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Okay, it's question answering time!
I first checked this fic out because it made me think of Burning Souls and I was wondering if this would be just as bad. (Burning Souls SUCKED)
I favorited it because it because I was amazed that someone had taken what seemed like a dumb concept and made it interesting.
My favorite part had to be the first person perspective. Hearing poor Fluffy's opinions on Equestria and everything in it was just hilarious!
As for what I would like changed. I'd have to say I'd prefer Fluffy to be a different eeveelution. (I never did like fire types)
2186817 XD Yeah, but that's part of the point. Being a Flareon, I mean. I was waiting for someone to notice, but since no one has yet... Don't you think it's a little odd for someone named GLENN WINTERS to be a FIRE-type? (Glen, being a (usually) grassy field, and Winters?) One of the themes is/was that, even if someone wanted to be a Pokemon, why would they get to chose what they would be? I... don't really have anything to actually justify it storyline-wise, but just like I think everyone would freak out, even if only for a couple seconds, I wanted something else that would be a trend, and that's everyone not being what they want, losing something they considered important to them, etc. The next chapter will really drive that home, since more characters will be introduced, some are crazy, some are in denial, etc.
So, in short, you liked it because it wasn't "Oh, cool, I'm an awesome Pokemon, AND I'm in Equestria?! Can it get better than this?!' and was more "... Okay, WTF happened, and WTF am I?" of not knowing Equestria?
Personally, not only do I love the two eeveelutions the most, but my personality is always tied in the tests between Glaceon and Espeon. My actual Pokesona is a 'Snow Espeon', a weirdo mutant that somehow got the Ice element as an Espeon, instead of Psychic. X3
Also, I'm thinking I'm totally keeping the name for 'me' as Fluffy', since it's just so catchy and demeaning.
Well at first I saw that this fix was doing well so I thought hmm must be good I'll just put it in read later. Next beginning chapter had my favorite character so I was all like hmm maybe she will make another appearance later on as well. Then it went to hey I'm an eevelution and I was like ok ok . Then the part where he called his brain Brian I was like huh kinda crazy I like that in a fix. And that was mostly it.
there were a few pokemon - mlp crossovers that caught my eye 'burning souls' was one of the ones that didn't really catch on for me ( no real plot development in my opinion ) ... in truth only two of them I am still watching and those are this one and one that a guy gets turned into an aron ... both have to concept that pokemon can't really talk and with this one the whole story line that they used to be on equist and some evil stallion bringing them all back is kind of interesting
I honestly started reading this fic to give me something to keep me up a little longer. Nothing particular about it cought my eye. I just read it for something to read.
That said, I really enjoyed this story
2186925 An aron? That's a new one... Are you sure you don't mean Beldum? They look kinda similar, so I can understand if you got the two mixed up. X3
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nope its about an aron. story's called heart of steel - url below
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/82782/heart-of-steel
2186939NO He has it right the beldum one is a pokemon problem. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/82028/a-pokemon-problem
I just saw that a lot of Poke' fics were popping up, did a search for all of them and just started reading. I just got back into the games and was trying to re-immerse my self. Your's wasn't the best but it was ok; this, Heart of Steel, and the Shedinja one are the only ones I'm still following.
I got referred to it by someone else who said it was good (I think) and the picture also looked really cool so I read it.
I would change the bit at the end of the last chapter where Pinkie barrels in completely unannounced with another pokemon while making ridiculous claims about it being an alligator AND ALSO IGNORING THE WOUNDED CREATURE RIGHT THERE THAT THEY ARE ALL CLEARLY WORRIED ABOUT. It just screamed OOC and being a jerk to me. She even says something about how her distraction will make things better even though there is no possible way that could be true or that she actually believes that the existence of an alligator can heal animals.
Checked the fic because Pokemon, and the cover art looked interesting
Enjoyed and stayed for the first person narrative and flareon
I enjoyed mostly everything about this fic
The one thing I would change is I've never seen a fic where a pony, or, one of the mane six, goes to the pokemon world and becomes a trainer.
I want to see one so badly, and there is ONE on this site... but it got discontinued.
the description looked interesting so thats why i checked it out.\
I favorited it because i liked the plot of the story and where it was going.
I would not change anything with seeing how it isn't my fic and i like it the way it is.
I liked the concept and the writing style.
2187617 Me2
I'm in a similar situation. My Top Gear fanfic immediately attracted a huge number of hits where my other stories- stories that I put equal or more effort into- just don't seem to attract views. Crossovers take off in terms of short term popularity, but it's usually more fulfilling for a writer to earn praise on a work based on merit alone, rather than because they're writing about other people's favourite anime or game characters.
TBH I started reading this with a due sense of caution and dread, but stayed because you pulled it off well, unlike most of these other recent pokemon self inserts.
Ill just say that when this wasn't actually an updated chapter, I was sad. :<
2187303 Eh... I guess it is a bit OOC... I think, at the time, I was to afraid it would be too... whatever, to have everyone who came onto the scene to be completely worried about Fluffy, because it would be like... An OC/self-insert where all of the mane six think he's hot, or everyone likes him, etc. Pinkie Pie was just the easiest to have just kind of ignore him to an extent. I mean, I haven't explained HOW Pinkie found 'Gummy 2.0', have I? Pinkie isn't worried because of that, so I'll get there eventually. X3
2188042 Alright, and I'm going to sound stupid, but what made this pulled off better than most of the other PiE fics you read? I guess that's what I'm trying to figure out. XD
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I guess I just got the sense that this particular story had a little more depth to it than the whole 'whoops, I'm in Equestria with awesome powers' gig. For one thing it's grammatically sound, for another you do write well in the first-person, which is difficult to do.
i began reading the fic just because i am an absolute fanatic of crossover fics and i give every crossover fic that i find at least a try if i know the two worlds that are crossed over (a lot fail after the first one or two chapters because the author has no idea where to take his fic after introductions are over)
i continued reading and faved this fic because you seemd like you had a plan where to take all of this instead of the protagonists just mindlessly lumbering about and doing stuff that makes no sense.
i would write more but im at burger king with a crappy tablet right now, ill elaborate further later if you want to hear it.
Lemme go get my Triforce hat while I write this. Okay, gotta be truthful. I first looked at this fic because frankly, it seemed like one of the PiE that had potential. A lot of them always pushed my buttons because I'm a gamer first, a brony second. When someone makes a mistake, I get serious. Like, I want to punch you through a wall and beat you with my computer until you and the computer die serious. So, I go checking this, seeing if there are any mistakes and whatnot and surprisingly, I saw none! So far this story had me reading to see any problems, but then you go and make no problems. And then, I felt like " Hm. I must admit, it's off the beaten path and it's doing great with it." So then ya pulled me in with the story. Of course a Pokémon isn't going to be able to talk to ponies! You don't see ponies going around saying " Twilight, Twi, Light!" That. Would just. Be. Wrong. Frankly, the one thing that irks me is Flareon using Flare Blitz but hell! It's a fanfiction so if they know a move they shouldn't know, I just need to get my ass together and actually realize that this is a story that the author decides what goes on! Unfortunately, seeing that blog of yours (yes I read blogs. I'm just a bit comment shy.) and realizing this was an experiment at first, yes, I felt a bit out of it. Mainly because I'm used to experimenting on others in my high school, not being experimented on. Some story plots just don't reel me in ya know? Look, I gotta be real and am going to be kind of a jerk right now. Look, special talent or no special talent, don't wonder what the hell you're supposed to do. Because people like that, I don't like. Do you wait EVERY DAY for orders to be given to you by some higher up? Maybe you do,maybe it's the job you're working right now, but don't settle for that dammit! Don't just fucking wonder "What am I supposed to do?" I'll tell you what. Make your own fucking path, don't let others decide what you're going to do. Don't leave it up to fate. You made an experiment that proved your hypothesis wrong? Have you been in science class before? There have been many before you who threw things at the wall expecting them to stick, but it just flopped on the floor. So they tried again and again. That pride and confidence you had lost? If you ask me, it should stay lost. Because you post a story to be a joke? A laugh? An experiment? A story is not just for experimenting. It's for creating a world and even a lifestyle for some! But you? You had decided to take a little census check? See what happens eh? It's just a joke? Stories aren't jokes, unless that is THE MAIN POINT of the damn story! But do I see one damn comedy tag on this fic? That's just it, I DON'T. You take a story, make it great, make it different! Yet it was all just a pathetic little experiment to you?! If you're going to post a story, one that you work on for even the smallest bit, expect anything to happen. The community is not one small damn control group! Now then, you can continue your story and how you feel about this. You can quit the story altogether and just forget all this happened, erase parts of the blog that even mentioned this fic. You could continue it and actually find something to salvage from this, a little joy that something you fucking spent time on no matter how little time spent wasn't ignored.
2189156 Awesome, thanks! I know that 1 was feeling pretty lonely, so thanks for helping it out! Have a great day!
2189164 XD That is NOT a giant wall of text, and thank you for being honest! At this point, I'm feeling better about life in general, mostly because I was taking the 'results' of the experiment without thinking about some of the other variables that would affect it, etc. So yes, I DO have plans to continue this, with an actual plot (to an extent), I didn't leave myself a TON of room, but I've got enough to get started, introduce villain(s), side-characters, and other stuff like that. Honestly, I wasn't going to use Flare Blitz, but after a couple of people randomly suggested it, talked about it, and then I got to Scootaloo needing a name with a two-word limit, I just... It worked too perfectly. XD I mean, it's Scootaloo. She idolizes Dash, and Dash... Well, dashes. XD I figure, you know, I'm a human that's turned into a Pokemon. Wouldn't that mess with abilities, just a little bit? Just wait until I get to the Totodile. That poor guy is going to have a messed up skill-set because of situations beyond his control, and they're all (hopefully) going to be hilarious. Got permission to use a friend's character that I know very well on top of that, so I can promise that the characters are going to be good. X3
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(Though i have to ask what problems you meant. That's a bit vague, and I don't know if you mean grammatically, staying true to the game, or something else entirely. If you could expand upon that, that would be nice.
Also, to anyone still reading the comments, I'm actually already over 1k of the way through the next chapter, so if I can get homework done efficiently enough, there should be another chapter in just a bit!
2189280 Problems as in game problems. Like saying, in most games Mario jumps higher than Luigi? (I've had arguments about that before) We all know Luigi jumps higher than Mario (or the same height most of the time), when I'm talking about games, I get serious about games. Then I get serious about everything that lead up to the talk of games.
2189364 Alright, I get what you mean. I do my best, but not having played Ruby/Sapphire will hurt me a little, and I'm not a Pokegeek, nerd, whatever the word you want to use, so if I make a mistake in the future, can I count on your to be vocal about it? (And since when does Mario jump higher than Luigi? Lol wut?)
2189387 Yessir. You can count on me to be there. (It's made most obvious in Super Mario Galaxy. Wherein after getting 120 stars as Mario you can play as Luigi who jumps higher and is faster. Not many games showcase that mainly because they give Mario and Luigi equal jump height because it's two player so both players play on an even playing field. Sorry, I'm a bit of a gaming nerd. Besides, after Ruby/Sapphire, a lot of things have changed. So I'd just be a bit careful eh?)
I thought that this was good in comparison to OTHER Pokemon crossovers.
A whole lot of them aren't that great.
Now, I would like you to continue this, it's a great non-serious read, and sometimes it's nice to take a break from some serious writing.
I was surprised not to see a comedy tag- I found this fic kinda funny at times.
What really wound me in on this though, is that you made sure the main character(s?) didn't get any ridiculous special treatment.
A lot of people tend to basically make the story mold around the characters, and it's almost like they are absolutely perfect in every way.
You, however, avoided this- character's decisions made a fair amount of sense.
Now if you don't want to continue this, that's perfectly fine. There's a lot of stuff I did just as an experiment before chucking it out the window.
But due to the mostly positive feedback this has received, if you are debating whether to continue this or not, I say go with it.
People are most likely to check out your other works if you have something fairly successful.
I think the reason people had noticed this more is probably due to the fact that 'Burning Souls' had received unnecessary positive feedback, and they may have wanted to see more.
It's also probably the fact that you updated basically every day, creating 2,000 word chapters.
So, I do hope you continue this mate, but if you truly do not like it that is completely fine.
-Twilight
I decided to give this story a shot due to the tags and like rating. (I'm a sucker for human fics)
I really like the comedy with Brian that you've incorporated and the fact that you seem to have a decent pace without rushing events.
My favorite aspect must be cute 'lil Sweetie insisting on naming him 'Fluffy' despite his obvious protest.
1- I'd never even heard of your other fic until just now
2- I tend to avoid almost everything that has a dark tag out of principle (there are rare exceptions for fantastic writers, shortskirtsandexplosions particularly)
3- I like crossovers in particular (I find them so interesting as to slog through the bowels of the internet searching for the few good ones)
4- I'm sorry to say there is nothing in your other story's synopsis that captures my interest, at all, I'm sorry for being so blunt but I honestly feel that the story just isn't for me as a reader
I've finally started to read this one, Trevor. And, honestly, it's good. While I'm not a fan of most crossovers, this one, so far, has me liking it. Now then, time to do even moar reading!