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Commando-Scarecrow


I'm a relatively mentally stable person with a penchant for high drama stories with attempts at high action pieces justaposed with some comedy, meaning that I like action, a good story and out of spa-

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"Once upon a time, in the magical land of Equestria, there were two regal sisters who ruled together and created harmony for all the land. To do this, the eldest sister used her unicorn powers to raise the sun at dawn. The younger brought out the moon to begin the night. Thus, the two sisters maintained balance for their kingdom and their subjects: all the different types of ponies.

"But as time went on, the two sisters grew greedy and covetous of their neighbors to the north. The Crystal Empire stood ready to defend themselves, but even their prince, noble and kind, could not contend with their power. On the fateful day they turned on their once friend, they became the ultimate perversions of their former selves. The elder sister became Solaria Dawn, herald of light and hate, and the younger became Night Mare Moon, harbinger of darkness and fear.

"Reluctantly, the noble prince delved into the darkness and found the forbidden powers needed to save his empire from certain doom. With the might of the shadows, combined with the mystical strength of the crystal heart and the elements of harmony, he was able to defeat his former friends and bring peace to all of Equestria, bearing the responsibility of both sun and moon. Harmony and peace once again fell upon the lands.

"One thousand years has passed since that time..."

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 27 )
Comment posted by Listie The Scribe Maid deleted Feb 6th, 2013
Comment posted by Goodbye deleted Feb 6th, 2013
Comment posted by Commando-Scarecrow deleted Feb 6th, 2013

What happened to chapter 2?

2085957 Hit a snag early on. Thought about giving up, but then decided it ain't my style

Well this is a new one. Sombra as a sensible, good regent? Vinyl as the protagonist? Very nice, will follow.

Seems to be having a bit of "Jeeves and Wooster" teamwork there, very nice. At first I misread her name and thought Vinyl was travelling with Sapphire Shores, heh. Could've been interesting, given that the fandom likes to establish her as a pop singer. (I don't think she has a canon profession.)

Well I had fun reading this, it really makes me hope that you are planing on continuing this story.

Really nice chapter :twilightsmile:
glad to see an update for that story
can't wait until the next one :raritywink:

Interesting. I hope that you continue this, sir. It looks to be quite a good read.

Wait, wait. Why did she suddenly start believing him?

Still a good read, but I don't think that he seemed like any less of a foal-napper by the end.

2741381 Why would Jason Todd and Dick Grayson join Batman? They were orphans with no better options.

Plus, he fixed her turn-table :trollestia:

Thank you for finally updating. Now, about the chapter...

Your spelling seems to be pretty good, but your grammar could use some work. Forgeting to adding words (or even sentences) seems to be your biggest mistake. I would suggest getting a proofreader. You should also make sure to differentiate thoughts from narration, somehow. Maybe making thoughts italic or something.

But I'm willing to forgive you because of one thing: the train ate my homework.

That story about how they met...that's the most adorable "Teacher Meets Student" moment in all of history!

Ms. Rose Luck punched, literally punched, the light post, breaking it from the base with her bare hoof. And then threw it, lobbing it just ahead of the two teenaged colts trying to make their escape, stopping them dead in their tracks.

I Once had a pony that could do that in an AU EOH fic...except mine was Berry Punch.
Still, very nice chapter, can't wait to see where this goes.

Is this still a thing? It's caught my attention hard :ajsmug:

Interesting. FOr some reason, I pictured Good!Sombra acting like Aquaman from Batman:Brave and The Bold.

She was a reletively small mare.

This bodes badly. Very, very badly.

A Den of Theives

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...how, exactly, does this fic have so many upvotes and so few downvotes? :facehoof:

4158106 At the time I was writing this story, I didn't have an editor and I didn't use g-docs yet.

Also, I assumed it had that many upvotes because the narrative was, certain errors aside, tightly written with interesting dialogue. :moustache:

5052937 Kind of, yeah...

Interested it taking it up?

Still dead, right? :/ This had potential

This story was great! Very funny too.

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