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Manic Moon


Manic Moon is a demonpony. All he wants is to start a new life in Ponyville, together with his cute daughter Zelda. But how will Twilight Sparkle and all the other ponys in the small village react to the dynamic duo.

Can love and tolerance overcome old prejudices or will everthing end in one big disaster? Only time can tell.

Chapters (14)
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Manic Moon and his daughter Zelda


I never thought that I, of all people, would ask this, but...
Do you mind if I preread/fix up some of the grammatical mistakes in this story/chapter?
It really does seem like a great story at heart, and I feel as though people may dislike/turn away from it just because of simple things, like misspellings :/

2135813 and how sentence is structured and how the story is told. I like this but I do agree what That One Guy have said.

I´m realy sorry for the bad grammar. English isn´t my nativ language, so please understand that this is a little bit hard for me to write.

I would take "that one guys" offer as a spell checker, simple editing can do wonders for a story

The grammatical better version is now online. Many thanks to " That One Guy " for helping me. I hope you all can enjoy this story now even more. :pinkiehappy:

interesting will fav and thumb it

quite a few errors scattered about most of it is wrong words in certain places such as exapt instead of accept
looking good so far

A Wonderful Story. But I hope Diamond Tiara's Revenge is not to mean.

I like the fact the new foal character did not join up with the cmc for once.

2202431 This is one of the main ideas behind my story. I want to lay the focus more on the background ponies. The mane 6 will only apear in situations, where they have to.

Excellent work :D!
(In other news, I'm the worst prereader ever :fluttershyouch:)

2203116If my english wouldn´t be so bad, I wouldn´t need a prereader. You did an awesome job. :raritywink:

A wonderful new Chapter. I cant wait to read from this Sleepover^^

2234505 Then I guess you will love chapter 6. Cause it will be the main theme of it. :yay:

yay police ... this should be fun

what are the odds cal lives with autumn

:pinkiegasp: fine its 100/100

I wonder how they shall handle the foals hmmm.

This is truly mone of my favorite fics...:twilightsmile:

Thank you. I do my best. The next chapter will come very soon and yes, it´s going to be the sleep over party of Zelda + a little extra. :raritywink:

Sounds like a good Sleepover. I hope Zelda will like her new Pet.

The first thing I though by the Game Chaos in Equestria I had Jumanji in my mind, with Discord as GameMaster^^

To tell the truth Chaos in Equestria is a little text RPG I´m leading on a german page. I thought it would be a nice idea to bring it somehow in my fanfic. :twilightblush:

i want whisper :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: GIVE ME WHISPER

Zelda + Manic = best thunder buddies ever!?! :pinkiehappy:

I like it. It's a nice sweet story about a father and a daughter expierncing day to day life and the event that occur in them. I would like to know what happened to Zelda's mother though. Manic Moon seems to miss her a great deal.:fluttershysad::raritydespair:

this is just too easy Starscream. The story is just too good; the Autobots wouldn't see it coming

"Who was hijacked by the evil changeling queen." Zelda said with an evil voice and jumped between Rumble and Autumn to separate their characters.
I was surprised the Zelda was the one who said it. Mostly due to the fact that changelings had a problem with... well the whole love stealing-thing-and-attacking-Canterlot bit going over there heads. Really brought a smile on my face.
Also... when are you going to load chapter 8 :fluttershysad: I'm a very sad panda when I read good stories and get to a point like this in the story :fluttercry:

I will start to work on it tomorrow. I already know what to write, but it will take some time. I will hurry as much as I can.

2411340 oh please Darling, do take your time, after trying the writing thing myself, I can see why it may take time to get a chapter done. Still though... I look forward to your next chapter :pinkiehappy: also this might sound wierd, but umm, do you need a proofreader? :twilightblush:

I´ve already got one, but thanks for the offer.

Great story and don't worry about it not being your first language english is hard as all fuck and in writing we even sometimes use slangs also epic story

lol, good shit, Derpy certainly took the reaction rather well :rainbowlaugh::derpytongue2:

2431812 derpies seen worse but that ending LOL

flashaback was:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

"By the way, I´m a demon pony and if I were you, I would go now and never ever show my face in a pony town again." :facehoof:

You need to kill your proofreader or find a new one because he/she is doing a poor job. :ajbemused:

But the story is good so far.

Possible spoilers
And... cue changeling invasion to "reclaim the rightful heir to the throne"

Fantastic story. I just started reading this today, and this instantly went onto my favorites list. The description alone got my like. So congratulations, you've wowed me with this. Please update again soon! :yay:

2540906 I'm glad :twilightsmile:

But it was toatally true. This is a very good story: mixed D'awwws with some humor and some action/adventure vibe. Very nice!

yay! trixie is back and getting help =D

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