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lillytheomegawolf


I enjoy reading and writing cute ponies. If my works brighten up your day, even better.

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After the perfect day with one of her best friends comes to a sudden end, Applejack is left with nothing but questions.
What do you do when somepony likes you, but you don't like them back? And what do you do when that pony is one of your closest friends?

Can things return to before? Or will the proud farmer find her perfect stallion after all?

Set after Season 2

Cover art is thanks to AlinQuilz.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 51 )

Still looks very good! :pinkiehappy: Well done! :twilightsmile:

It felt pretty nice to read this over again and have a fresh perspective on it. I think it did still turn out very well. :derpytongue2::raritystarry:

Nice! Pinkie Pie and Applejack may not be a favorite, but I like to see more of it. There's just so much RainbowPie out there these days. :pinkiehappy:

Huh.. first ApplePie story that I've read and I'm already loving it.

Nice job! :twilightsmile:

2068717 I cant support RainbowPie... Pinkie is too high maintenance for RD and in the episodes its always a one-sided vibe from Pinkie to RD. I can't see Rainbow Dash returning any such feelings. TwiPie or ApplePie is so much more balanced.
thank you for the comment.

2069042 Thanks. I hope you continue to enjoy it :rainbowwild::yay:

2069075

I don't dislike RainbowPie. It was the first shipping I liked when I entered the fandom. I've just grown tired of it sense then. :applejackunsure:

My favorite is actually TwinkiePie. I know its not a big ship right now but I just see so much potential there. I'm planning on writing a big story soon about the two. :twilightsheepish:

2069135 When you do, let me know. TwinkiePie is the most realistic ship for Pinkie I think so I'll be keen to see what you come up with. :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

A great first chapter. You did a really good job showing just how distraught Applejack is at the prospect of hurting Pinkie, and it really worked since we don't see Pinkie anymore in the chapter. It's all Applejack and her guilt.

I look forward to the next chapter. I imagine it's gonna rock. :yay:

did someone say Twipie? thats my OTP i pinkiedash was my first ship now i think Dash would just yell at pinkie all the time and i dont think she needs that in a girlfriend at least Twilight woudlnt yell at her.:pinkiehappy:

This needs more views.

2071005 Thanks :yay: (my stories all sadly have few views....)

sigh...Pinkie is really piercing my heart full of sorrow:pinkiesad2:...But, can't blame AJ either:applejackunsure:, might as well be at the mercy of the next chapter.

2071626 so you like? :pinkiehappy: I was wondering about finishing the next chapter soon or giving it a miss...

2071629 Eeyup:eeyup:. This was your first fic that dealt with a ship other than FlutterDash. I was surprised you wrote one:pinkiegasp:
Nice to see that RD was giving some advice since she also went through the same rut:rainbowwild::yay:

2071647 I also have a TwiLuna, A Twilight/Rarity and an adventure/crossover fic in the works. Lots to do, so much fun, so much pony. and so little of it is Flutterdash focused...

This looks pretty good so far. I do hope this doesn't take a few days to wrap up but rather takes a few months. (IE Applejack actually tries dating a stallion)


For Rarity: Well the typical answer would be Twilight. Too typical, so I'm going to go to another typical ship and say Spike. :raritywink:

On the matter of realistic shipping for Pinkie; I always put her as asexual since I just can't see her starting a relationship. Though I think Cheerilee would be a surprisingly good match for her.

And so returns the murderous Pinkinena Diane Pie. :pinkiecrazy:

2071782 Tru true... Cheerliee could work for her... With the plans I have for this... it won't be a short fic. None of mine really are...
And thanks for guessing. You will find out in about 3 chapters... Ahhhh... spike.

2071880 I hope not... that would suck for everypony else.... :pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy:

2071088 Try adding them to groups. Trust me, they will get significantly more views that way.

I always thought pinkie would be bisexual or pansexual because she would do anything to make anypony happy right? so why not she be able to fall in love with both genders. i like her better with twilight Dash would just yell at her all the time. so realistically she would go fine with twilight even if she is bi i think she would rather be with a mare then a stallion.

2072565 I do add to groups. But I don't seem to get anymore than about 5 more views out of them...

2105601 Oh it won't I have plans for it... and Pinkie isn't going to let go that easy.

2165689 Well, notice the lack of 'co-written with NintendoGal55' sort of thing on the cover? Yes she helped with parts of this chapter but from here on in, the plan is that I'll be going solo, as with most of my works from now. So I'll see how things go like that.
Part of it is me moving away from the extreme cute and cuddly (I have a Flutterdash Rainbow Factory story in the works if that says anything... poor :rainbowwild:) and this first chapter was me seeing if I can make not so cute and lovey-dovey work. So I hope I succeeded...

And to all of your points on why you were hesitant to read this... I dont think you can expect much of that at all in this story as this is an experiment with one of my lesser known but still liked ships.

It was not inspired by Perfect On Paper. I never even thought of POP while writing it. But now that you mention it... I guess it does have a few links to it. There are two ways this story will go and either way will still line up with the picture. I am yet to decide how things will go for AJ as I move along.

1. Good to know. It took a bit of proofreading to get it to this level but im glad it was wroth it.
2. Yay :pinkiehappy:
3. .... And about Rarity... :facehoof: what can I say...

2166531 still, im flattered that you found that connection. :pinkiehappy::eeyup:

How'd I miss this? Apple Pie! Apple Pie! There's never enough of this ship!

I'm adding this to the Apple Pie group, and tracking it so that I can get a fix for my poor, under-appreciated OTP.

And can anyone guess who Rarity's special somepony is?

This is me hoping it's Twilight.

2211699 thanks. Ive joined the group too as I have a soft spot for the pairing, it goes well alongside Flutterdash and has great potential despite its lack of popularity. And im sure to write more of these two as well... Especially since I've found I enjoy writing them a surprising amount.

...Twilight... nice guess. pretty sure I say they are second fave twilight ship, second only to TwiLuna somewhere... :pinkiehappy:

The way you talked about it in the Apple-pie thread i didn't realize you had actually started writing it. I don't have time at this very moment to run through the whole but i guarantee i will after the little bit I've read. I did notice a couple things though.

"Tis okay Pinkie… Ya don't need ta cry…"
Tis is generally a vernacular disfigurement among vocabulary of upper class society. Odds are, AJ wouldn't use it. You might be better off using S'ok.

"Yea…" The farmer continued to rub her companion's back, hoping to calm her down some more.
^this.... Just... yes. It's these little details that add so much to the scene. Applejack's empathy, despite being sure of her feelings, and Pinkie's emotional state are both clearly and heartwarmingly on display with this little detail. I seem to have trouble noticing and adding things like this and I'm super jelly right now.

Pinkie wistfully swooned, waving a hoof in the air as she found herself caught in her own dream of what could have been.
The swooning and waving of the hoof and all that seems more Rarity's style. Pinkie is a sincere creature. She doesn't do well with pressure or pain so she's more likely to break down than cast a wistful hoof to the air in what dreams might've been.

They had betrayed her and now her friendship with one of her oldest and dearest friends seemed ready to disintegrate.
This would just be a choice really, but disintegrate seems too clinical here. Crumble feels better to me. It gives the mental image of a building or something similar falling apart.

These are just things that popped up to me in the first few bits, but rest assured, I'm already liking and favoriting this thing... And i'm gonan break my "story must be completed before i read it rule."

Let me know if you do or do not want suggestions because i don't want to come off as rude, and remember they are just that, suggestions. This is your story, and you are godqueen of this realm.

Starlitomega

2287672 Give as much feed back as you like :pinkiehappy: Im half way through chapter two at the moment so Im sure to keep in mind what you are saying and probably even use it to bolster my work. 

I normally write Flutterdash, so AJ and Pinkie centered is rather new to me and im more than likely to get the odd thing thats a little off...

2338361 Ouch? Why you say ouch?:applejackunsure::pinkiehappy: Everything is going so well. :rainbowwild:

Poor Pinkie Pie.. :fluttershysad: Is this a flashback to right before the first chapter?

Also, this chapter brought more anticipation :derpytongue2:

2339105 yep. Flashback. Thats why we started with Pinkie on her bed and then went into her flashback. :pinkiesad2:

Did I do it okay?

2340797
Yeah, you did it right. It's all very smooth

All I can say is, oops! You missed a spot. :rainbowderp: It seems that in the final sentence, you missed italicizing the beginning of it

Feeling uncertain for the outcome, but exciting whatsoever! Though...Pinkie...my sympathies.:pinkiesad2:

Comment posted by lillytheomegawolf deleted Apr 9th, 2013
Comment posted by lillytheomegawolf deleted Apr 9th, 2013

Interesting... it doesn't sound like Pinkie Pie is going to get over it anytime soon. Hopefully she can prove Pinkamena wrong and find somepony special.. or not and just be happy alone somehow.

I wonder what you mean when you say it will get tricky and more fun :moustache:

2402429 I do hope its a good interesting.

... Well its when I get to bring the rest of the mane 6 into it :pinkiehappy:

2403267
Well, I never heard of a bad interesting. Rest assured, I thought it was a good chapter.

Sounds interesting... (good interesting)

ron

Make moar.

Do it.

Make moar.

Come on now, make moar.

2821836 I have written about 400 words on CH4 that I got down about 5 days ago. If I were to finish and release the next chapter, would you read and review it? at the moment all I can do is assume is that one person probably likes it and wants to see more :pinkiehappy:

I will have time for writing coming up within this next week, but anything outside my story 'Crashing Angels' is receiving a rather low amount of attention at the moment... but if this is worth continuing, I would happily finish the chapter.

ron

2822389
Review it? Oh yeah man, I can do that.

I'm very frequent on this website and don't have anything else to do other than to invest my consciousness in My Little Pony, hoping that it may suppress my anxiety and

I'd love to review it. Please do finish this.

So ... Soarin and Apple Jack. That'd be interesting.

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