My sister and I have ruled over Equestria for a very long time, I have been gone for the past thousands of those years, but that makes me no less royalty. Our rolls are clear for us, she brings day, I bring night. But that’s not all we do. We have many powers and responsibilities that none of our little ponies know about.
For example, my sister must bring day, but she also must send it away. I must bring night and send it away. I have reason to believe that most ponies think that I bring night and she brings day, but they don’t think about how each leaves. I must also protect the ponies’ dreams, as she protects their bodies. I think that they all take what I must do for granted, but I am more than happy to do it anyway.
I was out fending off the nightmares one night (it’s nothing special to watch, when I see a pony with a bad dream I search their memories for something good, then I make them think of that instead) I reached a dream that I found… odd. I had known this mare personally for a while now and I had never known her to think of such things.
She had a dream about a very tall creature, this being looked familiar but I couldn’t quite put my hoof on the subject, this tall creature walked away from her and she started to yell and scream after it, I was ready to probe her mind for a good memory when a stallion came from where the tall being left. This stallion also seemed familiar; he raised her chin and looked into her eyes. After he had helped her up they started to walk, not anywhere specific, just walking.
After a minute another stallion appeared out of nowhere on her other side. Another minute passed and they split apart, but one walked further than the other. This continued for several minutes, then the closer one backed off.
I started to wonder if this dream had anything to do with what she had gone through recently, or if it was just a random dream. I decided to watch and wait. They continued to walk like before, the stallions keeping their distance. When the dream neither escalated nor de-escalated I decided to leave. I would need to tell Celestia about this.
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I woke up the next morning and came downstairs. Everypony was up. I was always up before spike so this surprised me.
“Spike, what are you doing up?” he gave me a half asleep look.
“I couldn’t sleep.” He barely whispered it.
“What? Why?” Spike would sleep through Armaregeddon, if he got the chance.
“Him.” He pointed to silver; he was lying on the couch staring at the ceiling mumbling incoherently with a lover colt look on his face.
“What did he do?” I was confused, how was Spike kept awake by that?
“He wouldn’t stop. He just kept talking, not a moment of silence.” He grabbed me around the neck and looked into my eyes; he looked to be afraid of something.
“You get some sleep, I’ll talk to him.” In response he fell onto the couch face down “hey, silver. You wanna talk?” he looked up at me.
“She is so beautiful.” He sounded high, or crazy, take your pick.
“Who, applejack? Do you want to see her today?” he shook his head up and down rapidly, I wondered how his brain took what was probably happening to it right then “you better go get ready.” He shot up and sprinted to the bathroom, tripping every three pony lengths, Fixinit was already in there, but he obviously didn’t care; he tried to open the door, I heard the locking mechanism jingle with the force.
“TWILIGHT, GET THIS DOOR OPEN!!” he yelled down to me, I calmly walked up and used my magic to open it; he burst through without a hesitation.
I heard some struggle, then Fixinit flew out the door, hit the floor, and then the door slammed. He was wet and soapy, stunned to silence, and just sitting there. He looked up to me.
“Why did I just get thrown out of the shower?” he had a wondering gaze.
“Because he’s going to see Applejack today. I told him to get ready.” I rolled my eyes a little.
“You do know that applejack probably won’t care if he takes a shower or not, right?” he gave me a look.
“Yeah, but apparently he doesn’t.” I chuckled.
There was an awkward moment, then he felt his body “if you’re ready I'm ready.” He gave a suggestive look and I rolled my eyes “what? All lubed up and ready to go.” He got up and tried to walk over to me; but he slipped on some soap beneath his hoof and landed on his face “probably deserved that.”
“Probably?” I rolled my eyes again and walked away.
I went downstairs where Spike was snoring loudly. I left him be, he had a rough night. I pulled up a book I was currently reading and started from where I left off. That’s right about when Silver came back down, jumping in anticipation of meeting his love.
“Can we go now?” he asked excitedly.
“Sure. Just let me get ready.” I got up to go take a nice long shower, then maybe brush my mane, after that would be when I did the rest of my morning routine, instead he picked me up, put me on his back, then ran out the front door at full speed.
He was halfway across town when he realized he didn’t know where the farm was.
“Where could I find this ‘sweet apple acres’?” he asked.
“go down this road, turn left at the next intersection, five miles down, then take a right where the gravel turns to dirt.” We were already at the first intersection.
After about three minutes of him asking every question under the sun, I was surprised that he didn’t ask anything about what kind of stallions she liked or what she was like, this made me a little worried about what he was getting himself into, then we were at the gates of the farm, from where we were it was a five minute run, He was obviously really in love; I made the right choice yesterday.
“Here it is, I hope you two have a great time.” I smiled, genuinely, and started to walk away.
“Twilight?” I turned and saw his head down “you sure you aren’t the least bit mad I left you like that?” he looked up at me, it was a sad look.
“I'm sure, if you really like her.” I smiled again.
“Good, I’ll see you later, Twilight.” He opened the gates and went inside.
“later.” And I happily walked away.
The title of this story sums up how I feel about it.
2384481
good for you, i was aiming for that... in a way...
2384481 I agree the first like 15 or so chapters were good... now i literally7 skipped reading 9 chapters at the end ust to see if dill came back. Since not I guess I will just stop reading.... also downvote because this story is a total mindfuck from hell.
2384637
thanks for the feedback, and technically Dillon will come back, just wait and see.
2384612
So you wanted to write a story that would bring up the bile from the back of my throat and want to hunt you down like a dog and kill you by the side of the road?
Mission accomplished I guess.
2384830
Alright but in the mean time This is my feedback that that I just posted was me letting out my frustration and utter confusion.
Here is what I have picked up onso far. the main story that you started with was A standard idea human in equestria. This has been done several hundred times already. YOu though did something a bit off with it that I have read at least by giving the guy Dissociative identity disorder which is the new proper name for MPD. though he wasn't completely overrun everytime a personality showed up he was still mostly in controll just a bit wacky. This got me interested in the story and up till he was sent off to canterlot I was enjoying him being his wacky self.
Sure it wasn't without flaws such as the story went way toquick at points and some of the characters were a bit OOC. (Hit Flutters perfectly I think. If a human showed up since it looked like an animal to her she would go all animal caretaker on it I think)
Though when he went to Canterlot this is when my opinion of the story did a FULL 180 and went from something that was interesting to read to a moment when I couldn't even stand it... literally I didn't read chapters 38 to the second from the last chapter because I was to (best term) Mindfucked by thestory.
I can understand what I think happened which is one of like 3 things though the first is most likly.
1 He told Celestia something along the lines of either so I am going back to twilights? when she said she was going to send him home or he told her to go ahead and kill him then. Then Celestia in all her wisdom decided to let him stay (debateable how this happened) and split him into I wanna say the 5 or so personalities he had and let him go. He either does or doesn't remember or only has fragments of memories of his time as human.
2 Celestia sent him home and somehow some copies of his personalies were made.
3. Celestia kept him at the capital and made some copies of his personalities and sent them to ponyville after he got into an argument that twilight loved him. If she fell in love with the personality that was sent he would go home/die.
Now this comes with some major major plotholes. 1 Twilight would have DEFINALTY sent a letter to celestia about him vanishing. She is her teacher she wouldn't have just left Celestia out of the loop. 2 Twilight would in my opinion be more upset than she is 2 weeks is nothing it was her first love and I doubt she would have just sat there and done nothing. 3 this is as far as I got in reading before skipping.. I really doubt she would have just started going out with a random stranger that showed up at her house.
Maybe I will go back and read and see what happens but still My mind is well not capable of handleing this stuff.
So know itstarted as a Faved and Upvotedstory because it was good in my opinion but then degraded after that happened to a unfaved and downvoted story. Though knowing he is coming back is a good thing I just don't like how so many chapters have gone by with him not there.
2385141
one word... cupcakes... if my story makes you want to do all that, dont even try reading it.
2385160
Puh-leez! I actually liked cupcakes in a sick and twisted kind of way. It was original and for that it gets major props in my book. Your story is stale, unoriginal and a fit member for my group "Craptastic Stories".
I'll add you in a moment after I brush my teeth to get the taste of vomit from my mouth.
New note I went and readit still didn';t likeit but I will say this... TELL US WHOSE POINT OFVIEW WE AREFOLLOWING. I really don't know whose were were following the last like every chapter.
2385155
firstly, may i say that these are my favorite types of comments, the ones that are really long.
secondly, i am sorry that you dont like the fact that Dillon has disapeared. just know that he will be back, eventually.
thanks for the fluttershy bit
as for your predictions, they are pretty good. i like them. no further comments because of cjy101.
everything you said about how twilight would react is assuming that this was all from the shows universe, let me ask you, does she have wings in my story? no. is there a human named Dillon on the show? no. so doesnt that mean that this is a different universe with a different twilight, and couldnt she react differently to something like this? of course.
please do go back and read it, get to know Fixinit more, see what he has to offer. and i am sorry that is the way you feel. i can do nothing to change this, and no offense or anything, but i have other fans that really like the way this story is going, and im not going to change it because of one person not liking it. i am sorry if i sound agrivated at all, i am not, but if this really is how you feel then please go read another cleche story that happens exactly how you want it.
2385189
you, sir, sicken me. you liked cupcakes, you come here and call my story unoriginal and crappy, and worst of all you didnt just leave. i am sorry that bronies like you exist. please go by our motto of love and tollerate instead of hate on everything in sight that you dont like just like the guys who say "omg your a brony so you must be gay" i really dont like people like that.
2385205
context clues, if they say something like "Fixinit and Spike went outside to wait for me" and Fixinit, Spike, and Twilight are the only ones in the room, the pov is from Twilight. i drop so many hints in each chapter i find it hard not to follow.
2385160 was cupcakes really that bad...? Like 'two girls 'n a cup' bad?
2385354
Want some cheese to go with that whine?
And once again the dark spectre of "love and tollerate" raises it's ugly head by some child that doesn't know the source or the true meaning of it. It doesn't mean, "you should be nice to everybody", it means, "I might disagree with what you say but I'm going to love and tolerate you with no hard feelings."
You're the one getting all butthurt over this not me. And if you want me to leave you need to stop responding to me. It's that simple. You called me back. You gave me a smartass response. I told you exactly what I thought of your story after but not before. So really, you brought all this on yourself.
Do yourself a favour. Don't respond to me or I'll be back.
2385415
i know i didnt like it.
2385418
i want you to understand that i have never been angry at you. i said love and tollerate because you are not tollerating. i just want you to know that i am happy to respond to fans, even people like you, i may have looked angry and i am sorry, i think the better term would be sad that you didnt see what you wanted to. i want you to realize that i am happy to respond to whatever you throw my way, let it be nasty insults about my writing, let it be you appologising for your actions (which would swiftly be met by me appologising for mine) or even you just saying good bye. i said that i wanted all of everyones feedback and i got yours, an unsatisfied costemer. i am sorry to not give you what you want, and if you really want it that much i can write an alternate ending where Dillon never leaves. it will be more boring and probably end with me saying something to the effect of "they all lived happily ever after". i do want you to remember that i am not angry, i am only sad i could not satisfy everyone. i do hope you find a story that fits your very specific needs.
2385507
And yet your exact words were: "you, sir, sicken me" and "i really dont like people like that". Those aren't the words of a person who's smiling. As they say in England, "go ahead. Pull the other one. It's got bells on".
And I explained where that whole "love and tolerate" thing came from. It doesn't mean that I need to love and tolerate you, it means that you need to love and tolerate your critics.
And the rest of your response is just blah blah blah I'm going to pretend this doesn't bother me blah blah blah destrucity blah I'm really not bothered blah blah attempt at being passive aggressive.
Just accept the fact that I didn't like this story, I don't feel it's well written and it made me want to say in my best Daffy Duck impression, "Kill me now!" which I then referenced in my first post. You're not going to be able to please everybody and the fact that this has more thumbs down than thumbs up ought to wake you up to that fact.
2386370
i can tell you the exact reason it has more downs than ups, i wrote a story before this called "saving private Dillon" it didnt go over well, it was way to fast, the story line was half over by the third chapter and the grammer was the worst that had ever come from my fingers.(because im typing) the people that read and hated that never came back to read this. i have no problems with that. i could just deleat this and start over but i find no benifit in that. i can live with the haters. but if you want to hate hate on something that deserves it. a lot of people liked this. almost every like i got after i rewrote it. i am sorry if i seemed agitated though, i wasnt in the best of moods earlier.
sorry and thank you for the feedback.
2386663
Ah don't let the other guy being bother you. The only reason why people who hate a story and post a hateful comment is because they want some type of acknowledgement.
Back to the chapter at hand. At least "somepony" important is finally getting into the story.
2386786
thanks, i need a friend right now. i had a particularly bad day and haters are not making it better.
2386927
yeah, i guess your right, thanks.
2386883
I understand dude. Haters gonna hate. http://iambrony.jsmart.web.id/mlp/gif/my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-brony-haters-gonna-hate-check.gif?1335782185
ust remember, hater are people too. But people have opinions and opinions are like assholes. Everyone has one and can be one at the same time.
2386949
tru dat!!
2386960
So why don't you share what made your day pretty shitty...that is if you want to
2386995
i wish i could say exactly what happened, lets just say yesterday i was in a relationship, right now i am not.
2387054
Oh man, I truly am sorry to hear that. I've had some really good relationships myself that crashed, burned, and then blew up in my face soon afterwards. All we can do is hold ourselves together for better or for worse.
2387131
i know. but it still hurts...
2387142
*sighs* It always does. It always does. But every experience makes us a stronger person.
2387171
true.