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Applebloom has always remembered her family just as it is, her two siblings and her grandmother. She never got to meet her parents, but feels resentful that Applejack bosses her around like she was her mother. She runs off and finds a peice of Applejack's past, and is confronted with the disturbing similarities and problems she shares with her sister.

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#1 · Jan 24th, 2012 · · ·

:fluttercry: Why is everything so sad?

You just stole the orphans diary idea from simlpy rarity

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Except for the completely different story ponies and style. Plus I havn't read Simply Rarity in a while. I may have been influenced by it, but I'm influenced by everything. "Good Writers borrow Great Writers Steal"-Oscar Wilde
Have a nice day.:pinkiehappy:

DAWWW that was cute =3

“So Applejack have you thought about asking Mr. Davenport out…”
lol :rainbowlaugh:
best part

I enjoyed it, solid 4/5.

Big Mac was very affected about his father´s dead... That was very sad:applecry: and I guess how the feeling will be to that in the fact that I am the older brother :fluttershysad:

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Thanks!
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I've learned one thing very well in life. Its always best to go out with a laugh
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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I sort of modeled Mac after myself how would I react if I had to be the man of the house? Probably how I usually react to my problemswork myself half to death and bury my emotions. I strove to keep a delicate balance between Big MAc's assumed maturity and his still present childhood.
In short thank you all!:heart:

I think that one of my joys in this fandom, Kid, is going to be watching you grow more and more as an author. You did a lot of things "right" with this, and there are some things I would not have done if this was my work. Applebloom was spot-on in her characterization, well done! I also enjoyed the sympathetic presence of the piglet, allowing the Applebloom to frame her emotions against a supporting character. Clever that!:raritywink:

The sudden appearance of Luna does feel a tad forced, unfortunately. I can't really think of anyway you could have arrived at your final few scenes otherwise, though, and in the end it does not detract from the overall work.

"I've killed my mom", not "I'm", if you're looking to fix some an error.

In the end, a pleasant read for a snowy afternoon. Well done, Kid!:twilightsmile:

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Thanks TD.
I spent a few hours walking around in circles, trying different endings, having Applejack write the last entry didn't carry the same force. So I had to use a literal deus ex machina:raritycry: Thanks for your support again. Also thanks for catching my errors my brain is notorious for autocorrecting when I proofread.

adorable :twilightsmile: i really liked it! nice job! :heart:

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Thanks! Yay being referred by word of mouth!

You know :eeyup: It´s actually my favorite MALE character

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Well he doesn't have much competition
Soarin Braeburn Spike Chief Thunderhooves Sheriff Silverstar Fancy Pants and Blueblood.
Thats about it for guys

That's a nice story, melikes. :3
There's some editor's notes in between, and there's a section in the middle of the letter that shouldn't be italics. That kind of ruined immersion, but I'm used to that so I could enjoy it nonetheless.

This is a full wave of emotions, best story ever.

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