Her Bright Smile is the story of a pony with a lot of pain in his past, told from his own point of view.
Get ready to see into the mind of a pony whose life is due for some happiness.
The question is, will he take it?
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- Member Since 31st Oct, 2012
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reyin poetic
Hi there! My name is reyin poetic.
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Wow, maybe you should add a dark tag.
Anyways, the disjointed narration is pretty fitting for a story like this, it actually tells a lot about the characters. It isn't often I see a story with short chapters that actually makes it work.
I'll be watching this
-RisingOne
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Glad to hear I did good!
And I think I will add the dark tag. I wasn't sure if it'd let me.
Finally got around to read this. I'm gonna follow this story to see where it goes. I am not sure why but I love the style you are writing this in.
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Glad you read it! And yeah, the style is something I've wanted to do for years, and this fit the bill. 
Wut.
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Thank you very much! And don't write him off as some generic 'crazy' just yet...
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Yup.
Ooh, getting interesting.
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Mhmmm.
very cool and strange
have a fav
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Why thank you!
...Wait, what?
That was certainly unexpected. Unless this Celestia is actually dark, I'm pretty sure there are some shenanigans going on here. Either way, the style you have going here is pretty cool.
Also, two things. One, you're one word short of a thousand exact. And two, there is a small mistake that you can correct which should bump you up to one thousand.
I think you meant "She wants."
EDIT:
Oh, and you may want to consider adding this to a group or two. It'll help spread it around and bring in more readers. You care if I add it to one or two?
Holy shit.
This dude... just... this fucking dude, man.
He makes the average wangsty teenage protag seem like someone well-off.
Excellent narration, I'm definitely looking at this one.
Mother of god it got worse.
I really, really feel sorry for this dude. Needs a hug, stat. Even though personal contact with someone who suffered daily beatings is not at all a good idea due to the associations made.
Also; it's safe to say that I do indeed like this.
Honestly, I sort of want to see a sequel written from Pinkie's point of view, just so I can have a comparison to his psycho outbreaks.
Yeah. I really like this story. A+.
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Thank you for catching it, and fixed.
And I would be absolutely honored if you added me to groups, good sir!
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And welcome to my story to you!
Erm... yes. He's been through a lot.
And I'll consider a sequel sometime later, though it may be a co-writing experience with Copy Cat, my Editor, and the Pinkie Pie to my Hutch.
Hmmm.... I'm thinking he had some issues, so she sent him to a hospital of some sort, but it turns out they were corrupt or something. The white unicorn fear can trace back to royal guards or nurses and doctors.
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Not sayin' nothin'! Nope! 
2449222 Knew it
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They believed it! Now the real twist will be even more surprising!
Even though one detail in their guess was right...
Motherfucker it took you a year and a half for a chapter of disjointed gibberish?!
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-chuckles- Yeah, well, it took a while to feel like I could write Hutch again.
And you did read the first four chapters, right? Disjointed gibberish is the norm, the trick is figuring out what it means. And I promise it does all mean something.
5299860 I know, I know. Just teasing. :p
And did I read it? The last 6 or so comments from last year are us having a conversation xD
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5300006 No worries!