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Dawn Honeycrisp


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Rainbow was having a tea party when suddenly she saw something white and fluffy falling from a cloud not far from her. Rainbow quickly zoomed to get it.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 43 )

This was good I like these kind of stories. If you keep this going i will keep reading them. Good Job

It's a nice story. I have no clue where it's going which makes me wanna' read it UP.:moustache: for moustaches

2058192 Gosh thank you! :'D
2059361 :moustache: Why thank you fine gentlecolt.

Thank guys, you just boosted my morale. :yay:

2060184
But HOW COULD YOU POSSIBLY KNOW MY GENDER :pinkiegasp:

Could you give me some constructive critcism on my story?

2060387 I'm very honoured you want me to critique your story! :pinkiehappy: But I'm not good at critiques.. :pinkiesad2:

2060605
You don't need to be the guy from ratatouille, I just want you to help me. If you find spelling errors I would like help. Also if you would like, I want you to help with teh second chapter which is mostly done.:pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy:

2060709 That sounds fun, sure~! :twilightsheepish:

2060809
Okay, I'm writing it now :twilightsmile: If you wanna help then do you have a skype?

2060817 I... forgot my password. Aheh. :twilightsheepish:

2061014
Okay.....How else can we do this?
:facehoof:

2061072 I don't know.... A livestream? :derpyderp2:

2061235
Sorry, I went to sleep. Can you change the password so you'll have it?
If not I'll figure out a way

Comment posted by LunaOnTheMOOOON deleted Feb 4th, 2013

2064288 Thank you~! :pinkiehappy:
2062389 I... don't have a livestream account.

How about this, you email me your story so I can edit it. I did that with my friend once. :twilightsheepish:

Awesome! Is another Chapter in planning :D?

2066991
I meant your password on Skype.
But yeah we can try that.

Oh and my story's up

2067495 Yep~! It's in Google Drive, but I'm a bit busy with school, so yeah. Aheh. :twilightsheepish:
2067639 Ooh! :pinkiehappy:

It's a bit too fast paced and kinda all over the place :rainbowderp:


Kinda like this song
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SUPER SAIYAN RAINBOWDASH IS AWESOME. The story is kinda fast paced. Great storyline though. I guess it doesn't count as fast paced if you have enough to fill the time the fast-paced-ness causes.

2112129>>2112225 About the song, I can't tell whether it's good or bad news.

I guess it is, since I'm better at dialogues and at that time, my mom forced me to close early, that's why. I think. :trixieshiftleft:

But don't worry though, I'll make sure I won't do it again. 'Cause the third part is longer and you'll of course have to wait longer too. :twilightsheepish:

make part3 I have been waiting for a long time when are you gonna make part 3 :rainbowhuh:

2276244 Sorry, sorry! :twilightsheepish: I'll try my best to finish chapter 3.

Her dad just smiled, then followed her wife out of the room. LOLOLOLOLOLOL :rainbowlaugh:

When's the next one coming!?!:raritydespair::twilightblush:
Great story!:rainbowkiss:

An update? Yaaaaay!

NIce Chapter. More!

(Just one little critique: Try to make it a little bit slowerpaced ;-) )

KEEP IT COMING!!!!!please

2721563 It will, just a bit slower but not months. My brain is pretty rusty. :twilightsheepish:
2721736 :yay:
2722154 I'll try! Gosh, I REALLY need to work on that. :ajsleepy:
2723435 There will be more, but please be patient. :twilightsheepish:

this story this awesome needs to have more chapters can you please add more chapters and tell me when and if you do PLEASE...PLEASE...PLEASE add more awesome capters:pinkiehappy: if you cant ill understand:fluttershysad::fluttercry:

HN-

4130275 This this this this this this this this.
Please continue this story asap.

cool story. i like it since its in the past. :pinkiegasp: i always thought that Fluttershy Rainbow Soarin Thunderlane Derpy and Lovestruck I think her name is.. :twilightblush: (the white pegasus with a pink and green mane like Twi's) were friends when they were younger. i want to make my own story after i finish my current one.:scootangel:
KEEP WRITING:flutterrage:!!!!!

sweet chapter! I'm enjoying the story!
(i :heart: ur oc XD)

the ending made me go all GAAHHHH cuz it was cute, and they're fillies XD :rainbowlaugh:

Pony Station...Pinkie Jump..why?
And also...

“I’m just reminding you about our playdate with my animal friends, don’t forget okay? My friends would be really disappointed if you didn’t come.” the pale, light grayish gold filly said.

Stick with buttercream..it's easier to say..er..um...type...:twilightblush:

Are you supposed to leave fillies alone in a hospital like that? Or is it just me?:unsuresweetie:

When’s the next chapter? I love where this is headed.

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