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I write second-person sensual fiction featuring you and your favourite ponies. If there's anything you'd like to know, just ask, I'm always happy to answer questions!

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i enjoyed the ending.
also you missed a you in this sentence "Tonight, you proved how faithful are to her, turning down the sultry advances of her sister."

I do have a massage fetish, actually. Nice work. Yay, I'm the good guy... Hope to see more.

Decisions, decisions.
Time to think strategically!
[thinking, thinking, thinking]
I've got it!

I gotta say, reading this after getting the good ending was painful since I knew what was coming. This is definitely my favorite story of yours, good job.

> Implying we didn't already have a massage fetish.

Crowley, you had my respect before, but now you've just gone beyond awesome! :pinkiehappy:

Thanks Slashe, fix'd!

This was exactly what I expected to happen :raritywink:
Honestly I choose the non-cheating way, yet I simply had to read this one :pinkiesmile:
Will read the good ending now :twilightsmile:

Good thing I picked the good ending. That bad one is borderline depressing.

Still wanted an ending that ends in a three-way, but still a nice fic.

>Implying I didn't already know you were playing one of two games, "We share everything" or "The Test"

Actually a massage right about now would be lovely! My back is killing me, so to speak... :applejackunsure:
Loved the story as usual, but I don't think there's much of a need for me to say that :raritywink:
Waiting patiently for the next one :pinkiehappy:

I totally saw this coming. I think I saw it in a movie once.

Isn't this second person story telling? Interesting... Very, very interesting. :pinkiesad2:

165048 3 way would be awesome! :trollestia:

Chose this one the first time. Went back to read chapter 3 just to see what happened there. Good solid story here Crowley.

Saw it coming. Great story, though. Poor Lotus.

Only one?!
You heartless monster!

If you keep writing so well, I'm going to have way too many fetishes.

Just noticed this:

"Out trotted two unicorns, a dazzling white mare that you recognised as a regular customer to the spa, and a stallion who seemed to be her companion."

You wouldn't happen to be planning a story around this, would you? :raritywink:

Maaaybe. Perhaps a Rarity fic. Perhaps not. You'll have to find out yourself, in a future fic! :raritystarry:

These spa twins fics are pretty rare, or maybe I'm not looking in the right places...

Anyway, nice story :twilightsmile:

... And you would know that we only read ONE of the two options... HOW? Besides, you're talking to Moonstone, one of the most opinionated Bronies out there! XD If I only chose one, I OBVIOUSLY decide to stay true! I mean, I did NOT spend SIX FRELLING MONTHS with her, proving taht she could trust me, JUST to blow it all for a one-night stand! So SCREW YOU, ALOE!... Or rather, NOT screw you, Aloe! Go hit on Big Mac or something, because THIS stallion is taken! *Storms off in a huff*

~ Moonstone, Minstrelof Equestria

... And THAT is why Chivalry is AWESOME! Chivalry might be dying, but it's not dead yet! Thanks for an awesome fic! It was LEGENDARY!

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

Best moral I've read in a fic... That I've read anywhere. You sir, will get my stars.

YES! I won!

+30 Light Karma
Fetish gained: Massage

Crowley is going to turn me into a sexual deviant if I keep reading these, what with all the fetishes he gives me...

166437 Tell me about it. I already have a Derpy fetish, an RD fetish, a Luna fetish (and my own personal teenage CMC fetish) I don't need more!

"You're the stallion she's been waiting for." ALL OF MY YES!!!!! :yay:

Okay, that's definitely the thing I need after reading silent ponyville :raritywink:

I think I made the right choice. :raritywink: Excellent little story here.


This was amuseing.


I guess this is a test, so I'll choose chapter 4 :coolphoto:

Excellent moral. Simply excellent. You sir, are a gentleman and a scholar.

"...watching as her love for you slips away." :fluttercry:

as always, i love your stories and your unique way to illustrate them, it immerses you even more into the story
ps. GIRLFRIEND?!... you mean marefriend right?

I was considering uing the terms "coltfriend" and "fillyfriend", as colt and filly are equal to boy and girl respectively (marefriend would imply womanfriend, which doesn't work as a word). However, throughout the whole of the MLP seasons, they seem to use the word "girls" to describe their friends more than mare and filly combined (Applejack and Twilight especially seem to like using that word). If, in the Hearts and Hooves episode, they use filly/marefriend, I'll change it accordingly.



That was amazingly written, and I'm glad I chose to be the good guy. Now to go see what the bad guy one was... :ajsmug:

You're getting better in this... :rainbowwild:

I would like a third option!

Leaving BOTH! :pinkiecrazy:

I'm not even going to bother reading the bad ending, however it is missing that check mark of "Read" :twilightangry2:.

165660 That sounds like a good idea. Personally, I just want to know who that stallion is.

Actually, Lotus seemed to arouse him (or me) with her "massage" a little too easily and quickly. Are you sure that she doesn't have any prior "experience"?

Also, I had a feeling it would end up being a test.

Now I want to read chapter 3, but I know it can't end well since this was "The Test" setup.

190040 Well, you can change it from "unread" to "read" without reading it. Just click on the flame icon and it'll be changed to a check mark. As for me, I will read the bad ending because I like to see where all possibilities go...just to see what happens.

Although this is the bad ending, I still think it's worth reading as the good ending. Because in the good ending, you didn't mention that backstory and why they do this test. If the backstory was mentioned in the good ending, this would just be "the bad ending". But because it's not mentioned, this qualifies as having qualities that the good ending doesn't possess. Personally, I wouldn't liked to hear that backstory in the good ending.

Mr. Crowley, what goes on in your head?

P.S. Could I have your permission to make a prequel to this story based on Lotus' first (failed) love interest? I'll probably even have it lead up to when...uh...when "I" defended her in that flashback.

If you feel it will add more to the overall story, go right ahead, write what you like. Might be interesting!

Eeyup I got a massage fetish now. But then how I can learn to massage my own very special somepony. And make that mare like pudding in my hooves:twilightsmile:

Hey nice story and I like the idea of Stalliongrad! :twilightsmile:

Being the good guy is always the right thing to do.

But curiosity sets in...

But what happens in the other one?:rainbowderp:

What should I do? I...um...erhhh....

I can't take it anymore!!!:raritycry:

goes to read the other chapter.

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