(30) - Denouement
A Pokemon Problem
(30) - Dénouement
There wasn't much more that I had to say to Celestia after that, and I think that suited her just fine: I could only presume that she was still shocked by my foreknowledge of events to come, but that didn't stop her from offering myself and the rest of my group room and board in the castle for as long as we needed.
Cindy, it seemed, had already found her place: she was the personal secretary of Celestia herself. I guess being bipedal, psychic, and having hands made her the perfect candidate for helping deal with the vast amount of information that running a nation required. When I excused myself, and thanked Celestia profusely for her generosity, Cindy stayed behind and told me she'd talk with me later. That was fine by me: I had all the time in the world now. Both literally and metaphorically speaking.
Overwatch guided me to where my friends were staying, and I felt all of their eyes upon me when I floated inside the sparsely decorated room and closed the door behind me.
I felt heavy, and very, very old when I spoke.
"I hate to be the bearer of bad news..."
/\/\/
With a jolt, I opened my eyes and saw not the white room and anxious faces, but instead saw a breathtaking view of an expansive valley, blue sky, and a pegasus that might have been shivering in cold, fear, or quite possibly, both.
I really hate recurring dreams: especially ones that are more like nightmares.
With a groan, I twisted and popped my joints, rolling my legs to make sure they were still working as intended. I didn't quite get the same sound levels as when I hibernated for nearly three hundred years, but the cricks were still noisy enough to ruffle the feathers of the pegasus. I shook my massive body, dislodging a thick layer of dust.
"Can I help you?" I asked, my voice sounding like gravel being dragged over sandpaper. I coughed and tried again, but my rough voice remained the same.
"Y-Y-You're a-a-alive!" was the exclamation I received.
"What, think I was a statue?"
The pegasus quickly nodded. Or maybe she just shook more: hard to say.
"Well, I'm not, and you interrupted my nap. You have a message for me, yes?" It was surprisingly often that I had to remind the infrequent messengers exactly what they were doing up on my plateau. It's like the sight of me makes them forget exactly what they're doing there in the first place.
"Yes... no... maybe... I don't know," stammered the pony. "I t-thought I was meeting s-somepony—"
"You are. Or at least, someone, but that's arguing semantics. Message please."
The pony fumbled with her saddlebag until she procured a scroll of questionable size. The poor pegasus could barely hold on to it, for crying out loud.
I took the scroll from her grasp with a simple effort of will, eliciting a squeal of surprise from the pony. Not even telling them that I was Psychic? Tsk-tsk, Celestia. How are you training your messengers these days?
I quickly read over the scroll, and I felt a feeling in my torso, one that I hadn't felt in a very long time. Adventure.
"Well," I said, returning the scroll to the traumatized pony. "My day just got interesting."
Let it be known that I suck at writing endings, as can be evidenced by my previous attempt at finishing this story. Hopefully, hopefully, this ending works better!
If you've made it this far, thank you so much for putting up with me and the story, and I hope to see you in the (very near) future sequel! (Yes, I'll add a chapter with the link to it when it gets published!)
And a special thank you to everyone that showed me how much they love me (
) by following/watching me! Literally overnight, I got an influx of 60+ new followers. Crazy! So thanks again!
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Alright, that's a little better. Still would like to see what made him decide to take go be a hermit on a mountain side but at least this way we can have flash-backs in the sequel.
Much better. I'll call off the mob.
IT'S OKAY GUYS, HE FIXED IT. YOU CAN GO HOME NOW.
ADVENTURE!!!
2543940 ADVENTURE!!!
Much better. I approve of this new ending/transition to sequel.
I would tell you to take a well-deserved break, but I want MORE! This has been a great story and I can't wait for the sequel.
Just to clarify, he is a Metagross now, right?
Write on,
Legion
This right here is a good ending. You answered some questions and prepared us for a sequel-- that's the way it's done, although some writers have a talent for writing EPIC endings that leave you in awe. Who knows? You may be on your way to being like that...
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Aww... what am I supposed to do with my pitchfork and torch now? D:
Now, this is a much improved ending, and the sort of thing I've come to expect. Looking forward to the follow-up!
hehe,
and it was aall just a dream
Now I can't wait at all!
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You could always put them up for adoption, find them nice homes. I actually know a nice sconce for a torch, and a friend of mine's been looking for a pitchfork for ages!
2543916 she
2543977 if you bought them recently, specifically for the mobbing, then as long as you kept you're receipt I'm sure you can return them for at least a partial refund.
This ending is much better.
Looking forward to your sequel.
Now THIS! is a good ending.
Much better, indeed.
Now with 2x more awesome!!!
Better. Oh, dear God better. Still not perfect, a little too abrupt of a switch to the future for my liking; I personally would have ended this with a cut to the last of his friends passing away, and we see the events that led to him going into hibernation like he did. That way you could have used this chapter's second half as the prologue for the next story.
Still, this is worlds better than before, and if you want to leave it as is, I'd find that acceptable. Thanks for making the effort to fix it; not a lot of other authors would have acquiesced.
It's... ADVENTURE TIME!!!
Okay, I'm satisfied, back into my hole I go.
You're a metagross now?
Also, any chance of a sequel?
Dénouement was the last chapter, TWENTY, not THIRTY!
wblublublublublublu
Title thief...
Fixed, and I can't wait for a seuel!
chapter fix accepted, weapon systems shutting down.
A better ending by far compared to the little tidbit left before. I patiently, eagerly, and obsessively await the sequel my good poke-writer.
This is definitely a better ending, although I would have really liked to see what had happened to his friends right after the announcement and as the years went by. I guess we'll just have to wait for the sequel to find out then. Looking forward to it!
SEQUEL!!!
For some reason I imagined James' voice sounding somewhere along the lines of Gandalf...
MUCH better, glad I didn't unfavorite now
2543956 ADVENTURE!
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Fuck. What am I supposed to do with my highly radioactive banana now? Eat it? That shit's dangerous, man.
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Screw adventure! HIGH ADVENTURE!
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Adventure while you're high? But... he's not a Took!
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High Adventure, not high Adventure. You feel me?
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He's still just a Baggins, you won't get any High Adventure out of him! Nor should you get any Tall Adventure, now that I think about it...
When I was writing a story I tried to think of the end but all that came to mind was
<<----Profile pic
But I eventually got the gist of it.
Anyway, I like the way that you ended this, and I can't wait for the next story!
Wait... HIBERNATION FOR 300 YEARS! WHAT HAPPENED! WHEN DID THIS HAPPEN!? WHAT IS ZELDA!?
Aww man it ended, or at least there is no more to read. What to do, What to do???
Meh I guess I have to wait, at least I have plenty left in my read later pile...
2717028 Dude, you don't become a fan of a series with a pokemon named Lickitung without knowing there's a move called lick. My point is that there's no way such a weak move would've defeated them instantly, even with 2x damage. These are windigoes, not undead parasprites.
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, it sounded like... bah. I'm such an idiot. Derp.
My
As for a Gastly's Lick defeating Wendigoes... maybe it didn't Faint them, but it could've still paralyzed them. (I always wondered how licking could paralyze something. Maybe it's the sheer...
shock value... YEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
odd... almost didn't catch the transition. had to read it a couple times for it to catch.
So that's what that picture was for...
you said in chapter 4 the main6 will be in the sequel when comes the sequel
????
Great story! I thought the ending was perfect for what it was, fast, and to the point.
i loved this story, can't wait for more
Great story,but i do wish it had a little more content...
Love the story! Just that the second half of this chapter seems more appropriate to be the beginning for your squeal.
2760837 I love JWittz!
I only comented on about one chapter, so I'll just say my thoughts here. I thought you did an exceptional job with this story. So much so that I'm gonna dive right into the sequel, in fact...