This story is a sequel to The Darkness among the Stars
The madness has fallen in face of the unrivalled power of the saviour of Equestria. The sun decided to go on a long journey to gather new expierences and allies. So it was up to her younger sister to rule the land.
Two years had passed under the peaceful reign of the night and the ponies of Equestria had returned to their normal lives. Every day they worshipped and praised silently the name of their saviour, Soul Tearer.
But peace is evanescent and not suited to last for long. A new evil is throwing its shadow upon the small villiage of Ponyville. The ponies of Equestria are tired of fighting, tired of misery and loss but they won't budge that easy. Applejack and her friends will be forced to oppose these shadows with all the power they have left.
But what will they do? The elements are gone. Soul Tearer is gone and even Princess Celestia is gone.
Where is faith when you need it the most? Maybe even Death will become a reliable ally in face of the upcoming danger.
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Proofread by Switches
Cover-Art by FoxinShadow (Deviantart)
Hiya, Haseo. I'm reviewing your story on behalf of the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive directory of grammatically correct stories on FIMFiction. There are a few grammar errors (as well as usage errors) that could be cleaned up right now. The usage errors don't really count in terms of inclusion into the Directory, but I figured that I'd take the time to point out those as well.
It's just "saluting," not "saluting to."
I'm fairly sure you meant "the good of their beloved home," because "better" as a noun means essentially the same thing as "superior" does.
I'm sorry, buddy, but "friendly" is not an adjective. The most obvious solution here is to replace it with "in a friendly way," but that screws with the rhythm of the sentence, so I'm not wild about it. "Fondly," maybe?
I feel like you're talking about it extending lengthwise- so maybe "stretched" would work better. Using "expands" implies that her neck is basically inflating. That's kinda gross.
Misunderstanding implies that Applejack had a coherent understanding of what Pinkie Pie said; it was just wrong. That's not the case, and so a better word here would be "uncomprehending".
You either need a comment between "nervously" and "she," or you could move "Nervously" to somewhere else in the sentence. Right now, though, it doesn't really work.
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Thank you. Sometimes I read a text over and over again and still miss some mistakes.
I already got rid of them.
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Great. Moving it into the Directory now.
Here is my theory, either Twilight is kidnapping ponies or Pinkie isn't just using sugar to keep her up all night
Either Twilight took Big Mac and is doing experiments on him or Pinkie is making cupcakes.
Duh duh duh
SOUL!!!!!!
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I wouldn't be a sequel without him
3100591 That is so true. Also I now see why you killed Phalanx.
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You should take the perspective of Twilight. That would be epic.
i want SEQUEL!!! PLZZZ!!!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS AFTER!!!
A little too bitter sweet but a good story nonetheless