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Looking for a way to give her reading ability a boost, Twilight's new spell is interrupted by a certain rainbow pegasus, causing it to backfire in an unexpected but hilarious way.

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My first pony fic, so don't be *too* mean with criticism. :twilightsheepish:
It was just a silly idea that popped into my head, hope you all like it.

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Huh, fun fic. I could see something like this becoming an episode. :twilightsmile: Good job!

Brilliant! Always great to see original material. And yes, I did read the jeopardy sections in Alex Trebek's voice :rainbowlaugh:

For a first fic, not too shabby, I must say. 4.5/5... crud, mouse slipped. Ah well. Enjoy the extra half star :twilightsmile:

I say that's way more than twenty percent smarter. Good job! Btw may I know what the crossover was with?

good but i didn't like the ending
still good thought :pinkiesmile:

This was a great read, though I would think Celestia would be a little sad knowing her own student doesn't know her full name.
Wait..... I'm not surprised :trollestia:

Good fic, i can really see this as an episode :twilightsmile:

Believable.

Seems like this could actually make an episode, changing some of the terminology of course.

But as a fanfic, this is really well done.

#9 · Jan 28th, 2012 · · ·

"...our contestants will have 30 seconds to bit up to double their points..."

'Bid' or 'bet'.

It's good but I found it very annoying that you did the whole thing in the present tense.

That was great.

I'd love to see more from you:yay:

Wow, such a great response! Thanks everyone! It was a silly idea that just popped into my head and I decided to roll with it. Glad you all enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

165959 Why did you find it annoying?

Love it so far, but you have to remember to stay with past-tense or present tense. One or the other; most third person stories are properly written as past tense.

Other than that, I'm enjoying this so far.

So, how did Dash know Celestia's full name, if it wasn't in any of Twilight's books?

Also, no 'Potent Potions' category?

Words cannot express how criminally underrated this is :pinkiesad2:

I wanted Rainbow Dash to keep the smart spell. This kinda reminds me of the Ellen Degenerous energy Bill Nigh the Science Guy ride at Disney world. It would have been 20% cooler if Twilight had more of a break down, but it was enjoyable :rainbowwild::rainbowwild::rainbowwild::rainbowwild: (anymore, and this simple act turns into spam)

I was expecting PS. How come I don't know my teachers/mentor's name? Interesting concept, fun fic, and :yay: Derpy won.

Woo! Upvote #42!
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The present tense was an unusual narrative choice.

Also, my read is that RD threw the game at the end.

Really nice story, but there's a recurring problem you may want to fix. There are several times where you forgot to add an apostrophe. Here's some examples.

"Pinkie, I'm sure the Cakes wont...."

It sounds like somepony rubbing their hooves against the side of a balloon, which is quickly followed by a popping noise, Pinkies flat mane instantly bouncing back into its naturally fluffy state.

Also, there's one other thing you may want to fix.

"Make your recipe as normal, but at the end, at enough fresh baking soda and lemon juices to equal the amount of yeast you'll need. On top of that, using this substitute means you won't have to wait for the dough to rise, you can bake it right away and save some time."

That should be "add".

Why sure, Rarity. You can touch my spines....touch them alllll you like.

Should I be laughing or concerned?

What if they do both!? They'll fire me and shoot me out of a cannon to the moon! I don't wanna go to the moon!

Pfft

Oh Pinkie, you so silly.:pinkiehappy:

That's a cursed image, I genuinely find that disturbing, somehow.

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