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I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.


Pinkie Pie has always served admirably as the Element of Laughter, and it's time for the princesses to show their appreciation. In fact, they have a special assignment for her, something they've never tried. It will be the best surprise she ever had.

Third-place winner in the /fic/ write-off "The First Time."

Featured on Equestria Daily!

Thanks to Scott "Inquisitor" M for critique of my rough draft.

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Comments ( 142 )

This is beautifully written,

It's sad but Pinkie still manages to make me laugh,

Amazing work.:pinkiehappy:

Damn, again with the feels. You monster! :raritycry:

*applauds* This was a tragically happy masterpiece. :pinkiesad2:

Seriously, though, that was excellent.

Oh, well done, well done indeed!

wonderful story , trying my best not to cry.

At the end did Pinkie come back?
Sorry for the stupid question I just broke my glasses so its kinda hard....:twilightsheepish:
someone please help me understand the end...

If you want the full explanation, PM me, since I hate to put spoilers in the comments, but I will say that it's significant that the only friends she sees at the end are Rainbow Dash and Rarity.

You know... I don't get feels. That's just not a thing that happens to me...

But damn it, did this story give me some intense feels. Like... Damn...

Strangely enough, I think Pumpkin's part at the end is what did it for me. Not sure why...

That was beautiful.... I genuinely almost cried! I read a lot of different things, but it is very rare for me to read something that moves me to the point of nearly crying, so well done!

Back when this was part of an anonymous contest, one of the commenters said the same thing, that it didn't hit him until Pumpkin's part near the end. So you're not alone. He couldn't really explain it, either.

Well, I'd be lying if I didn't know why, it just strikes me as odd. The part about her family jerked a few tears as well, but that's mostly because of how much my family means to me and yadda yadda yadda. The Pumpkin part got me because it was the first reaction, and intense despair is something that I can always relate to, and yet also gives me a much deeper interest in the writing. I could actually give the exact line that choked me up, and exactly why it did, but I'd rather not spoil it for anyone any more than I already may have. It's so much more pungent that way. It also helps that it was rather well written.

Masterfully done. Words fail to capture just how moving this piece is.

This was breathtakingly amazing :pinkiehappy: but it made me cry....

How is this not more popular???? :duck:

Words cannot describe the feels that I've been gut checked with by this story

My fells :fluttercry: they exploded :derpyderp1: but the story was awesome. pinkie i hope you have good life in pony heaven :pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesmile:

Wow, just....

All I can say is wow, and the feels. just well done.

This is a beautiful piece of writing. Bravo.

Oh my god, I cried so hard reading this! Seriously, I'm still sobbing! Words cannot express how wonderfully this was written! Bravo! :fluttercry: :raritycry:

Oh god, no, those aren't tears... n-not at all...


Its like my eyes are melting. Only they regenerate 2 arcseconds later. :raritycry:
Best story ever.

I loved it.

I can actually imagine Celestia and Luna doing this for the elements.

Also: :raritycry:

Find a amazing story challenge complet.:ajsmug:
Lol i think sometimes im like pinkie:pinkiehappy: its hard to keep my suprise b-day party from me unless you dont see me untill the party. :raritystarry: and i can be random. :pinkiegasp:
But at scool im like sunset shimmer mixed wih twilight:twilightsmile:
Me and my best frends have elemints mine is magic.:twilightsmile:

Damn. That was beautiful.

... Third place? Well deserved.

~Skeeter The Lurker

This was a pleasing read. It was a refreshing in a way to see a "passing away" fic that confirms only two other Element Bearers rather than all six. Most FiM (or MLP, as the case may be) writers would feel the tug to make the pony of their story's focus the last one to go, just for a sense of completion. But one of the themes here is that some things never end, that there are certain aspects of life that are omnipresent, and are therefore perpetual.

I also really liked this paragraph:

“I had work, party planning, babysitting, work planning, party sitting, plan babying, sit working…” She blushed and hid her muzzle behind a hoof before adding, “And eventually, baby planning.

Nicely worded.

I second that sentiment, this was indeed beautiful.

While no tear left my eyes, they certainly tried. My eyes were watering the whole time. Fantastic!

I'm actually shedding some tears as I type that.

Thank you.

I don't get the ending... :applejackconfused:

You know, often times this site can really get me down. People are so cruel to the characters I love. To each other. It's easier on the internet, I suppose. People use stories as a way to bash this story or this pairing or what have you. It gets to the point that shipfics are the only ones I can safely guarantee won't find some way to bash me with some idea or other that rubs me the wrong way. Worse still, about twenty percent of the ones that fit into this category are written poorly in some way or other. Self inserts. Painful grammar. Flat characters. I rarely get the opportunity to call a story masterful, and it's even rarer that I can do that while saying I also loved it.

Therefore, I think this story is deserving of the first 10/10 I've ever given on this site, for restoring my oft-wavering faith in it. Thank you for writing this.

If this got third, then I'm afraid to read the second and first place entries. I don't think I have enough feels! :raritydespair:

Uh, spoiler warning?

3304171 I think it's showing Pinkie finally passed away, and she's getting to tell her two already dead friends about that thing.

I agree with BlueNinja. But still, I loved this story. The heart and happiness, all of it was just so well done. I had tears in my eyes through most of it. Your work is brilliant, my good Pascoite. Keep it up!

Two stories by you in the feature box.

Jesus, man.

Not just beautiful, but also extremely creative as well.

3304430 I understood THAT part, but not the part on Rainbow and Rarity and the window...

This story reminds me of Mitch Albom's Five People You Meet in Heaven. I cried reading that story and I did it again while reading your story. I think you did a wonderfully beautiful job with the last few moments of her life and I think it is safe to say I wouldn't have Pinkie Pie go out any other way. Thank you.

I have no room for all these feels. :raritycry:

This story was beautiful and so touching. Well done. :pinkiehappy:

I guess afterlife stories are not for me.

Dang that was beautiful and depressing. Never really gotten feels for these but dang... well done. :raritycry:

So beautful so sad and so pinkie.:fluttercry:

3303667 You just got a raincloud stuck in each eye, right? :raritywink:


No, eff that, I got an ocean.

Well that teared me up! ;_; :raritydespair::fluttercry:

I'm torn between "OH MY GOD SAD" and "OH MY GOD HAPPY".

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