In Which the Journey Begins (ALSO TO BE EDITED. PLEASE DISREGARD FOR NOW.)
After the bath, Jessie slipped out first, immediately being enveloped by a Flamethrower. Not only did it have the benefit of instantly drying her, but it also meant that I wouldn’t be able to see anything. While I much prefer ice and water, fire could be quite useful at times, it seems.
By the time I finished tossing flames in Jessie’s general direction, she had already turned around, waiting for me as I pulled the plug in the drain. I pulled the curtain shut, closing my eyes before I shook myself vigorously. I really disliked needing to dry myself in such a fashion, but seeing as how Flareon is a dog-like Pokemon, especially with such poofy fur, trying to dry by towel would use up several towels at the absolute least.
Opening the curtain, I accept the towel that Jessie held out for me, using it to start vigorously rubbing myself as dry as I could. Jessie left once I took the towel, as she recognized that I did need to dry everywhere so… Yeah.
I just wonder if she was serious about sleeping on the bed tonight. I mean, it isn’t like the couch was that uncomfortable, and I don’t want to give her the wrong impression after we finally patched things up, but… Well, she was the one who offered, so even if she had changed her mind, I shouldn’t get yelled at for poking my head in the door, right?
Who am I kidding, I don’t have a death wish. I knock on the bedroom door lightly. “Jessie? It alright to come in?”
“Yeah, go ahead,” she replies, already sounding like she was dozing off.
I nudge the door open with my nose, padding in quietly. The room hadn’t changed much at all since the last time I saw it. There were still lavender curtains for the window, a small vanity in the corner, and small nightstands on both sides of the bed. And, let me tell you… This bed was impressive.
It took up, like… two thirds or so of the entire room? I mean, this bed was emperor-sized. Not queen, not king, but emperor. Sorry to repeat myself, but I just want to make sure you understand how massive this bed is.
Anyway, I carefully hop up, noticing that Jessie had chosen to curl up near the center, so I decided to sleep at the foot of the bed. On the rare chance that she changed her mind later, or something unexpected happened, I would be right next to the door.
I yawn widely, already half asleep as I start to curl up on top of the sheets, knowing I would be far too hot if I tried to cover myself with anything. “Goodnight, Jessie. Thank you…”
I don’t know if she replied or not, as I was already asleep the second my head touched my paws.
I woke some time later, and I could immediately tell I had slept far better than I did on the couch. I felt relaxed, and I wasn’t hot like I had been the past week because it felt like… Well, it felt like someone had wrapped a cold blanket around my back. I squirmed into it, a small smile forming as I felt how soft it was against my fur. It felt oddly similar to fur, but that just made it that much more comfortable. There was even a tiny fan blowing small puffs of cold air into my mane, but it was only the occasional small puff, not at all like the steady whir I was used to back on Earth.
I frown a little bit as I kick Brian from his bed. Hey, what’s up with the fan?
Flamingos and foxes.
Nnnngh… Brian, wake up. What’s with the fan? And… actually, since when is there such a thing as a cold blanket?
Nnn… Crystal?
Oh, yeah, that makes sense, I agree tiredly, starting to fall back asleep.
... Oh shit.
Immediately I tense, my eyes snapping open as we’re both suddenly very much awake. The cold blanket was Jessie. Evidently, at some point in the night, I can only guess that she got cold, and found my back and mane as an acceptable source of heat. I was, in essence, the small spoon, even though I was bigger than her. I would have laughed at the irony if I wasn’t frozen in terror.
She’s going to wake up. She’s going to wake up, and freak out, and kill me. This is exactly what happened before we even met, and she’s going to think I’m taking advantage of her, and she’s going to go back to thinking I’m a pervert…
Just stay asleep, bruh. Just play dead. She won’t kill you if you’re already dead, right?!
I… I’m going to wake her up.
Are you insane?! Just because you’re feeling suicidal doesn’t mean you should take me down with you!
I know, but it’s the only way! If she’s going to hate me, then I at least want to face it head-on. If I just lay here and wait for her to wake up, it would be pure torture! I may as well wake her up and get it over with, right?
... I was an honor to work with you, I suppose. May God have mercy on your soul.
Yeah… No kidding.
Swallowing hard, I take a shuddering breath before I carefully roll onto my stomach, wanting to carefully extract myself from her grip. My eyes nearly bug out when I feel her weight on top of me, her grip on my coat so strong that she had moved with me, while sleeping.
I am beyond doomed… I lament to myself. I carefully lay back down, shuffling over enough to let her lay where I had been, which was a bit warmer than where her cold body had been laying, and apparently she liked that, as she purred quietly as she nuzzled the back of my neck in her sleep.
I… I can’t believe you’re not dead yet, Brian gasps in awe.
You and me both, man.I’m just… I’m going to go back to sleep. At least this way, odds are I’ll die in my sleep. It’ll just be like dying of old age.
Yeah, may as well.
I close my eyes, resigning myself to whatever my fate might be.
I am woken up by Jessie shaking me. “Hey, come on, wake up already!” she hisses. “You’re laying on my arm!”
“Sorry,” I mumble, yawning as I shift to let her extract her limb from- Oh. So that’s how I’m going to die… I release the very weapon she’ll use as the instrument of my destruction.
“S’not your fault,” she replies, grumbling as she shifts behind me. “I just figured you’d be warmer than a blanket, so it’s my own damn fault for getting my arm trapped. I’d ask if you slept alright, but considering how hard it was to wake you, I’m going to take it as you slept well.”
“If you mean aside from the terror in the middle of the night to find out that you had decided to use me as a teddy bear and be scared witless that you were going to wake up and freak out on me like you did when we first met, then yes, I slept well,” I rambled, not having yet installed my filter for the day.
Jessie blinks. “... You are stupidly honest when you wake up, aren’t you.”
“To the point of suicide,” I agree, still not shutting up.
The female Glaceon grins widely. “Ohhhh, I am going to abuse this maliciously. But for now, we need to get going. It’s going to be dawn in a couple hours, and we need to be gone before then. You ready?”
I yawn, covering my mouth with a paw. “Hmm? Yeah, sure. S’not like I need to care what I look like, if we’re going to be traveling all day. The sooner we start, the sooner I get to earn my first break, after all. We can eat on the road.”
Jessie gave me a strange look. “Right… Let’s get going then. Daring said she’d meet us at the edge of the woods to the west.”
“Alright… You left the note for Kaye already?” I ask, stretching both to help pop some bones, as well as to make sure my muscles would be ready for the long hike.
“Yeah… I had actually slipped it into her room last night, but I know it’s fine, since she always goes to bed by eight, and I slipped it in at eight-thirty. I… Do you think we’re making the right choice?”
I pause, frowning in thought. “... Well, regardless of whether or not it’s right, it’s the choice we’ve made, so we should stick with it. We’ll just have to hope and pray that she’ll understand, and if not, that she’ll at least be able to forgive us. She deserves to live in a world that’s safe. Might be dangerous for us, but better us than her. Now come on, there’s no time to hesitate,” I say, moving past her to pick up the saddlebags to put on my back. “As the saying goes, “he who hesitates is lost.” We have chosen our direction. All we can do is move forward with confidence.”
“... Since when did you get so confident?”
“... Probably because I’m scared shitless,” I admit quietly, chuckling nervously. “It’s a lot easier to bluster your way through things and hope it all works out. If I actually stop to think about it, I’ll be too scared to keep moving.”
“Better get moving then,” Jessie says with an evil smirk. “I’m going to have fun watching you sweat yourself to death.”
“I can hardly wait,” I sigh, walking for the door.
As we snuck along the outskirts of Ponyville, the night sky still amazed me. Not only were the constellations different, but since Princess Luna controlled the night sky, there was nearly always something happening, whether it was a small meteor storm or an aurora.
I realise I have never really gone in-depth as to what Ponyville is like, and for that I apologize. I think it might be because it is still rather amazing how naturesque it is. Yes, the buildings all have electricity and whatnot, but every single house had room for at least a small garden unless you lived near the market-place, but even there the air just… It smells so fresh and invigorating, as if encouraging the small town to do their best to grow crops and sell their wares. No wonder the ‘crusaders’ ran around trying everything to get their marks; it was a good excuse to just run around and play outside with friends.
Regardless, Jessie and I made our way towards the meet-up point, and not for the first time was I grateful that having pawpads meant we moved with near silence. So long as we were able to control our breathing, we should be alright.
My fears turned out to be unwarrented, thankfully, as we slipped into Whitetail Woods. My mind wandered briefly, pondering if there were any deer, and if so, if they were sapient, but I did not wonder long as our dusty-yellow guide fluttered in front of us silently. She looked at me, her head barely moving to the side as the corners of her eyes seemed to tighten. I arched my eyebrow in response, wondering why she seemed confused, but it was ignored.
Seeming to shrug with her wings, she turned and began to lead the way through the woods. Jessie’s ears remained alert, and I tried to focus myself to remain vigilant. This was our first Pokemon adventure, after all, and I would hate to be the first to roll a Nat 1 on my Perception Che-
Snap!
… Dammit Brian...
Well... I mean, the chapters aren't particularly long yet, but I'd rather keep them shorter as I get back into the swing of writing, get my consistency up, and so forth. I'd hate to try longer chapters immediately, only to start struggling in the middle of a chapter.
Anyway, thank you all for being so patient! I hope to keep this up, as I'm starting to get ideas for what kind of adventures can happen in the time it will take them to reach the temple. Based on the comments I have received so far, I am not going to be adding any tags, at least for now. I do not want to get preemptive, nor would I want to misdirect you guys if they don't end up turning into something more. I feel like whatever progression they have will feel more natural if I just keep winging it, and stay more in a "in the moment" sort of mind-set for the both of them, considering neither of them really feel like they can plan for the long-term yet.
And to those of you who might be worried that it's only going to be about Fluffy, Crystal, and Daring, I say to you that you are severely underestimating a certain group of characters. 
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Huh. That ending was interesting. I wonder what that snap alerted .
I love this chapter can't wait for the next upload of this story I'll b waiting my friend
You're totally talking about the Crusaders, aren't you?
Good chapter though I did notice this.
In the first paragraph you wrote trying instead of drying.
i love the idea that as a glaceon she's always cold and as a flareon he's always hot
could lead to some cute fluff
7688450 Idea? Fool, that is canon!
Taken directly from the Pokedex:
(Not that you're actually a fool.
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well i was more refering towards the idea that because of their natural body temperatures they gravitate towards each other (but i didnt know that it was canon!) ALSO I AM NO FOOL KNAVE! (
I'm on to you, that was a Series of Unfortunate Events reference I saw!
7689255 *Blinks*
Really? Where, if you don't mind my asking. Because It definitely wasn't intentional if it's there. XD
7689598 Most of the time, bold is used for Brian, with italics being Glenn arguing with Brian. Aside from that, bold *is* what I use to show emphasis, since asterisks in fiction is not typically smiled upon. :p
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Huh, apparently Snicket isn't the one who coined "He who hesitates, is lost." Don't mind me, I'll just go back to being uneducated now.
I'm not sure of what to make of this story. It feels so messy with plot points appearing and disappearing in a flash with things just happening and then moving on. For me, the internal dialogue was not something that interested me, at most I skimmed it for plot relevant information or just skipped it outright with no loss of context usually there. It really doesn't seem to serve a purpose for the story and throw in a few typos and it bothers my ocd ("It's a tarp" is the simplest example from one of the chapters).
An example of plot drop is the fact that there was an expectation that the whole point of going to the Crystal Empire was to have Blueblood talk to Cadance about how to approach Twilight. We have a tea scene and other things to setup the context the we move to a completely different thing and drop that plot without actually accomplishing the scene that was setup. The next plot immediately after going back to the characters that went to the Crystal Empire? Drunken Marriage between the Pokemon because Cadance is an a-hole. The romance plot, gone and never touched as we then move onto the Pokemon ruins plot. For some reason I keep checking to see if this has the random tag, it does not. I tend to avoid those because I like consistency and logical flow to stories.
I will say this though, I did not down vote because I like the characters and their interactions, ignoring the head talk of what could be considered the main protagonist. My only other complaint is that if you use first person, you need some very clear cues if you switch perspective, because I was confused between who the heck "I" was a couple of times when you switched without any warning and I had to take a paragraph or two to figure out exactly which Eevolution was the perspective I was working with.
7692219 First of all, thank you very much for leaving a comment that detailed what you did or did not like. If you read everything in one go, then yeah, some things are going to be rather confusing. I cannot say this with 100% certainty, but "It's a tarp!" was likely done on purpose, as it's sort of a counter-meme so to speak of the 'traditional' "It's a trap!" It means the same thing, but meant to be taken as the person being a smart-mouth sorta thing.
The reason the plot points are so jarred near the end is several-fold. First, I was just trying to juggle too many plots with too many characters. Look at the dates. The reason it jumped to the Crusaders, and then to a week later, is mostly because I was just plain stuck. I didn't know how to progress, or where to go, etc. I needed a chance to basically hit a reset button, and a time-skip was the only way I felt that I could manage it. Everything has been jarring, yes, and I can only apologize for that, but it's why I'm trying to be more careful about how to progress. I cannot plan too much, because I learned that the more I plan... the less I actually write, because it's "old news" to me, and I want to get to new stuff, but I never write the old stuff that is new for readers, and then I'm not writing anything for months at a time...
tl;dr, there are problems, yes, that I am working on, but thank you very much for bringing my attention to them again. I *am* trying to cut down on Brian talking for reasons that will become more obvious in a chapter or three, but I understand not being willing to stick around for it. Thank you very much for your time. I'm sorry you couldn't enjoy it more, but I know I cannot please everyone, and just seeing someone comment *why* they didn't like it is more than enough. I hope you find other stories that you enjoy a lot, since that's what this site is here to accomplish. X3
7688765 you must continue on *fans flames* :3
Welcome back man
...If they encounter a rock type, they are boned
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you jinx
I stopped reading at some point, but after I continued the story so far is really great. Sure there are some parts I'm still confused about, but probably one of the biggest mysteries is the heated-crazy-magical pokemon that Luna was attempting to see in the dream world and escaped with three or so other pokemon. Another interesting thing I wish to know or possibly interested in is the fact that two pony characters, turned into pokemon and one of them is Daring Do (from what I can tell)... and are apparently after some deadly cult? ...Don't know what's the deal with that but I'm hoping to the next chapters to come. Keep up the awesome work.
Dammit, this thing was updated two years ago...
ok man great story, hope to see more!
are u coming back to this i like how this story has turned out so far
You should seriously think about continuing the story, if you're still online.
have I commented on this story before?... I guess it doesn't matter. anyway, I'm not here to tell you to do anything, I'm just going to state my opinion then go eat food. this story is great, it left me wanting more but I know that it's not fair to ask for more from someone who is busy with life. so I'll end this with a "have a good day" and I hope that one day when you're bored and have nothing better to do, you'll come back and continue this wonderful story.
(no offense was intended with this comment, if you are offended then I sincerely apologize.)
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I wouldn't say "Lost interest" per se... My life had been highly stressful and hectic up until a month ago, when I got a new job. At this point, it's kind of... I'm stuck, more or less. This story was all about momentum, so it's hard to get back into typing, especially when I'm in several tabletop groups. I hope to come back to this story in a few months, when things calm down, but I don't have any promises at the moment because I don't want to let people down more than I already have.
I just realised that this pioneered the standard Pokémon/My Little Pony crossover on this site. Notice how similar the premises of A New World, a New Way and Equestrian Eeveelution are to this?
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I cannot say, and I'm not so egotistical as to agree blindly. I should really finish this, though. I've got an outline already finished, I just need to spend time writing instead of job hunting, lol.
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Even though I saw you were online, I’m surprised you replied. I thought you’d quit writing on this site for good.
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I'm still active in reading. It's just more of I've lost part of my drive? I still get ideas, etc., It just... Doesn't manifest as easily for writing like it used to. I get more self-conscious, lol.
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I see you've brought this back. It's been so long since I've last read this that I'll need to start from the beginning.
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Mario and Luigi Super Star Saga x MLP
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I'm sorry, I fail to see how that has anything to do with the story or my comment.
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Oh shoot, wrong person. I kinda forgot that I was over here cause I was busy helping my mum with stuff. Sorry
9892728 -shrug- It happens. Just wanted to make sure I wasn't missing something, you know?
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Please make more it’s so good
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Oof, you've been doing a pretty good job so far. In fact I think these 'unedited' chapters are probably my favorite. They move much slower and take their time with the plot a bit more.
9899269 Honestly, she comes across as genuinely psychotic. And whatever happened to her is looking more like preemptive karma than anything else.
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There's a random "ting" in your comment tag numbers.
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... Beg pardon? A what where?
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I wasn't notified of your reply to my comment because you messed up the tag, whatever they're called. I don’t know what you’re considering correcting.
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Is... That a reference to an episode or something? I should point out this is only "canon" up to, like... Season 3.
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Are you implying that Moony is the white unicorn from the prologue?
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Look for the name of that Unicorn and you tell me. :p
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Is Moony part of another aborted arc?
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Not quite. He was a cameo from another story I did. He was originally going to play a bigger role, but then realized I was adding too many characters to do them justice.
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Go right ahead, friend!
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I’m referring to when you make a new story under the m-rated tags one of them is profanity. There is swearing in this story but it isn’t that swear heavy
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I know the profanity tag exists (and you can put all warnings on T-rated stories, too), but I thought you were saying that one had been added this story since I last checked.
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Ah, sorry for the mixup
How long do I have to wait for I can read the chapters?
So when does the rewriting of the next 3 chapters come out...???
As well as the rest of the story...???