from her normal persona.

Also nice to see Sweetie Belle get some loving from the fan community. I'm looking forward to how she'll change with a different parental figure taking care of her.

Heh, I can tell this was written before the latest episode aired. Rarity having living parents suddenly showing up messed up quite a few stories out there. But, that's no big deal as you can always claim that this is a alternate universe. Author's creative license at work here!

Looking forward to more!

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

You have a great setting between two characters, trying to work together... Sweetie Belle learning from the Great And Powerful Trixie.

I heartily approve!

i really liked this chapter, continue the good work :)

Don't worry about canon conflicts, all you have to do is say two magic words"Alternate Universe"

beautifully written, i'm anxious to see your take on the arrival of the rest of the mane 6...


Sisterhooves Social Broke a lot of fic's....
But that is okay I'll just imagine its a different universe.
Anyway write more plz!


Unfortunately, the rest of the mane 6 will not appear in this fanfiction. The characters listed in the story details, namely :unsuresweetie::trixieshiftright::ajsmug::raritydespair:, are the only ones which will be featured.

That's nice. I love how Trixie responsible and caring one here, and Rarity... well, not very good sis. Can't wait to see Rarity\Trixie confrontation (I do belive that Trixie much more powerful that Rarity, but would she use magic on Sweetie Belle's sister?). Applejack very good here, just right amount of agresstion, understanding and honesty. Please continue)

Sweet! Every chapter I have read had always made me tear up. This one was no exception. I love the sisterly bond between Sweetie Belle and Trixie. Trixie's becoming one of my favorite ponies because of fics like this. I can't wait until Rarity and Trixie meet face to face with Sweetie Belle in the middle of the confrontation.

I can relate to Trixie as I feel weak compared to my family. I seem to can't find out my talents. And while my friends knows what they want to do, I'm left behind still wondering what to do......And it gives me a hard time when I sleep and feel alone....:fluttershysad:

I was reading this while I was listening to the Turnabout Sisters Ballad Theme from Phoenix Wright. The scene with Rarity/Applejack and near the end of Chapter 3 with Trixie/Sweetie Belle made me tear up a lot. :fluttercry::raritycry::pinkiesad2: That's how much I love this. I can consider this to be one of my top favorite fanfics tied with Feathers and maybe A Dash of Inspiration on this site.

I can't wait until the next Chapter to be released. Hopefully since it's a holiday this week, you'll have more time with the fanfic. :heart:

i hope none of Trixie's... personality rubs off on sweetie...
Still, I am interested!

“I’ll move my royal guard here, capturing your other pegasus. And um... checkmate.” this... would be very fun!

I was kinda hoping for some interaction between :twilightsmile: and :trixieshiftright:, but alas, it does not seem likely...
still, a good, fun fic.
i personally would like the fic to become a tad darker, but that's just me...
and my gloomypants...

Although I haven't read Feathers / Dash of Inspiration, I'm flattered you would compare my work to fics with so many views and high ratings.

These kinds of comments are things I like to see. I'm glad to hear people have had the emotional reaction I hoped my writing would be able to elicit. As far as music goes, it has a monumental impact on the words I write and the feeling that goes into my fiction.

My life is actually likely to get MORE busy in the near future rather than less. I've had a bit of a reprieve from my normal activities over the past week or two, and as I have said before in these comments I am a horribly slow writer. :ajsleepy:

There will be no direct interaction between the two in this fiction, I am afraid. The only major characters to appear are those listed on the titlecard. I do however, have a sequel of sorts planned in summary, which will hopefully be written someday. I have another fic I would very much like to write after the completion of this one, so it may be a long time.

Very beautiful. Trevor has been waiting for this fic to update, so thank you for not abandoning it! One liked the song, though more the instrumental first half than the actual song. One was GOING to suggest that somepony do a cover of it, but the lyrics in the second half kind of make that difficolt. *Sighs*

Also... Trevor was wondering if that wasn't why Rarity... Yeah... One can understand that almost TOO well... While it was very moving, what made it even more so was thinking back to 'Simply Rarity'. That fic TOTALLY blows this chapter out of the water for sad Rares, but then again, that's the ENTIRE point of that fic, rather than the central aim of this fic. It enhanced this chapter, rather than take away, thinking back to that feeling of loss and tragedy in that fic, rather than make this seem weaker in comparison. Beautifully done...

Trevor eagerly awaits the next chapter patiently!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

Dammit Trevor, why did you have to remind me of 'Simply Rarity', it's bad enough that I have Grave of the Fireflies standing on my shelf, begging to be re-watched. As an big-brother, there is a limited amount of younger sister sadness my heart can take before it breaks! :fluttershbad:

Anyways, the fic is awesome: It's good to see some steady character progression for Trixie.

I love this fanfiction and I must say the dynamic between Sweetie and Rarity is much better than the in cannon familial antagonism. Rarity is actually growing to be my favorite character in this story.

You have three very strong protagonists in this chapter: Trixie, Sweetie Belle, and AppleJack. I deeply appreciate the white-versus-gray morality conflict in this story.

Darn it, you've made me FEEL for Trixie!

Well done!


I apologize for not updating very fast. If I ever put the fic on hiatus, I will mark it as such and make a blog post, but I don't intend to. I haven't read Simply Rarity, though I have heard of it. I will have to take the time at some point to read all these fics people mention in relation to mine, although my queue is already at 100+ unread stories that I would like to read eventually.


I'm glad you enjoy it. I very much tried to write Trixie as an actual character with thoughts and motivations, like an actual person and not a storybook villain (just like AJ said in chapter 2). She is probably one of my favorite side characters.

My D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww-ometer is pegged right now. :pinkiesad2:

This story is wonderful. I'm so glad that Trixie is keeping her promise, and being mature.

You're writing not just good fanfiction; you're writing good fiction.

I'm loving this fic a hundred fold. And we can make your story canon again if we change the official lore of the MLP universe a bit making it so Rarity's parents in Sister Hooves Social were actually....ghosts.:trixieshiftright: See, now your story is canon again.

This fic is so far very, very good.

I have this amazing mix of feelings right now, somewhere between nearly sobbing but still a smile on my face. The story did touch a few personal heartstrings of mine (in a positive way though).

I'm not sure if I have the words, or if I should just proceed to drawing fanart of the brushing scene because I frakkin' loved it...

Eh. Poke me later on in the IRC if you want any sensible criticism, right now I don't have 'em due to emotional overload.

~Arto "FoxOfWar" M.

This fic is fantastic, man. Keep it up!

I know it's on hiatus but I just have to say, I read the first two chapters a few months ago and I look forward to any more chapters if you decide to continue the story. It's well written, IMO. :twilightsmile:


I've got 3.8k words written for the new chapter 4, and what was going to be chapter 4 (and is now chapter 5) has a chunk of work done on it too.

So soon! I hope. Maybe. :applecry:

(Also looking back over my writing it seems so terrible, I struggle with it a lot whenever I'm writing new stuff. :rainbowlaugh: )

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