Scootaloo was never a fan of learning. No, she is too invested in stuff that doesn't deal with being an "egghead". However, what she doesn't know is that the consequences of her slacking off in school might jeopardize her connection with her best friends, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom. After a small talk with her teacher, she now is desperate to do anything do not fall behind in school, even if she becomes too smart for her own good. Follow Scootaloo on her tale of trying to cope with being booksmart and streetsmart at the same time.
(Takes place before the events of Twilight's coronation day)
Chapters (1)
Is this story a part of the Winningverse?
I always figured that this was the downside of Scootaloo choosing Rainbow Dash for a role model. If you'll recall, Rainbow dropped out of flight school and still somehow managed to get her life together. It's sending the wrong message to Scoot, who is most likely not going to be that lucky.
Anyway, onto the story itself. Your punctuation and capitalization could use a bit of polish, and having Scootaloo's thoughts appear on the same line as other speakers is quite sloppy. Otherwise, the idea itself is good, and the way you present it from Scootaloo's POV is a nice touch. Overall, not too shabby.
Where did Scootaloo learn such language? She also seems like way more of a jerk than she was in the show.
2136435 Lmao. If that's a compliant, thank you.
2136537 Yeah, it actually makes sense. Since Rainbow Dash is too cool for school and Scootaloo idealizes her, I thought it would be a good idea to make a fic where Scootaloo tries to emulate Rainbow Dash's fillyhood.
As for punctuation and capitalization, I agree. English isn't my first language, but that's where I attempt to look for a proof-reader. Anyways, thanks for insight!
2138340 Yeah, I had to make Scootaloo alittle OOC in this story. Why? Well, you will find out later. Lets just say the show never told us about Scootaloo's parents.
Well, this story has a fish hook in my lip...
Ouch...
I like the prospect of Scootaloo having this sort of trouble with school and having to leave her friends because of being held back. Can make for pretty good drama, and more than a few comedy moments as the CMC try to do homework. I can hear Scootaloo's snores now.
Huh, I never knew English wasn't your first language.
. Hmm, well, yeah. Spelling and grammar is mostly good in this first chapter. It's all really, mostly small stuff. The bigger problem I see is switching back and forth between past and present tense.
My lip started to quiver alittle. "But, I don't want to get left back..." I said while sniffling alittle.
The first sentence is correct, and the last part is correct too, but there are some better ways to write it that would make a little more sense (although, it still works fine). Watch those spaces between words; "alittle" is actually two words, and should be "a little". "Left" would make more sense as "held", since the phrase for failing a grade is "held back".
Wow, Scoots has a bit of a potty mou- or, brain rather. I trust that'll be explained shortly? And I see Scootalo has acquired Sam's twitch
Okey, 2 divided by 8(2/8) is not four
4/40 is not ten.
Either you wrote it in the wrong order or you wanted the roundabout way with 2 dividing 8 is four. Or you're implying that they are bad at math.
Either way the physicist and mathematician in me cried.
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They are little kids after all.
Is this part of the winningverse? Or did you just outright steal the title form?
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Thanks. I'll be sure to keep things spicey.
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I am very unaware of the winningverse. I didn't know I was using a form similar to the names they illustrate. The name is purely coincidental I assure you.
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Oh no, that actually was helpful. I'll have a guide to use for writing the apple family's dialogue for now on. I was debating in my head to re watch some episodes to get a gist, but it seems it would benefit. Thank you!
2271966 winningverse
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Oh. Wow, that's crazy. No, this story isn't associated with that group.
2272135 then i would consider changing the name, it's not copyrighted or anything, but hugely misleading.
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Alright then.
This chapter felt rushed and is full of lots of little mistakes, it made the flow a little hard to follow at times.
I like the way the plot is moving, but just a little more care in the telling is needed.
Hmmm, did Twilight actually cast a spell or just pretend to, giving Scootaloo the confidence in herself to do what she already could?
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she casted a spell.