A dramatic event sends Lyra into a coma which results in her being stuck in a world of purgatory where she can still see and hear everypony, but they cannot see her.
Will she discover the reason as to why she was put into a coma? Will she acquire the identity of the ponies responsible when she cannot interact with anypony?
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This has gotta be one of the most interesting story ideas I've ever seen. What happened to Lyra may be a tad on the violent side, but it's sure been keeping me at the edge of my seat. Really enjoyed what I've read so far; can't wait for what's next.
Ayiyiyiyi!
I'm taking it Bon-bon's folks don't take their daughter being a fillyfooler all that well...
TINFOIL HATS~!
Or perhaps they're part of the Combine keeping the rest of Equestria from knowing about the humans... always watching... always smiling....
I was shocked to find out that Bonbon's parents did it.
Well, that's what I can predict. But, whatever. Lyra died. BBs parents talking about it and if she heals. Two ponies CLAD IN BLACK leaving
the hospital. Bonbon finding Lyra disconnected from the IV. :|
Edit: Oops! Lyra DIDN'T die. And THEN she died.
Good to see this here! This makes tracking WAAAAAAAAY easier
awesome bro
cool story......will read later i need to finish my fic
just epic
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I've finished the next chapter, i need to get it edited as well as finish the last one so that the story will be completed on the next update
Exams are almost over with at school so i'll be able to get back to it then.
Wow. That was...strange. (In a good way of course!)
I liked it a lot, it was very interesting. The only issue I had while reading it was the fact that it jumped around too fast, to me at least. The different scenes seemed to end a bit abruptly sometimes, taking the entire mood with them as they left. I found it hard to keep connected to the story as I read. So consider making the transitions a tad smoother.
I also found a couple misspelled words, but I don't feel like going to find them at the moment. If you would like me to locate them again I will though!
Anywho, just my two cents. I don't really know much about writing...
Keep up the good work!
Edit: Also, the epilogue confused me a bit...was that in Bon Bon's perspective?
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Actually your input is greatly appreciated
I will browse for them, my editor probably over looked them at the time because he didn't seem very focused at the time
I knew about most of the transition problems as well as the fast paced-ness of it, mainly it's due to it being my first time attempting writing in a while ^^""" I actually plan on returning to the story and re-writing it in a while.
Definitively deserves more views
Oh gosh, I don't know if you remember me. But bravo, sir! Bravo!
But um, the name "Hurricane" was missing capitalization at one point and a few words were misspelled, but otherwise, I like it.
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I do remember you, barely but still (I have a horrible memory dealing with a lot of things
Thank you for letting me know, I'm going to go through it again; my new editor must have missed quite a bit
Dude that was too much. Just a regular day that ends badly. I
I'm so into this story now.
This is really an interesting story. I can't wait to read the next chapters, but it has to wait. I have to go to bed. I got work in the morning.
I just got done with this fan fiction. It good but there some things I didn't get. Why did Bon Bon Parents want Lyra dead. That something was something I was thinking about awhile read this story.
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Sorry about not replying earlier, I haven't been on in a while
I glad that you liked it
I never really came out and said it, more lightly hinted it. They want her dead because they are homophobe extremists (I guess you could call them that) and they blame Lyra for the fact that Bonbon is a lesbian (in this story
). this was only lightly implied, mainly in the first chapter when Bon's mother said “... we all make mistakes. We’re here to fix yours…”
If you have any other questions, feel free to ask!
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Thanks. For responding I thought that might the reason, but I thought maybe there might be some other reasons. Ok I do have one more questions. Why didn't Bon Bon reported her parents to the police or to the guards? She knows what they did to Lyra and I fiqure they would face some kind of justice.
Oh wait I also was wondering what happen to Lyra parents after this incident?
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). I'll admit that I didn't think too hard on the aftermath (what became of the other characters). I am planning on rewriting it sometime, hopefully then I'll be able to explain everything better. I was also toying with the idea of an indirect sequel that deals with Bonbon after the event's of this story. I look back on this story and see more plot holes than I had thought to be in there in the first place 
Originally Bonbon never knew or found out (I actually can't remember if I wrote in that she did or not
Ok. I'm kinda hoping u do update it. It a great fan fic and I think ending does need work. I think I add u to my watch list.
Maybe some day. but I've been busy lately
and thanks! it means a lot
wow, simply amazing.
I have more to say, but I literally cannot find the words to use.
good job, and thank you.
Decided to eat an apple while reading this. Nearly choked and died.