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i wonder what celestias reaction will be when she read lance's mind wjen he is thinking about molestia
I like that idea, I may use it
It may turn out good, but I won't be able to add it for a while.
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LOL!
Huh great fic so far but to be honest your username put me off a bit . He is one lucky pony/man, but why was he the only one to go to equestria? not to be picky just kinda wondering. i know i would !
46325 why
46362 also, could be kinda interesting for him to meet another human/pony thing, though you probably already thought of that
U JELLY rainbow
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There's others, in fact, there was two human ponies in the chapter 6.
can you guess who they are.
dude im lovin your story. there's a few subject/verb agreement issues, but aside from that its great.
jealous dash is jealous
"I'm sorry Lance, but I must go. I'm needed at the palace. I'll send you the dead to your new house soon."
BRING OUT YOUR DEAD! DEAD CART!
This story cracks me up. The plot itself is nice; but the spelling mistakes turn it into a whole different experience!
PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD!!! PLEASE BE MORE CAREFUL WHEN USING "WAS"!!!!!!!!!!!!
its just driving me crazy when you use "was" instead of "were"
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I'll take guess with Le Fluky and the the mare at the cafe front desk
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I agree with you, also kickass; consider using contractions more often
Example: 'I would' turns into I'd 'was not' turns into wasn't
bunny's <--- WRONG it is supposed to be this ---> bunnies
the fact that celstia knew lance would be going to equestria, make me wonder whether the 2012 incident had somthing to do with her, or possible luna?
Sorry but I'm attacking you with grammar it's deed not dead sorry second time reading actually I'm amazed I saw it because my mind almost always skips over grammatical errors (also I think I spelled grammar wrong oh well)
When I read: "Yes, I've done work as a waitress before." I lost it!
you missed spelled deed pal!
"Yes, I've done work as a waitress before."
............ Lance was a girl at one point? I mean you said he was a waitress....
Rainbow has problems
Making a sandwich makes Twilight cry....... that's really low standards.
Dash is going to corrupt poor fluttershy.
3120429 You suck. She was crying because of the thought, not because of the sandwich.
Ok. Got to stop reading. Well maybe just a little more
Wow, rainbow is a little... Oh fuck it, SHE IS ONE OF THE MOST DESPERATE BITCHES IN THIS STORY, no offense rainbow lovers
1.) Why are all the OC's names weird??
2.) It's a CAFÈ, you don't need a waiter.
3.) The fact that I can't stop reading this story
Concept had me read six chapters... But the fact that it moves extremely fast, and the number of mistakes as well as extremely little exposition in each scene just makes this too hard to follow for me. A good attempt but I have to give it a -1
Not to mention, the way some of the characters act seems off for them
I dunno. You'd think killing him would have been a wake up call...
...And that's when you start singing "I know the song that gets on everybody's nerves" very loudly.
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Dear Diary, I've been reading this shitty stories for weeks! I can't stop it! Please somebody help me!
"A scroll appeared in front of her face and opened. She read over it and frowned, "I'm sorry Lance, but I must go. I'm needed at the palace. I'll send you the dead to your new house soon.""
*gets to new home*
"Ahh! Zombies!!!"
I'm just messin' with ya author I can't spell for sh!t that compared to my spelling is fantastic. Like the story so far broski.
Lil' message for them haters:
[insert Vaas' rambling about shutting the fuck up here]
4659415 for 2, I worked at a cafe...I was a sort of waiter, we get the orders and give the food/drink/coffees....
He just died, and this is what she's gonna do?!?!?
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Umm... Maybe you better send that to a nearby morgue, princess?
Weird header, but okay...
Okay, that actually kinda made me laugh.
Every time I see this transition, I can't help but say it out loud.
Man you guys make a few errors seem like
the end of the world ... Get it?
Okay either inflation has gone to shit or something is wrong. A waiter was lucky to get 7 dollars an hour 2 years ago.