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NintendoGal55


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Rainbow Dash is thrilled to have Twilight, now an alicorn, as a new flying buddy. However, she comes to realize that it all feels exactly like what happened in the past. Namely, similar events that had occurred with Gilda, something she regrets. Worried she'll end up neglecting Fluttershy again, she looks to Twilight for help.

~FlutterDash~

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Flutterdash strikes back with a counter attack.:rainbowlaugh:

This will be a good read.

This is just what we needed. Chur.
But Im surprised its Flutterdash is so light......
:yay::rainbowwild:

Already? That didn't take long...

Two things come to mind on the negative side:

1) You keep switching from italics and 'single quotations' when it comes to thoughts. Pick one, and stick with it. I prefer italics.

2) I feel that at every moment, you just blurted out everything that "needed" to be said. In that sense, there wasn't anything left either implied, or unsaid but assumed. Best way to think of it is this line:

“Oh... I think I understand now,” Twilight said, placing a hoof on her friend's shoulder, "Before Gilda came along, Fluttershy was your only friend, the only pony you would go flying with. Gilda came along, and you saw a better flying buddy because they were fast. And then after she was out of your life, all you had was Fluttershy. Now that I have wings, you thought it was great that you and I could be flying buddies and race together.

You might have wanted to say something like this instead...

"“Oh... I think I understand now,” Twilight said, placing a hoof on her friend's shoulder. "You feel that you are doing the same thing to Fluttershy with me that you did with Gilda so long ago."

Why? Because Rainbow JUST said what you had Twilight say.


Overall though, it was cute, it was sweet, and it was... well... YOU!! :pinkiehappy:

I'm not really suprised it ended with them still loving one another and the likes, though it would have been a twist if they broke up. Still....very great read, seriously detailed and really impressive plus really love this pairing, you did a great job:twilightsmile:

This was a nice read. Very cute! Well done! :twilightsheepish:

I like the idea of Fluttershy being her flight buddy. It's nice that she included Twilight but remembered to not leave poor Fluttershy behind at the end. :yay:

It is the role of the Princess to be the guiding, shining light for her Little Ponies. She is a combination of judge, counsellor, teacher, conciliator and protector for them all. She is the one to guide them on the path of friendship, good, wisdom and Harmony when their own wisdom is not enough to tell them the way to go. Sometimes, as we see here, it is enough to reassure them that they are doing the right thing and give words to the self-knowledge that, perhaps, they lack the courage to speak for themselves

Celestia does that all the time; we saw Luna do that in "Sleepless in Ponyville". Now you've given us an example of Twilight doing the same. Thanks for that! :twilightsmile:

2134045 Yep! :pinkiehappy: You bet!

2134123 I put the single quotations for reference so that I know where to italicize when I'm editing the post before submission. :twilightsheepish: Anyway, thanks for the tip, I fixed that line. It works a lot better now. Overall, thank you kindly! Glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiehappy:

2134207 There's no reason for them to break up! If I did that, I'd have been trying too hard and it would've been out of place. The entire point was to finally give Rainbow a chance to balance her time in flying with Twilight and Fluttershy, without having to give up either friendship because of it.

2134398 I felt that would happen, that Rainbow would take Twilight as a flying buddy, but in the long run, wouldn't leave Fluttershy behind. :twilightsmile:

2134413 Well that's a neat way of putting it! :raritystarry:

2134116 Yeah, it came to be a bit lighter than I thought it would. But I guess it works!

I'm wondering if we can expect more assertive Fluttershy in future stories, and see her push her own limits more by choice than through emergency or to help somepony in dire need of help.

An easy one comes to mind. Increasing her endurance so she can spend more time flying with her Dashie :yay::rainbowhuh:

2135351 You can count on that! I'm definitely thinking of ways to do things like that. Plus one idea I have is Fluttershy trying to save a falling Rainbow Dash and ends up making a Sonic Rainboom. :pinkiehappy:

2135358
don't you mean a Flutterboom? a bright pink shock wave with a bunch of ghost butterflies floating around? :yay:

2135515 Sonic Flutterboom! Ha! That's pretty cool. :yay:

Hey, noticed the Flutterdash shipping. Why isn't there a romance tag? (with all the hugging and kissing on the lips and I love you goo goos and fluff)

It is the first fanfic with Alicorn Twilight I've read! XD

Very good and enjoyable story! :twilightsmile: I've read it in one breath and suddenly it was over. :pinkiehappy:

Nice FlutterDash you've got there! :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

2140199 Romance took the backseat here. XD But I guess I'll throw it in anyway, since it does technically involve it!

oh my celestia! the fact that you put the letter to princess celestia at the end just made this fic 20% cooler it was like the icing on the cake! great work! you never fal to impress me ^^:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

So shy and rainbow was lovers from the start? :rainbowderp:

I must say, this is another amazing story :pinkiehappy: keep up the fantastic work. :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

You put up a great story here, when i saw it, it felt like that it's the 1st episode of Season 4 of MLP and that right here is a natural or shall i say "le naturale" :moustache: :moustache:

Oh bic BOIIIIIIIII dis shit is so dericious. Lyka som booooooooodi.
:applejackconfused:

That was a really good fic...
Was there ever any doubt? :trixieshiftright:
I love your fics they are "top notch" :moustache:
But then its the end of the fic.. :raritycry: Oh my stars! Did it have to end so quickly??!
Well... onto another of your fics! :trollestia:
ALICORN PARTY!:pinkiehappy:
:yay::heart::rainbowwild:

This was a pleasant surprise. I love your FlutterDash stuff, but going through it, it seemed the one shots were turning into pure fluff. This was a nice little piece of introspection.

just a couple things:

“Like they say, you never know you have until you had to compare it!”

This sentence is kinda awkward. Isnt supposed to say you never know what you have until you can compare it to something?

Also,

The next day, onsidering that she wasn't in the mood for a slow flight,

You missed a "c".

Other than that, AWESOMENESS!

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