"One minute I was in my house, thinking about why humanity fears things that are different. The other I was in a land filled with talking magical horses. The universe has an odd sense of humour. Will I manage to adapt to the new world or will I forever have to rely on a mint green unicorn? I guess only time will tell.
Well, that and my sanity. And money. And sky pirates.
That escalated quickly."
A comedic take on Human in Equestria, travelling through the nations with Lyra Heartstrings by his side. Watch as they try to disprove species stereotypes of every species in Equestria.
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Chapters (6)
AM I THE ONLY ONE TO SEE THE HELLSING ULTIMATE ABRIDGED REFERENCE???
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And quite rightly you see it there. I'm happy that someone got it. Remember to keep your eyes open for more.
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I like it! Needs a bit of work on grammar, but it's an intriguing concept!
I was entertained.
I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEE IIITTTTTTTTTT
I Loves It.I Needs MOAR.
This is awesome! Keep up the great work.
I would like some popcorn
Sorry but I didn't notice any references
Remind me to hook Kaisei up with a discounted rate on a Hyperspace Arsenal. . .
Also: ARE YOU CRAZY FILLY?! Runic Magic is absurdly useful!!
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Shh, don't reveal my motives!
Still, when everyone around you doesn't research magic that extensively, it is normal to just use the everyday magic that just needs you to send power and intent. Imagine runes as japanese alphabet. Now add several tens of thousand more symbols, for nearly every word. Any small change in the rune can change the effect of the spell and the results can be disastrous.
Not to mention the time you would need to learn and remember. Unless you had a way to store thousands if not millions of symbols in one small portable thing. If only there was a way...
The 300 reference is obvious and I some parts of the song are familiar
Yes I would love popcorn
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Or if you got absurdly lucky and inherited photographic memory.
Though you would need precise writing skills to go with it.
Are these the kinds of runes that allow for the storage of energy, or at least not becoming useless after a single usage? I read the part about them using the ambient energy in the world, but I wasn't quite sure.
Another question, can strings of Runes be used to create different, more potent or otherwise, effects?
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I like the way you're thinking now, I will tell you that. You're asking questions that I already considered, will be voiced by Kaisei later and shown effects of. Don't worry, everything will be explained but it makes me happy to see readers slowly realizing what I am leading them on.
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I've had a bit of contact with fictional Runic Magicks before, so it's something I tend to question. Eventually you see patterns.
Anyways, I look forwards to it. If Kaisei is successful in learning it, let alone mastering it, his capabilities will greatly improve. And of course Human Nature will push him to try new things with it. Part of the reasons I like Runic Magicks so much;they let you innovate a lot more than with traditional Magicks.
In a fair fight, Kaisei would have his ass kicked against Captain Stump in ten seconds flat. But who said that a pirate duel is about "fairness"?
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Rune magic+ Human nature= teamcovenant.com/w/images/d/d3/Runic-Cannon.png
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Or this-
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I Wan Sum PopCorn......Wait....I HAS BACON IN THE FRIDGE!!
Be Back In. Jiff
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Yes! I am glad that someone noticed it. Keep up the good work readers!
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Monkey Island!
-"I've got the courage and skill of a master swordsman!"
-"I'd be in real trouble if you ever used them."
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Actually, no. I remember similar thing being said by Captain Gutt from Ice Age 4: Continental Drift, that's what I based him off.
Now I realized how many things that quote may reference. Gah, I am made of stupid.
BadAss Fight Scene!
Kept Listening To My Music While They Were Fighting!
RUNES, LYRA, FRIENDSHIP, VIDEOGAME'S REFERENCES, COOL BATTLE SCENES. THIS STORY HAS EVERYTHING!!!
-Watches as Kaisei becomes the Rune Lord of Equestria-
SPECIESIST IS A WORD!
HUZZAH!
That Was A Fun Chapter.Oh God,THE REFERENCES!They Are Humorous AND Entertaining.
I Think That With Each Situation In This Chapter,I Would Also Respond Calmly And Not Mind Their Ignorance.
"Grimoire Of Thaumaturgic Energies And Symbols"After Reading That,I Had A Reader-Gasm
.I.MUST.READ.IT!
2247449 HUZZAH!THE BIBLE OF THE RUNE LORDS!
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Ah, comments like this are what make me feel all fuzzy inside.
I simply wish even more people read this story, I am trying to reach for the Feature-box substitute we have now!
But I still need your feedback. Tell me what you liked and what you didn't to improve this story. YOU MUST CONSTRUCT ADDITIONAL COMMENTS!
2249628 Make Sure You Double Check The Spellings(Even Though I Don't Suspect Any Grammar Mistakes In Your Chapters) And Nothing Else.
I Like The Story And That Warm Fuzzy Feeling When Reading A Non-Action Chapter
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, but dont abuse too much of the runes, keep them just when its necessary
well i'm my opinion the best parts are the reference and memes you choose because they are so funny and the reactions of the character are very realistic so thats a very good thing in the story. the idea of using Runes to giv e the human magic is very good, i want to see what he will learn next. he aready learn Chidori so maybe another jutsus *
Rasengan* could be fineSaddle Arabia is actually a pretty well off country
I see that Canine and I had the same I idea. I'll give my summary and thoughts per chapter as well.
I'll toss out the dry, boring parts first grammar and spelling was good throughout. Nothing made me have to double take and question the structure of the sentence. You don't over use character identifiers in dialogue (no lavender unicorn syndrome here), and you explained enough.
Now for the next part:
The descriptions: Not bad, and I don't feel that it's necessary to change how you do it. You let use know where the characters are and that's enough, but you don't paint a picture. A little more elaboration on the environment around the characters doesn't hurt. It helps make the world seem more real and helps immerse the reader.
Characters:
Keisei: First person was a good choice, it allows him to keep his nerd swagger without having to actually vocalize it. If he was actually saying all of that stuff to ponies, about capcom, and elder scrolls, then he'd be extremely obnoxious and I'd hate him. Seeing as it's only chapter 1, I can't comment on his character much, other than noting that he isn't a wimp and he's probably a bit smarter than he's letting on.
Lyra: Human crazy, but not insane. I like that you didn't dwell on her love of humans, that right there is a sand trap. Her closeness to Keisei is fine, it's kind of like a child with a new toy. Also it was nice that Lyra didn't flip out and go on a moral rant about eating meat. Ponies are herbivores not morons, glad that you understand that.
Plot: It's only chapter 1, though i am curious to know what happens when they find Gilda. You've also got that element of mystery in there to keep me reading. So for now it's a definite thumbs up.
What I didn't like:
As I said, I don't feel immersed, the characters could exist in a white null space and with really wouldn't have changed much for me.
McGuyver Reference
DBZ Reference
Looney Toons reference.
Everything is in order, nothing glaring that I noticed off the bat and the song was a nice change of pace.
Allow me to say that I did not see this coming, it was quite refreshing.
Still nothing wrong yet. The story is interesting and charming while not being exactly what I expected.
That, that was a good fight scene. I was on edge the entire time, and even though Keisei was going to win, I still wanted to know how.
Keep your grammar and spelling solid and you should have no problems. You might just need to promote this fic some kind of way.
It's amazing what can send you over the edge.
I was reading calmly, then Keisei started talking about transforming twice. I instantly spit out my water and fell to my hands and knees in a laughing fit.
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I want some more chapters
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First meme, that isn't my own, appeared in the comments. My story is getting popular.
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I fucking know right!?
But seriously, good job bro
Looking forward to the next chapter
So many references. I bet nobody even got the DBZ one.
Was the musuc he was hearing the Goku Super Saiyan 3 theme?
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Nah, it was more or less this part. You will know when you see it. Check
Edit: I edited the rant about site change to say something cool.
Ice
another great chapter!
Nice chapter. Now o wait for the next, and more to see who he ends up with.
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I like this one better:
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You Killed Me At The Introduction Part....."Enenenne"I........Can't........Breath........
Yep I liked this chapter. I was entertained the whole way through it.
Especially with this part.
Guys
What?
I need to pee . . . Lmao
pretty exciting chapter, I hope to see much more of this
Humans are so dumb
I can get away with saying that because I am one
2336770 I'll still kick your ass, bro, put up your dukes and lets go.