this story follows the story of my oc character Terra through his life he will face trials and tests that will decide if he really can live up to his fathers greatness of if he will fall and never get back up
this is my first ever fic written i just had the idea running through my head and i had to get it down in writing i hope people like the idea
any suggestions or ideas are welcomed and appreciated i do need about 4 oc characters for the golden sun brigade and the lunar commandos
thank you and i hope you enjoy
oh if anyone would like to make a picture of my oc that would be awesome if you need a better description just ask
Chapters (1)
Is that... a Metallica reference that I see?
I like this.
Also, I see a lot of run-on sentences, It really takes away from the story for me.
OKAY THATS IT!!!!WHY? JUST WHY MUST EVERYPONY MAKE SUCH GOOD STORIES???
Do you know what I'm going to do?...Huh?... Huh? WELL I'M GOING TO TRACK THIS STORY!
Okay back to all seriousness.
I liked it, the flow was weird cause like IrOnPUdiNg said that their are way to many run-on sentences, but hey other than that and some dialogue fixes you should be good to go! I understand how hard it is to get real feedback especially when nopony wants to comment. 
But hey you've go me! Ima track dis story, and don't worry about views, the longer its up the l more views it'll get.
P.S. Its spelled "I'll" not "ill" But I didn't mind that really at all. Keep up the good work! I look forward to more of your work!
-Noakwolftheawesomenessguy, Author of FoE: Brotherhood
thank you for the help ill have the next chapter up soon and i will work on the run on sentences
have some well earned stars.
I would love to see the run on sentences cleared up, it really jerks one out from an otherwise interesting plot.
lunar commando
Crimson Moon
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