I am trying to improve my writing. It's not very good.
Based on a discussion on Equestria Daily http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/01/discussion-you-are-now-princessprince.html
Princess Celestia has found the solution to Equestria's overcrowding problem. Send 180 ponies to a new Equestria on the other side of the planet! Moon Dust finds herself in charge of this new civilization and has to make this new place home for heaps of ponies.
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What does everyone think? Should I continue?
YES CONTINUE this is actually a ok story cant wait to see what happens nxt
Interresting Story so far! Waiting for the next Parts!
I see two comments yet only one vote...my...odd how that works
I'm glad to see someone who shares my writing style.
*Brohoof!* /)
OK then, I'll continue.
thank you
I like this Story! But maybe you can make the Chapter a bit longer please?
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Yeah, I'm working on making them longer.
if u want to add people i would love to be part of yor story
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If I can fit you in somewhere, you're in.
good chapter
A Good Chapter! Keep up the Good Work!
Oh no there is no more!:(
186881
No, it's incomplete, so it's not over.
Really good, but put youself in her hoofs, would you be so calm that Princess Celestia was coming? Or would you be thinking through all things that could go wrong, pacing up and down frantically listing needs? Just... think of more emotions! Really, really good by the way!!!!
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Yeah, I know. But Moon Glow isn't that much like Twi. I mean, Celestia is sort of a friend to Dusty, she even insists on dropping the formal titles. And I'm trying to get the chapters written fast, cause of school.
One hundred years of solitude... with PONY!
187638 that was just an example, what i meant is more emotion all round. really good, keep up the good work (and post more!)
umm, 'i must have been tireder than i thought? more tired is the correct grammera for that sentence, just saying!:P
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Says someone who didn't capitalize the letter 'I' at all!
Yeah, I knew about that. I blame writing quick at 10 o clock!
I'll fix it up
Sorry for the short chapter. I'll try to make the next one longer.
Does the story has a plot to unveil, may I ask?
Short, but good Chapter!
Can´t wait to see, what the next Buisness of Princess Moon Dust is!
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Uuh. Not really. I just make it all up as I go along.
Hmm... It seems to not be updating.
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I could enjoy more this if:
things were told more in depth
the was a sense of movement on the story
characters were, well, in character?
Also, your story got on my list of possible fics to extend upon.
I'm writing one already. But I would need to read a bit of García Marquez's Macondo to get a better idea for a plot. I just can't live without the driving line.
Wait, I am rambling.
Might this be on GDocs so I can comment more thoroughly, signaling each part that needs attention?.
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Yes. I really need to work on updating on time. If only I didn't have maths homework.
I'll definitely consider the things you've said.
Sorry for the short and probably bad chapter.
I probably could have spent more time on it, but I really wanted to get a new chapter here before the weekend was over.
I will try to think of an actual plot so I don't just write whatever I think of at the time. It will probably get a little bit better once there is a plot, because then I can spend more time on quality of writing rather than what happens next.
I think this is another Good Chapter! I Still like this Story very much.
Yes, I know this is an incredibly short chapter, and because of that I am going to write another chapter that I will post as soon as possible. It should be up in the next couple of days.
The reason this chapter is so short is I wanted to finish the whole 'Sister' thing so I can get onto an idea I had for this.
Speaking of sisters, the next chapter is going to be from Sun Glows point of view.
Short, but good.
To the change of View in the Next Chapter: Sounds good.
This chapter is in two parts. It wasn't supposed to be, but I felt bad not updating for over 2 weeks, so I split it into two.
I like this Chapter and i´m curios how the second part is
A new Chapter. I has already thought this nice little story here will not continue
nice
Yay its really good, although one of the chapters arent working on my computer still
really good u should work on it some more