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xjuggernaughtx
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I'm kinda hoping that this whole thing turns out to be an epic deadpan prank.
Well Humble Pie wouldn't be a Pie if he wasn't a bit touched in the head.
Always felt Trixie got the shafted in the MLP universe. She really didn't do anything wrong in the first episode.
I've said it before and I'll say it again. Humble is best pony, yes.
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A pun hasn't reached it's full power until it is agonizingly bad.
2366729 That's what I wanted for Humble. I wanted to make him every bit as insane as Pinkie, but with all the fun removed.
I'm of two minds with Trixie in that first episode. She's not technically doing anything wrong, but she's breaking social laws of etiquette. She's much more rude than she needs to be, and is lying about her background. I don't think she needed to have her life ruined, but she did need to be taken down a peg. I think the fault generally lies in the second episode. In giving her the 'You Ruined My Life' story, they made her punishment from the first episode much greater than it probably should have been.
2367139 Humble is the most fun pony I've ever written, hands down.
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What social rules did she break? She's a performer who was heckled.
As for overstated her abilities. Again part of the performance. It's not her fault that Snips and Snails are idiots who can't tell the difference between fantasy and reality.
Calling her a liar is like calling Sigmund and Roy liars.
2368049 It's going to be a matter of opinion, but I think Trixie is going out of her way in the first episode to start a fight. Once she has achieved it, she works to humiliate, rather than just to best.
The thing here is that it plays on what is important to people and illustrates why social justice is generally not the same as legal justice. We can all agree that theft is generally wrong, but we can't agree on when a lie crosses the line. Lots of people will see building your career off of a lie to be totally unacceptable (Milli Vanilli) whereas other people see it as show business, and what does it matter if you are getting the show you came for. I can see it both ways. I wouldn't really care about the Ursa Minor stuff if it wasn't for Trixie's general cruelty in defeating Applejack, Rainbow, and Rarity. Even that is a grey area for me, as she is a showpony, but I do think that people have a responsibility in society to be decent. I think Trixie is over that line as soon as she hog ties Applejack and stuffs an apple into her mouth.
By the way, folks, I didn't delete that comment. I never delete comments. Just putting that out there.
So it begins!
(Love Hoss Angeles, by the way.)
I noticed a couple small errors, which I shall point out:
–“They are probably back in Ponyville!” Dotted Line, growled.
Misplaced comma.
–“It doesn’t matter if you meant to duel her or not, doll!” Dotted Line grabbed Trixie chin and forced her head up, nailing her to her seat with his piercing gaze.
Missing a possesive.
–The ball hit the wheel and it began twitching. Trixie’s eyes watered as it wrenched her hoof painfully as it tried to roll away.
There's a huge quadruple space between these sentences.
Other than that, I greatly look forward to reading more!
2368436 Oh, man. Thanks for pointing this stuff out. I'm so bad about it. I'll get in there and fix it pronto!
–Emerging from the darkness, she could see rows and rows of tiny, four-poster beds no wider than her hooves.
“These are the bed rocks,” Humble murmured to her from behind a hoof.
H'oh my god.
–“Now, just go slow, but not too slow. Moderately slow to sub-fast-ish, I’d say.”
Lulz. I'm enjoying this story.
2368665 I'm glad!
This is by far the most ridiculous thing I've written. 
Oh man. This guy.
I understand this mare now. Where she gets it.
2371015 Man, I'm so happy to hear that!
That was my number one goal with this story. I wanted to make a character that could explain Pinkie's upbringing yet reconcile her outlook on life in relation to that upbringing. Thanks so much for reading this. I'll have a new chapter up soon. Probably next Tuesday.
Cute so far! Was hoping to see a little of Pinkie's sisters, but I can see it working this way too.
2371992 I've been back and forth over whether to put any of the rest of the family in, but their absence is really the motivation for the story. I might bring them in at the end. I haven't fully decided.
Thanks for reading this! It's a labor of love, so it's great that other people are interested in reading it.
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I suppose I'm worried that the premise might run out of steam with just Mr. Pie and Trixie as the only characters. It can work, mind you, but there'd need to be some kind of dynamic between the two of them beyond Trixie's humiliation and Mr. Pie's off-kilter stoicism.
Honestly, the reason I initially read it was to see what kind of personality you gave the sisters (as we know nothing about them in the show), but I found the idea that Mr. Pie might or might not be insane pretty charming.
2375912 I don't want to give too much away, but their relationship will evolve. I certainly hope that you will like the places I'm planning on taking the story, but I assure you it won't all be just her arrogance versus his stoic insanity.
Looks entertaining. Added to Twilight's Library.
2377961 Thanks for reading it!
Madness! Pure madness!
2411896 I'm trying to walk that fine line of funny-insane, not just random-insane. Hopefully I'm succeeding.
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What do you mean by 'might be insane' ?
Okay, now I know he's just trolling. Ditch that wacko and get the hell out of there, Trixie!
Well, you already know I like it, but I wouldn't mind throwing my vote in to the 'hey, maybe the sisters will show up' camp too, hehe.
My secret theory is that Humble's so fit because of his shady past as an escort before he settled down to being a, uh, respectable rock farmer. Either that or too much head injury during his professional boxing career.
2412542 Humble? Troll?! Never! He's the salt of the earth. Well, the rock salt of the earth...
2412697 I've gone back and forth on the sisters, but that would kind of defeat the purpose of Trixie being there. I suppose they could just drop by, but honestly, I don't hear their voices the way I heard Humble's when I started this. However, I haven't given them a lot of thought. Maybe if I concentrated, I could hear them.
And Humble? An escort? Are you saying he's probably hung like a, erm, horse?
2412965 Badum-tcsch!
Well, I like it either way, and you da author.
–I hope your ready for some company, Humble. When I get back with the cops, you’re going from the rock farm to the funny farm.
Whoops.
–She been up for less than an hour and she was already getting a headache.
Missing a word here.
Another highly amusing chapter. Humble Pie's logic is surprisingly sound.
2416287 Crap! Thanks for the edits. I write too damn fast. Actually, what really happens is that I spend too much time tinkering. I work a sentence back and forth three or four times and then the possessives and things get jacked up as I've erased and re-written them a whole bunch of times. With how many people catch for me, it's a wonder anyone thinks I do any self editing at all!
2416300 Well, I'd never try to impose, but if you need an editor, I've got lots of time.
So much madness. No wonder Trixie went crazy and went after the alicorn amulet. I wonder if Trixie will murder the Pies before leaving the farm.
Trixie has great points. Today, I showed this fic to Rocky. I'm Rocky's coach. It hardened Rocky's resolve before the race. Usually, he just gets stoned. Was about to hold up a store when I stopped him at the door, and offered to help reach the path Trixie describes. Rocky would be in the stoney lonesome if it weren't for a bit of motivation. Good writing.
Every time I think Humble can't get better, he does.
2457669 I think I can definitely say...maybe.
2457713 It's all been worth it knowing your rock trainee has found the inspiration from this story to go the extra mile. Your rock time investment is 100% Humble Pie approved!
2458080 Why, thank you! It will be interesting to see what people think of the next chapter. It gets into some interesting territory.
I like to imagine Clyde/Humble Pie lost his damn mind in the war or he can really communicate with the rocks.
2462260 Thanks for reading this! That reaction is perfect to me. Either he's insane or he's legit. The world waits to find out which it is...
2611269 Thanks for reading this and for your kind words! I'm a few chapters from completing this, but my life has been super crazy lately. Hopefully, I'll have a new chapter up in a week or two when things calm down.
This story has been reviewed by the Equestrian Critics Society
Title: Taking a Job for Granite
Author:xjuggernaughtx
Reviewed by: Quillbit Marelor
The Great and Powerful Trixie is, without a doubt, one of the most popular side characters on the show, which eventually earned her another appearance in season three, making her the first antagonist to have a follow up episode. Though there is some controversy over her portrayal in her debut episode, that still hasn’t kept the fans from loving her. Despite her somewhat pompous attitude and rude demeanor, she still has that charisma that all entertainers should possess. In xjuggernaughtx’s story, Taking a Job for Granite, a reader will become quickly immersed in a tale full of Trixie goodness and an onslaught of hilarious, creative events.
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Score: 9.8/10
2625197 Wow! Thanks for the great review! I'm thrilled that you liked it so much!
I sure do love this story, ayuh. I can't wait to see more of it
2626211 Thanks so much for reading it! I should have a new chapter up pretty soon. I'm nearly done writing the rough draft.
Wow, loved the way you portraited Tom. Such presence. Such charisma. Such insightfull thoughts!
Your storytelling rocks (uh-Oh) , keep going.
2626331 You would not believe the booking fee for Tom! That's why I had to keep the scene so short. His agent wants a ridiculous fee.
I'm very happy you are enjoying this. I'm hoping to have a new chapter out in a week or two. The first draft is nearly done.