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Radiant Dawn


Write what you know; write what you feel. Give life to that which lacks it, and mend the heart of they who need it most. Love, laugh, and cry. Never be afraid to be yourself. This is me.

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The council is the ruling body of the entire universe, and have tasked a young warrior with protecting a very special group of mares.

Warning: This story will have religious elements that are a strong part of the plot. While the story will not focus on those elements, they will be the baseline. With that being said, if you are a close-minded atheist that is going to rag on me about it or some other religious person that's going to tell me my views are wrong, please save us both the trouble and don't read.

Rated T for violence and language.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 45 )

I see great potential with this. Ive had a soft spot for these Angel/Deamon fics ever since playing Diablo. You've definitely done your work and were plenty descriptive with the important elements. I'll definitely be keeping my eye on this one.:twilightsmile:

this is awesome! keep up the good work:pinkiehappy:

reading this i can't help but think of transformers, protecting the innocent whatever the cost.

You leave me curious. :trixieshiftright:

Warning: This story will have religious elements that [...]

*clicks player... clicks stop... "Disturbed: Asylum" pauses... starts to read...*

*after reading... nod's satisfied... and "Disturbed: Asylum" starts to play again*
you always do a great job RD ^^

Spacecowboy
Moderator

Okay Drew, with this story here. Prologue is a rather solid lay down of some facts so far. It should be very interesting to see how you develop this story, it has some high potential.

Nice disclaimer by the way, lol!

2100625 Well I'm pleased you are interested, as this is an idea I've been toying with for awhile.

2100745 Well the difference between them is that Transformers have other agendas beyond just war. True, they are good at it, but that doesn't mean they want to do it all the time. Angels on the other hand, were created specifically for defense.

2100942 You leave me thirsty.

2101355 Of course I do. I wouldn't be a good writer if I didn't.

2101556 Thanks man. I have high hopes for this story as well.

I have to say that from the first chapter I'm quite eager to see what you'll be doing with this story. For the life of me I cannot understand the downvotes. Spelling and grammar look impeccable, the stoic tone of Christopher speaks of a strong warrior archetype but there are those subtle hints that he isn't your typical Gary-Stu, and the council is certainly something I will enjoy getting more information about.

This story has a lot of potential for being a good one. So far the pacing seems a little quick and in my opinion the chapter was a little short, a bit more description of the characters and locations would be nice. While we all know what certain locations in the FiM world look like, locations look different in almost every episode. More description of your world would be very welcome, the sights, sounds, characters, and other such things. Such as how we know Christopher was waiting in the throne room, but where? What were some of the observations he made about the princesses and their subjects? What did he think of the architecture or decoration of the room in comparison to the other beings in creation? Putting these things into his thoughts would give us not only a better picture of the location allowing us to place ourselves there, but would give us greater insight into the character himself. I'm one of those who prefers to be able to put themselves in the scene as a bystander rather than just "seeing" it as though it were a movie on a screen so in my view there is no such thing as writing too much, too little certainly, but then again when I'm searching for new stories I generally search by word count with the minimum being fifty thousand. I enjoy works that span multiple stories and bear high word counts such as the works of BlackRoseRaven which in total are almost 2.5 MILLION words.

My chief worry is that Christopher will be your typical Gary-Stu badass with little actual character development, no real personality except being "hardcore", only having contrived flaws and weaknesses, very superficial interaction with the ponies, etc. There are also fears of the story rushing about, again lacking enough description to put me in the scene, and the greater fear that this will end up just being another "action clop" story.

But we'll see what comes with the next chapter.

2105896 Well as far as a strong backstory for everything, that'll be revealed as the story progresses, as it's a rookie mistake to reveal that all at once, like I did on my very first story. I will be a bit more descriptive as far as the senses for the story, but as a whole I don't like doing that too much, because it then just feels like filler material.

As far as Christopher himself, think of him like a piece of paper with a single line drawn on it. There's literally infinite directions character development can take, and he will not turn out to be a Gary-Stu. I don't feel wrong at all saying that this task of his is going to change his whole life. Keep in mind that quite a few things are at play here, namely the fact that Christopher and his two brothers are older than the universe itself, by a factor of one million...and over time, they've subtly changed as people and their personalities have slightly deviated from their original purpose. You'll see some major changes and flaws pop up that will add quite a bit of depth to our main protagonist, as well as some flips and turns that no one will see coming.

Have fun.:twilightsmile:

One chapter and I'm already sucked into it. REALLY looking forward to other chapters! :pinkiehappy:

How are you not a best-selling author yet?

The whole council thing is really interesting, and I can't wait to learn what makes this story hold its ground.

I like the semi-religious shake to this, too. Well worth the read. : 3

2115468 I'm not a best-selling author because as of yet, I've only written fan-fictions. If I can actually come up with a unique story, I just might become something big...but for the time being, I'm just enjoying myself.

Spacecowboy
Moderator

Hmm. Interesting notions in this story already. And I foresee Twilight and him becoming an item at some point in the future, or at least that is my guess.

Looking towards the next chap as always Frost.

2119476 Possibly...possibly not. What I can tell you is that there's going to be a ton of angst, and even more awkwardness.

2121254 Go.

Red light...

Green light...

Red light...

Green light...

Yellow light...

:pinkiecrazy:

2121258 Awesomeness usually does if you can't handle it. You might want to work on that. :rainbowlaugh:

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2121286 For some reason my browser refuses to display those images, so I'm just going to assume it was somthing witty and probably a meme, to which I'll respond, U MAD BRO?

2121296 It was a picture of Homer Simpson going "WOOHOO!"

From the looks of this I don't think that the warning in the description was necessary. The only religious attributes that I see thus far are names and I doubt many people would be offended by that.
Because so far the ideology of Abrahamic Faith concerning angels and other supernatural beings was thrown out the window with an Archangel being named Christopher. So my only guess is you are just going to be using religious beings and places names.
Also what was with the one paragraph explanation that humanity was being wiped out with the apocalypse? Not to sound to much of a humanitarian but really? Just out of the blue 'Armageddon for Mankind' for some joke that Christopher doesn't envy Gabriel for that job? (The fact that he 'felt' envy leads to so many more issues about angels)
But those are nit picks. The real issue in my eyes is how strongly do you want this to relate to Judeo-Christian faith?

Hmm probably Celestia goes with him. He seeks love and Celestia can give it to him. Both having that special 'element'.
First rule of a job is not to fall in love or get feelings for the ones you have to protect/gaurd.
Doesn't say anything about your employer though :D

2121538 Well there are a few things I will address with you. First of all, the reason why I put the "warning" up front, is because there are plenty of close-minded people out there that would let that one aspect of the story ruin it for them. With that being the case, I thought I'd just save everyone a bunch of time. Anyhow, since this is not a HiE fic, the fact that Armageddon is taking place isn't going to have a very strong impact on the story. And who would envy Gabriel for the job of overseeing the apocalypse? Let it be clear, Christopher is glad he doesn't have to take that job.

As far as what direction I'm taking with religious faith in this story, there is no set path I'm taking. You're going to see a lot of theologies and ideologies shown in this story, along with many different theories.

2135647 That adage may be true for some things, but since his sole purpose is to protect them, love would only make the will to do so stronger. I've already chosen which direction this story is going to go, so you'll just have to enjoy the story and see who gets with who.

Writing for chris seems hard. So shoots brah you doing um right

2171501 It can be hard, but that's why I started the story in the first place...because I believed I could do a good job.

Impressive, dood.

Liking the story so far!

It is alive again! Love the interaction between him and the princesses btw.

Ugh. This storyyyyyyyy. It is great.

Comment posted by oldmanjenkins11 deleted Jun 29th, 2014

namely how they believed envy was worse than rape, for example.

I don't think that's quite accurate.
Rape would be a sin of lust, and as such in a biblical sense it would be on par with a sin of envy. Like murdering someone because they have what you want.

8703679
That would be true looking from the outside, but any criminal psychologist will tell you that rape has nothing to do with lust.

8706334
Any reason that could cause rape would still fall under one of the seven.
If it was out of anger it would fall under wrath, by jealousy it would fall under envy, If someone felt that it was just owed to them it would fall under pride, etc etc.

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