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Greetings, I am Merlos the Mad. I am a dabbler of both words and wizardry in my free time. I also invite you all to partake in my musings. Take care though, as they are the product of a madman.


Dark machinations are at work, and for Rarity, life has taken a turn for the worst. She's now in a place called Ancelstierre on another world, where nopony has ever seen or scarcely even heard of a unicorn before. What dangers lay in wait in this new land of strange magic and mystery? What happened to Rainbow Dash or Pinkie Pie? More importantly, how does she get back home?

Welcome to the Old Kingdom, my little ponies. Magic works quite differently here...

This story runs parallel (as in it happens at the same time as) to the other stories in "The Madverse". Those stories are, A Twilight Landing, My Little Marriage, So Many Wonders, as well as The Mane Two : Contrail, started by Alex Nuage, and currently being written by Ludicrous Lycan. A few other side stories, too. I've written this story with people unfamiliar to the target crossover in mind as well, so approaching this with an open mind is all you need to enjoy the tale. I hope you all enjoy traveling with Rarity and Pinkie through this magical world, whether you are familiar with its mysteries or not. :pinkiesmile:

If you would like, I can send you the books through skype. ( I highly recommend them for a purchase, however.)

Sabriel is a fantasy novel by Garth Nix, published in the year 1995. It is the first in his Old Kingdom trilogy, and is followed by Lirael and Abhorsen. Most everything of substance in this story is the property of him. MLP is Hasbro (duh).

Author's Note

For anypony asking themselves 'why' I chose to crossover for a large piece of these crazy stories, the answer's simple. I had considered that some may not buy into this, but I felt that using established work would add credence and a solid foundation. In other words, that the stories would benefit from a pre-established fantasy setting, rather than one I just made up for the purpose of this series of fics. I can't really say if it was the right decision, but at least you can know that I didn't just throw the rest of the mane six into a sloppily made world rather than one written by a literary genius. (I honestly doubt I could make something as fascinating as this.) With that said, please enjoy.

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Comments ( 481 )

Oh how I can't believe this series has slipped so far from my mind. It was an amazing series and I hope you are able to do this well and do it justice. I don't have time to read now, but I'll be sure to do so as soon as possible. Have a thumb and favorite for now though, as just skimming the chapter I could tell I am going to enjoy it.


My gracious lord you are a scholar and a saint, but most of all too kind! :pinkiehappy:

I fully intend to do it the utmost justice, thought it will be a short work most likely of the 50 to 75k variety. Hope that doesn't count as a spoiler?


Not at all my friend and you are very welcome! I look forward to reading the machinations of your mind.


Ahhah! Alliteration my very favorite as you'll no doubt be painfully reminded consistently in my stories.

Double points Sire, very good.

Tsk, 'tis truly the truest trademark of talent the teller of tales takes to heart and through the test of time.

As well as, assonance ain't a bad accompaniment to alliteration at all in all actuality.

(I think I'll comment like this as much as possible from now on. It's much too fun. Great, now rhyme schemes are coming to mind...)

Rhyming's another passed time of mine, I'm often told my skills are sublime. Combining characters to coincide however is quite the culmination of the captivating endeavor.

Eeeeepic word baaattles of histooory! :pinkiecrazy::rainbowdetermined2:

Oddly enough, I feel obliged to match your opulent mind word for whimsical word as if it were some kind of battle of rhyme. But as for this time I can't seem to find a fitting flow to float my boat, y'know? So I think it's time for a slow surrender, so says I, to save what pride rages through my soul so sublime.


Hm, backing down already? I'd thought your conviction more steady. But along with how you entreat at my feet I see now that your beleaguered bleating does call for, nay demands, quite a lot of retreating.

Come back when you're no longer in slavery and lacking enough bravery, to take on Merlos the Mad. :scootangel:

(You reused some of my rhyme. Minus points!) :pinkiecrazy:

I have to say I like how you've portrayed Rarity's death scene, but its too early to judge the fic right now, have a like!

Does want more Sabriel and stuff! :heart::moustache:


Aw thanks Vren, that means a lot!

Have an update! :D

I'm really disappointed I got thumbs down. Whoever did that must not have read the story at all. That's a pity.

I can understand why my first story received a few, it was a shaky premise and I submitted it in a very rough format.

This story wasn't though, and was very well thought out. I'm a little angry now.

:raritycry: the suspense. i am loving this!


I wish everyone did, sadly I've received two negative votes already. TWO! What the hay's with that? These ponies have no class I say! ;'(

Still thank you Vren, we are having a bit of a contest I see. You're well in the lead for popularity. haha

Yay! Thanks for making this interesting piece. :raritystarry:
I moustache a question though :moustache: since I loaned out my Sabriel book (which I never got back!) :twilightangry2: How old was Sabriel in the first book?:rainbowhuh: Sabriel was my favorite necromancer and it kinda disappointed me when she played a negligible role in Lirael and Abhorsen (not that they're bad books), so I'm just stoked that I'm reading more about her! :pinkiehappy:

Hmm so the time is established .... Looks like we will see terciel soon


She was eighteen! Making this story, a prequel. :raritywink:

Thank you sir (or ma'am) :derpytongue2: you are a gentleman (or woman) :trollestia: and a scholar! :twilightsmile::raritywink:

Please create more awesomeness post haste! :scootangel:


Far be it from me to question your choice of pleasantries sir . . .
But of the male gender I assure you I am definitely a member. :rainbowdetermined2:
While careful your kind words certainly were,
Would you honestly think that a name as grand as Merlos would in fact belong to a her? :pinkiecrazy:

I need to read the abhorsen series again...

To make offense, I would not dare. :pinkiegasp:
I just learned that on the net one must take care. :twilightsheepish:
On games I enjoy playing a maiden fair :raritywink:
For I enjoy the view of their derriere :moustache::trollestia:
Although I do declare :rainbowhuh:
At times it leads to quite a scare :rainbowderp::facehoof:
By the way 'male gender-member', I see what you did there :pinkiecrazy:

Not bad, MerlosTheMad.
Rarity's plight had me quite sad :fluttercry:
Yet now I am glad :pinkiehappy:
I hope that waiting just a tad
will bring more of the story, my lad :twilightsmile:


Haha quadruple word score! Sad, glad, tad, lad, not bad! :twilightblush:

However, you forgot Rad.
So what'd you think of the newest chapter? Should it have been longer or was it sufficient for an introduction to humans?

No tricks! I count six! :trixieshiftright::rainbowwild:
My defense is Iron Clad :ajbemused:
and there is more than rad to add,
I ponder within my pad.
Egadd! :pinkiegasp:
We must make rhyming a fad! :rainbowlaugh:

The chapter is good. I am not one to criticize the length of chapters unless there is an overtly large difference between them (to the order of 10,000 words or so). I must admit I was a bit confused by the double introduction Sabriel had with Rarity. However, it is a non-issue since Rarity is in a confusing situation to begin with, making it rather fitting. :raritywink:

Ah yes! Definitely the fad that is worth to be had. :pinkiehappy:

Any words that need changing you think? But yeah I was trying to make it clear that she was a little hysterical and not paying a lot of attention, at least that Sabriel picked up on it.

Like the way I'm writing Sabriel? I got the vibe that she was a goof when she was younger veeeery subtly in the book. Lirael was a huge contrasting downer. But Sabriel thought things about guyssss and made jokes and worried over the niceties of life at first. So I kinda figured her for a really bright but kinda spacey jokester as a kid. Ellimere and Sulyn I basically just based off of how I thought their names sounded, and eventually I made them slightly similar to AJ and Fluttershy as the voice of reason and shy one. I'm not going to typecast them nearly as strongly though, Sulyn has a great deal of confidence for instance and Ellimere is more prone to hanging back.

I think the words are fine. You did an excellent job with Rarity's dialogue that I hear her voice in my head during the sobbing especially. Bravo good sir! :moustache::yay:

I know what you mean. I can't give any specific references (since my Sabriel book is gone :twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:), but she definitely gave me that vibe of a well-adjusted trickster who means well. I also found it funny in the first few chapters when the students were like 'MONSTER IN THE SCHOOL' and the Magistrix was like, 'please send it away cause I can't even though I'm supposedly the magic teacher' :trollestia:. The way you portray Sabriel seems perfectly fine for the younger, diabetically sweet version of her older self from the book. But Sweet Luna! That scene where she talks to her dead mom made me so sad even though she was almost (stress the almost!) nonchalant about it :raritydespair:

And Lirael... :facehoof: I felt for her, I really did, but it was hard reading the abusive life she lived for so long in that nunnery place full of psychics. I REALLY wanted to punch her Aunt in the ovaries!:twilightangry2: But that just makes me like the first book better because Sabriel had its ups and downs but was still overall a happy story while Lirael and Abhorsen were definitely Emo by comparison. Sheesh, and Lirael lost her hand and her best friend at the end of Abhorsen too. Damn super depressing way to end the series on a low note.:fluttercry: (the short story afterwards don't count!) ...

Alicorns above! Now I keep thinking of more depressing things from Lirael and Abhorsen! :fluttercry::raritydespair: Seriously, Sabriel only had like 5 sad parts.

Quick make with the Sabriel! :coolphoto:

Oh yes. The side characters are good. :scootangel:

Hah I'm glad, one thing though I havn't decided if Sabriel will stay in the story. Originally I hadn't planned for her to. She's a point of contact to meet Terciel, the current Abhorsen, Obviously. Buuut I'm enjoying writing her, maybe I can figure something out and just change canon for my story. In the trilogy she'd never been to the Old Kingdom aside from before she was five years old.
We'll see, if it flows in that direction sure. Mostly the only thing more I have written now are some fight scenes and other random stuff for much farther in the story. I write as I get ideas, keeps it fresh and me on track. I get all these random passages though. :twilightoops:

The only canon to worry about is the party canon! :pinkiehappy:
Specifically that you are at the minimum safe distance and it's not pointed at any vital spots :pinkiecrazy:

Although, one could always use a 'charter memory spell' or some other contrived notion to wipe out the memories of the involved party members at the end of the story. :derpytongue2:

Oh! Oh! Idea!!! :pinkiegasp::raritystarry:
I recall one of the most memorable parts of Sabriel being that Free magic monster that stalked her for over half the book. The constant feeling that it was hunting her, lurking just out of sight and how that knowledge kept her on edge and really drove the story forward. I wonder if that same monster can be Retconned in so they have a longer history together :pinkiecrazy:

Just a thought, if you want ideas :ajsmug:


Sabriel? Don't you mean Lirael? Unless you're referring to Kerrigor's Mordicant...

Also, second one is cannon*

Yup. Referring to Kerrigor's little guy. He was such an adorable little scamp with the fire and the screaming and the killing :pinkiecrazy:

Canon Cannon right :facehoof:

Thaaaat thing was likely made five years from now. Also a hulking golem of human blood and swamp mud isn't something I'd refer to by "lil guy" lol

lol of course, but everything in jest :rainbowlaugh:

The point being was that you can't have a Sabriel/Lirael/Abhorsen story without feeling watched and hunted by a terrible evil as you try and stop its master's ruinous machinations :pinkiesmile:

Hence the Mordicant discussion :scootangel:

Or Mogget. Can't have a story without that lovable avatar of magic in cat form. Does want more of him.:raritystarry:

I dare say, I'm also looking forward to Rarity possibly going to Abhorsen's house and giving it a mare's touch or going gaga over the charter servants like the crystal ponies :pinkiecrazy:

Of course, this is just me going gaga over the possible directions your story can take. Please do go on :pinkiecrazy:


Malevolent creeping evil following them? Oh they have one of those. You'll see. Hell hath no wrath like a woman's fury you see...

See what I did there? :pinkiehappy:

You rhymed see... with see... and then started a sentence with see... :rainbowhuh:
If I saw none of your see's I would be blind :twilightblush:

Although if you refer to 'hath wrath,' I saw that even though I read 'hat wrath' concluding that Rarity will rage when she realizes the absence of here usual headgear. :pinkiehappy:



*sees Hellerum*:rainbowhuh:
*begins a google search of the Sabriel Universe*
*sees your story as the first link*:twilightsheepish:
*need I spell it?*:facehoof:
ok! :pinkiehappy:


Okay I said Hell hath no wrath like a woman's fury.

Hell = Hellerum. It makes no sense but it was just a joke anyway. Gah I quit. Forever.

Oh... I just don't know what went wrong... :derpytongue2:
Don't blame yourself for my derp good Merlos! I thought Hellerum was already dead to the plot and forgot her existence :pinkiecrazy:
(pun intended)


The dead never rest in Sabriel Formless. :rainbowlaugh: Although, I feel if it's that unobvious despite all of the name drops for the villains that Falsimer did... I guess I spoilered you just now. :pinkiesad2:

Why do I get an image of Sabriel riding a bicycle with Rarity in the front basket?

Why is this bicycle flying through the air and over the moon?


Dear gods.. this is brilliant!!! :pinkiehappy:

Encore good sir. At your convenience of course :twilightsheepish:


I'm glad you're enjoying all of the pseudo OCs and the story sir. :pinkiehappy: I really want to do this story the most out of the seven I'm writing right now, it just has taken off the least... Maybeeee if it got more attention or wasn't kicked off the front PAGE so fast. *glares at the fimfic update system.*

They need a genre archive that is smaller. :raritycry:

I agree with you there. This story deserves ALL THE VIEWS!!!! I only have so many thumbs ups i can give fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/297/8/6/nightmare_night_derpy_complete_by_jaelachan-d4dsixb.png

And us ponies don't have thumbs... or are hooves one big thumb? Either way we can only count to one on each hoof. :derpytongue2:


Whelp if you ever get the urge to contribute I've got two collaborators already ^^ We kinda juuust help each other whenever atm, a lot of framework typing and mutual editing and the like.

I'd be willing to help out if I can find time off from the horrors of life *hiss*


Haha xD have skype? We group up and toss idears around on it.

That I do. same user name too. But I won't be on tonight since it's almost bedtime :derpytongue2::ajsleepy:

Argh hanging off a cliff here!!!

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