Hi! Name's Jackie! I love to write! Not very good at it, but that's what practice is for. I love romance, slice-of-life and comedy fics.Thanks for sticking with it!
Rainbow Dash spends extended amounts of time with Twilight at the library. Being even lazier than usual, she starts to exercise less for the sake of reading. At the same time, her intake of delicious sugary snacks increases, but not without the help of the friendly librarian.
Why is the unicorn letting her eat so much? And why doesn't the pegasus really mind?
Note: Twidash fic, with chubby dash. Somewhat suggestive. Not over/forced feeding.
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I love TwiDash and this looks cute, but before I read... is it just chubby Dash or is it one of those over-feeding fetishes?
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Not over-feeding. Pretty much as chubby she is in the cover pic is as chubby as she gets. Don't worry. :3
Think you have a broken italics break at the end.
And honestly... I'm not seeing Dash being okay with getting fat. Her whole LIFE pretty much revolves around her being an athlete and her dream of joining the Wonderbolts. Hell, it's pretty much one of her biggest established character traits. Like she said in Cutie Mark Chronicles, the only thing she loved more than GOING FAST was winning, and the body doesn't work like that. Yes, at first she would get stronger limbs, but the overall effect to her fitness would be horrible.
Also, I can NOT see Princess Celestia being okay with this, and CERTAINLY not Twilight. This "experiment" is unethical as hell! Purposefully trying to get someone fat? Experimenting on someone without their knowledge?The fact that she is okay with it doesn't factor into it. The purpose of the "experiment" is to get her fat and study the effects. So basically, they are endangering her health and life for science? Even for someone who started out as in shape as Dash, the kind of weight gain going on here is very unhealthy, and could have long-reaching effects on her. Diabetes, increased risks for certain cancers, heart attack, stroke, and countless other detrimental effects. The benevolent ruler of Equestria would not do that to one of her subjects, and Twilight would DEFINITELY not do it to one of her best friends, ESPECIALLY without her consent, and doubly so if she had a crush on her!
Sorry, just too OoC for me.
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Well, obviously! None of them would ever be okay with it. But it wasn't a big enough change to make it 'alternate universe'. And besides, making it a shipfic already makes it OoC too begin with. Making her chubby just kicks the ball a little further.
How much weight do you think she's gaining? It's not like I'm putting an extra 500 pounds on her. She might gain forty pounds at the most.
So, how much of this did you read? Did you know you can be fat and relatively healthy? I myself maintain a decent physique since I'm in the Navy, but suddenly gaining weight doesn't automatically mean you'll get diabetes and cancer, then have a heart attack and die. Not to mention that Twilight has doubts about her experiment and Celestia is going along with it for reasons that aren't specified yet.
Anyway, I didn't expect everyone to like/accept this. But the kind of risks your mentioning are akin to making her gain twice her weight in a week versus small poundage over the course of a few weeks.
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Oh, a fellow military brony?! Well awesome! Hey, check out http://www.fobequestria.com a military themed brony site. I do fan fiction reviews!
And I did read the whole thing, but my point still stands. Yes, you CAN be chubby and be BASICALLY healthy, but not as in shape as Dash is. And studies have shown that even bein slightly overweight increases your risks. I never said she may keel over and die next week, but the effects over being even slightly obese are well documented. As a scientist, Twilight would know this, and she wouldn't do that to Dash without her consent.
Now, if she had ASKED Dash, that would be totally different. Imagine her asking Dash for help in an experiment: the effects of weight gain over X amount of time. Dash would definitely help out, especially is she had feelings for Twilight. She would see it as a challenge. Gain weight, become out of shape, then when the experiment is over, see how quick she can get back in top shape! That could even be the experiment! See how long it takes a top-level athlete to get back in shape. Then, if you wanted to keep he chubby, you could have her slowly get more comfortable with her weight, and she decides that she likes the little paunch, and stayig with Twilight is more important than the Wonderbolts. It would solve all OoC issues, and you can have the romance you want in a more realistic and believable setting.
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I PM'd you my reply for various reasons. <w < But it's been a bit since I ran into another military brony. I had the pleasure of speaking to one who had just PCS'd from my ship as I was PCS'ing to it. xD
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Well, stay safe on your deployment. Also, if I appear to be hyper-critical on your story, it's nothing personal. It's what I do for the FOB, fan fiction reviews, so I've kinda lost my ability to "shut up and enjoy," as it were.
And keep in mind that I AM a Drill Sergeant; it's my job to be an overly-critical asshole.
Wait, Twilight's going to scold Spike for suffering from sleep deprivation that she's causing? Fuck you, Twilight.
I hope Spike get to be a participant anyway. Maybe Rainbow will accidentally sit on him and doesn't want to get up for some reason?
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Oh, I know. : P I'd actually prefer you to be hyper-critical, since it's pretty much the best way to improve my writing. No need to sugar coat it, especially with a story like this. xD
Lord, being a drill sergeant ought to be fun. I know my RDC's back in boot camp practically lived for treating us like crap. I wouldn't have the ability to yell all the time. I'd be laughing to much at how ridiculous I would sound. <.<
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Now, I hadn't thought of that. :/ I wonder if that would work... I'll be looking into it for a later chapter.
2206513 Good thing you replied to me. I was rushing though fanics I'd bookmarked an forgot to fave this.
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lol guess I got good timing. <w <
Hmm... generally not a fan of chub stuff, but this seems kinda cute so far, so lemme see where this goes. owo
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Thanks for sticking with it. I'll do my best to make sure chapter 2 is awesome. <3
*sees disclaimer in description*
I wasn't aware over-feeding was a fetish. I must be old at 26.
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Yep. In fact, the first comment I got was a user who was worried it would be about over-feeding. <.<
You ain't that old. xD -is 24-
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Thanks for the interest. ^_^ I'll work hard on the next one.
Is this still going on? I read the blog post about crappy PC's (I know that feel), and in reality I just want an update on the proceedings.
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Sorry for the incredibly late reply. ; o ;
Yeah, it's still going on. I'm gonna make a more detailed update about it later 'cuz it's too difficult to do it on my phone. But I no longer have to deal with shitty comps. <3
2539246 Woo! I wait with baited breath.
That. Picture. is. Adorable.
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It's about a quarter of the way done, but work is stressing me out something awful and slowing down the process. What makes it worse is that I do all my writing at work. I'm sorry its taking a while and I'm kicking myself for it, but it'll get there eventually.
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Lol nah, I know you weren't demanding or anything. You're good. <3
2955409 Agreed.
This is cute, but as I feared I want to read the next chapter!
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Sorry, its taking me a looooong time to write it, just been so busy. <w<;
Well that is mean of twilight why would she turn her skinny athletic friend fat for an experiment! That's so mean rd probably doesn't like being fat and because of her so called friend is fat come on man!
I am disappointed
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Hmm... I never got a notification for this comment. : /
Well, in this fic, RD doesn't actually mind being tubby, as mentioned in the synopsis. Its a chubfic, you know? Pudgy ponies are adorable anyway. > w <
Well that was odd. I thought Twilight was a mare of safe science. And what up with Trollestia wanting Rainbow to be fat? You'd think Diacord would want something that insane.
Anyway I give this 10 dweebs out of 10 for its entertainment value, and comedy.
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Well, it technically is safe. xD There nothing super risky going on and she does carefully monitor everything. But it's MLP, fatty foods don't kill things there.
Thank you for the amazing rating, though. xD Glad to see you liked more of my stuff.
I've noticed it's been a long time since you published this. Do you plan on continuing it?
5294041 so is this story dead...or what?
Can't wait to see another chapter, if there is another.
out of 
Please tell me that there's a chapter 2?
Is this story dead
A hidden gem of a story, buried in the past. Tis a shame that the story has stopped cold on its first chapter, for I really enjoyed it.