Leave the past behind can be really hard, but it can be even harder to start all over again.
Thunder Luck, a young pegasus sick of the city life, moves with his cousin Caramel, trying to get away from the things that have been tormenting him.
Warning: M/M Shipping ahead
This is my first fic ever. I don't have much experience with english cause my main language is spanish, so if you find the horrible spelling errors please be comprehensive. And please tell me what can I do to make it better
Chapters (5)
i thouroughly enjoyed it thanks for writting this so far its a nice start. also i like how you have a character who is quite shy reminds me of a friend i used to know..... overall i give it a thumbs up and a big mac gif!! panzi.github.io/Browser-Ponies/ponies/big%20mac/big_macintosh_standing_right.gif
esto es bueno!
I like it
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Thanks you so much guys, really
I hope you enjoy the future chapters as well
Nice plot (lol) so far and you are amazing with character development. But, please go back and fix the grammer and spelling errors. It got kinda hard to understand what a good story you are writing.
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Yeah I need to improve on my english
I'm glad you are enjoying it so far, and I see what I can do about the grammar problems
I like the overall story you're telling, your characters are quite relate-able. Thunder is rather cute in his uncertainty regarding his potential feelings for the Cloud and I like how Cloud either notices Thunder's attraction to him and responds to that, or simply seems to like Thunder too. There's a nice dynamic with Cloud being more certain of himself in contrast to Thunder's being this shy. Caramel and Thunder also work rather well together.
I'm looking forward to reading more ^^
The spelling and or grammar issues have been mentioned to you more often before, but I can understand the difficulties in writing in English rather than the Spanish you're used to, and overall one can really just read over it. The story you're trying to convey is more important. Try to read a lot and keep writing, you'll get the grammar eventually, and if you need any help let me know.
2878251 lol you spelled grammar wrong
3230662 lol kinda ironic... Well at least I didn't write a story with bad grammar.
3230916 Okay I get it, better grammar, I'm working on that...
Btw for everypony, Chapter 4 is partially done, I need to add one last scene and fix the GRAMMAR and it'll be done.
3232812 I hope you mean chapter five?
PIANO!
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Yeah... Wait, no
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Does the prologue count as a chapter?
I honestly don't know.
3265370 Yes and no, it depends on your point of view, sorry about taking a long time to reply.