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After an uprising against magic by the Pegasi and Earth Ponies, all unicorns- and all magic have ceased to exist. The sun and moon sit motionless and the stars no longer shine, creating eternal twilight. However, one spark of magic remains; hidden in a young unicorn filly, the last of her kind. Her destiny may hold the key to returning magic to all of Equestria. But she can't do it alone and will need the help from a few unexpected sources to bring back the magic and the stars. The question remains, is Starlight up to the challenge?
*Set in the future, about 15 years after the events in the show*
*Disregards all Season Four events and is cannon accurate up to and beyond that point as if Season Four didn't happen*
Cover Art is made by me with a base by Softybases http://softybases.deviantart.com/

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Comments ( 187 )

Wow, this is great! Unicorns are non-existant?! :pinkiegasp: I can't wait to find out what's actually going on!

2041087 Thanks! And as for updates I hope to have the next chapter ready within a week or two (I HOPE)

Hay! Chapter two has arrived!! :pinkiehappy: I enjoyed it a lot so far. I'm still kinda wondering how rainbow dash knows about pinkie sense when the mane six can't exist. I mean, twilight would be banned, as well as rarity. :applecry: good job, I hope to see the next chapter soon!

2086888 Well, explanations will come in time! I would tell you now, but that would ruin the surprise! :pinkiehappy:Hee Hee. I love surprises!:twilightsmile:

Yay, another chapter!! :yay: starlight just had a twilight moment. :pinkiehappy:

No confusion. So who's the general? I guess we'll all find out later. :pinkiehappy:

2126893 Yep! Answers will come...eventually :twilightblush:

General Applejack somehow makes sense... I'm loving how this is going! I wish I knew how to draw, then I'd make you a cover art. But alas, that's not my strong suite. Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

Well, with the Relevation that AJ is this General, u killed the Story in my Opinion. Having her betray her Friends, and apparently Twi and Rare killed... this is not my Cup of Tea. Aj is not my Favourite, if u ask,but it's so OOC for her, it is unacceptable.

i'll Look out for the next 2 Chapters, but i can't imagine even a few of the Mane 6 dead... maybe they're just Stone Statues together with the Princesses, and Grand finale is freeing them, dunno...

as of now this Fic is not My Cup of Tea, just wanted to let you know

mfg Nordic

2192572 I knew that letting AJ be the General that would be controversial. However, I didn't want to change my story to fit with what others wanted, and I did want to add to the story by making the biggest antagonist an easily recognizable character. That meant one of the main six, and let me tell you why I chose her. First, she has something to loose. I cannot see any of the main six betraying their friends in the initial outbreak of the Uprising. However, because AJ has a family, a farm and many things she has to protect, I could see her being sucked into the wrong side. There will be more about WHY exactly she chosen by the Council for her position and how she got mixed up on the wrong side. Also, she is the most mistrustful of magic. She is an Earth Pony from a long line of Earth Ponies who uphold non-magic traditions (winter wrap-up) and in my eyes, is the easiest to sway towards the side of the Uprising against Magic. Just wanted to let you know my reasoning and I completely understand if you feel your reading eyes are more useful elsewhere. :) And thank you for you're opinion and critism I like to know what my readers are thinking and appreciate any and all feedback (this is my first fan-fic, and story for that matter). And just for the record, it's not against AppleJack... AJ is 2nd best pony. Only Twi beats her for space in my heart :twilightsheepish:

2191613 Jeez! I know! I WISH I could draw too! Unfortunately I can only grace the fandom with fics... Not that I haven't tried...:facehoof:

A cover art has finally appeared! :yay:

2212510 I know! I learned about the magical art of bases! (also I got a tablet so I could actually do brush strokes. I am an idiot with a mouse...) ^^:twilightblush:

2215555 lol. I used to have a Mac, and I mastered photoshop, Corel painter, illustrator, and flash. Now I'm on an iPad or an hp depending on the time, and don't have any of those programs. :raritycry: Oh well, least I can still write stories.

Wasn't the best chapter?! If it wasn't, then it was sure as hell close! Sorry, I enjoy plot, and I LOVE the way the story is going. And yeah, it's really sad about what happened to the mane six. I don't know whether they are even actually dead or not, but I don't really care. As far as I can tell, Starfire is the next element of magic, and there may be others to fill the stations necessary to defeat the Uprising and bring back the unicorns! Well, however it goes, I love this story! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

2222251 Oh gosh, Thanks! :twilightblush: I'm glad you are liking it so much!!!

Okay, so I've reached this chapter and found that this was all that was up so far...I was kinda sad that there's going to be a wait for the next update, but that's just a sign that the story's good! :pinkiehappy: I'm glad to see this story up, and it's kinda weird that it hasn't gotten more views. The tales of a unicorn in a world of earth ponies and pegasi should appease almost any reader, especially with your writing. Keep it up!! :yay:

2273315 Thank you so much! I am so glad you are enjoying it!:twilightsmile: And don't worry! I will be updating soon! I already have big plans for the next few chapters and can't wait to share them with all of you! :heart:

You need to update the character tabs on the main page, bro. I have to say though, I really like how this is going. See what a magical ninja that Zecora is, it would be cool if they met. And the best part? Zecora has the Alicorn Amulet!! THAT'S RIGHT, SUCKA!!! IN YO FACE!!!! :rainbowderp: oops...sorry! Got a little excited there for a moment...Anyways, keep up the great work!!

2291933 Yeah... I know I need to update character tabs.... It's just gah! There are so many characters and I need to figure out which ones need to actually be on the bottom of the story itself... Hrm... :twilightoops:

...the plot seems interesting even though this is an OC fic.

I think I shall read it.

So yeah, I want more of this.

2294657 Soon! Luckily for you I am on spring break and have free time! Also, I've gotten to the point that I have become a wee bit obsessed with this project, so I update at least once every week or two :twilightsmile: Glad you are liking it!

2294765

This is the kind of thing that should be featured instead of diaperfag clopfics. You make a lot of your/you're errors and such things, and Starlight's whining about her magic is kind of overdone at times, but everything else is :rainbowkiss: especially the part about the sun.

2294830 The clopfics won't show up if you don't have the mature setting on. Just go to settings, if you don't already know. :trollestia:

2294765 I'm glad to see chapters floating out faster than before! This story is taking a very interesting turn of events. Maybe Starlight can prevent it with one of those "go back in time one use only" spells and warn the princesses and AJ. Just saying...:twilightsheepish:

2294830 Thank you! And yes, I know there are grammatical errors.. especially the your/you're which is a personal weakness of mine:twilightoops: I really appreciate the feedback especially since I try to proofread these, but there are things I miss! Thanks so much for reading and enjoying! :twilightsmile:

It's a very intresting theory you created. I like it. Can't wait for the next chapter! Hope it comes soon!

2295046 :twilightsmile: You must wait for all things good! (but not too long, since the next chapter is almost done already ^^ and I have a six hour drive to sit through tomorrow :twilightblush: )

2295134 Thanks! And soon it shall come out! (hopefully tomorrow or friday! I'm taking advantage of spring break :twilightsmile: )

This does look interesting.

I shall await until it is complete and I'll read it then.

Love the continuation! Can't wait for the next update.

2310348 You must wait for all things good young grasshopper! :trixieshiftright: But soon, just not as fast as the last few chapters... I had to go back to class today:raritycry::facehoof:

I love it. Best story I've read in a long time. Just out of curiosity, who the hell put pinkie in charge of a camp?:rainbowhuh:
Oh well, I'll be awaiting an update.

2337891 Thanks so much :twilightsmile: And the update should be sometime this weekend! (I hope!)

Yes! New chapter. :yay:
It can't be easy to make everything rhyme for Zecora's lines though. Good job on that.

2348335 Oh thank you! She is the reason this update took so long! I am not a natural rhymer...:twilightsheepish:

Hmm, I think I told you this a few chapters before... but with this line:

Her friends didn’t disappear like the others though. They were captured, they were killed.

u shoulda add at least a Sad Tag. Also imho it's to short. Captured, killed and bam...
And I think I repeat myself when I say you're letting off AJ to easy... she needs constant Nightmares, selfdoubt, Ghosts of Her 2 Friends haunting her... I may sound cruel, but that's what u shoulda get for siding with Racists and becoming their Military Leader. I personally hope that you continue this and make your stuff, but it is for me getting more and more illogical, but that may be due to my own Headcanon, where AJ is only slightly short of Loyalty to RD in Relation to their Friends.

let's see where it goes, good rhyming btw, rhyming is the Reason why no Zecory in a FF i'm currently planning, too much trouble

mfg Nordic
(sorry for rambling, sometimes i can't help mahself)

2352309 Thank you so much for the advice! I actually think that some more of that AJ stuff would be a good idea, but I am not sure where the line is between adding it and dwelling on it. I'm actually working on that for the next update. Don't worry, I even before you commented, was planning to add more stuff in the next few chapters. That is the advantage to writing as you post things, to get feedback from the readers and see if they feel something needs to be added. :twilightsmile: Also, it helps for the feel of the characters and their characterization. I don't think you are being cruel at all, I actually can really get behind AJ being right up there with RD for loyalty. The only difference in my head is that AJ would be more likely to protect her family, which is why she took the role in this. Wow... that was long. Sorry:twilightblush: Anyway, I really thank you for your advice, it helps me when readers comment with suggestions because I don't have anyone to proofread this or give feedback before it goes up. And thanks for the ryhming compliment....I actually worked really hard to get Zecora's speech down. You have no idea how many times what she said was written and re-written!
And don't worry about the rambling, the more you write the more I can respond with (Also I am the WORST rambler I know, obviously ^

Brilliant. But please don't kill Rainbow off.

2382437 Thanks :twilightsmile: And you will just have to see about that other thing!:pinkiecrazy: (TOTALLY JOKING!!! :twilightblush:)

2386705
Sorry to bother you, but when is the next chapter coming?
(No rush, just curious.)

2469727 Yeah, It should be up by this weekend and no later than Monday ^^ Sorry for the wait, I had a minor family emergency this last week that resulted in me having to stay at my grandma's farm...with no computer... :unsuresweetie: So, no worries, everything has worked out and I am hard at work to get the next chapters out :twilightsmile: Rest assured, it's about to get good!

Oh God, the cliffhangers!
You're getting better at writing these chapters. The further in I get, the more I want to read the rest of it.
Good job. :twilightsmile:

I love the continuation and really hope you continue it soon! I really don't like clifhangers (even if I usually try and write my stories with clifhangers at the end of chapters. Im not very good at it though.) My prediction on the upcoming chapters is that Applejack will steal the elements of Harmony that have been taken and then take them to Rainbow Dash and the others, Starlight will become the new element of magic and some pony else would be the new element of Generosity and they'll save the day. I also am going to guess that Rainbow Dash is going to try a sonic rainboom to disapate the storm.

2489467 Thanks! I'm glad you are enjoying it!

2490132 You'll have to wait and see:pinkiehappy: And don't worry you shouldn't have to wait too long! The next chapter should be up in the next few days :twilightsmile:....probably:twilightblush:

Well no sonic rainboom but still a great chapter. I spotted a couple of errors but they didn't really distract me. I love the idea that the Elements have distress signals. I never would have thought of that. And as always I can't wait for the next chapter.

2509418 Thanks! Also, if you notice errors, feel free to point them out! I would love to be able to go in and fix them. :twilightsmile: I try to proofread beforehand, but there is stuff I miss. :twilightoops: Anyway, glad you're enjoying it!

2509492
Okay. I remember two that stuck out.
“Don’t you get testy with me! I just think your being stupid.” Shard sniffed. Flare rolled his eyes.
It should be; ...I just think you're being stupid...
The your you used was the possessive your while the one you should have used was You're the contraction of you are.

She had to time this perfectly, knife in hand, she approached, not even caring if she was quiet anymore.
Um... ponies don't have hands. Somehow they can hold things in their hoofs but they don't have hands.

I hope that helps. I don't remember any others but you may want to reread it.

2509558 Oh, wow! That you're/your thing is the bane of my existence! I always mess them up, even though I know full well which one goes where. Also, I even fixed a different part of that hand sentence when I proofread a minute ago. :twilightblush: Jeez I need more sleep before I try to upload things! Thank you SO much for noticing these! I really appreciate it!:twilightsmile:

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