You wake up in a hotel after a night you barely remember. Your life is about to turn upside down, the cartel is after you and your new rainbow-maned friend for something.
2nd person OC ship of Rainbow and yourself. Rated T for Derpy mischief, violence, some strong language, and suggestive themes.
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WE STRUCK GOLD BABY
To prevent any eventual questions on it, I wrote this on the fly in 30 minutes to fulfill the needs of a rapidly developing role-play. I had never intended for it to get very deep or for it to continue, but I shall continue when I have free time tomorrow. For now, I sleep.
EDIT: Also I realize that the story is rushed and I'm sorry for that. I may fix that bit and broaden the scope a bit more if anypony actually cares. If not I'll just continue with my original plan.
I'm loving it so far.
Even if I sort of find this stuff odd. I'm just weird like that.
Decent.
Some issues:
"I hope you had as much fun as I did. I certainly did." <redundant.
Too short!
Still, a good start.
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Yeah I caught that after I had uploaded it but I was too lazy to fix JUST that. I decided that when I fill it out to add MUCH more content, seeing as this was rushed a lot, I would fix that. Also i misspelled whinny because my Kindle's auto correct function is retarded.
I usually don't like this kind off stuff, because you know... its turning what was supposed to be a kids show into some sort of erotic fanfiction. But for some reason I don't get the usual disgust I feel when I see things like this. I am waiting for more
MUST READ MORE NOW
LOL,most likely not drugs but just too much booze.
FUCK YEAH!!!
THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!
I am starting to get interested in this story.
"...As the drug Rainbow put in your mug takes effect."
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Da fuq?
Dat dash.......... Thems some gooood drugs trippin and you sleep with dash only downside is.. Well you know.. NOT KNOWING WAT DA FUQ HAPPEND
How intriguing. That's all I can say really. It was well-written. But that's a bit of a mind buck!
She put drugs in your drink? When you totally would have done practically whatever she wanted anyway? She must have wanted to do some pretty bucked up shit. Me gusta.
152358 *reads* Only 30 minutes? You have talent. Or maybe I just have none. Or both. Eh, now I'm depressing myself. Later!
No offense but this is REALLY hackneyed. "This happens, then this happens, then this," is kind of how it reads. Could do with more descriptive language, and perhaps a little more subtlety? I find it very fast paced as Dash instantly likes "you" and is then jumping your bones. It gives no chance for any kind of character development from either you or her. It establishes Dash more or less as a slut who drugs people to have sex with them.
Also the plot is... Non-existent. It feels more like living out some odd fantasy about sleeping with Rainbow Dash than an actual story at this point. The "romance" scene is done in a rather un-tasteful manner. Subtle tactics are always the best tactics.
I give it a 1.5/5 because it's not 100% terrible, but it's far from what I'd consider a "story."
152960 i read in 15 min
ur SLOW......jk everyone reads at there own pace
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Nope.jpg she defiantly drugged your ass. Just wait for me to fix this chapter up a bit and then post chapter 2 and you'll understand completely.
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You find out later.
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Again, you find out what happens later.
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Okay so people stop posting this SPOILER ALERT!
You find out later that Rainbow Dash was given the drug as a poison for her by the crime lord you nearly run into when you first enter the club. It didn't work on either of you for some reason and just had some strange side-effects on you both. She ends up feeling miserable about how it all happened, but in the end you hook up for real and try to forget the past as you fight against the crime boss that tried to kill her.
ALSO: Like I said I wrote this in 30 minutes for an RP. I had never even intended on posting this but I got a lot of good reactions on ponysquare so I posted it anyway. I do indeed plan on making it MUCH better but for the time being this is what you have. Don't give it a bad rating over personal things or because it's short. That particular problem will be fixed, hopefully by the end of the day, and I don't want negative reactions to taint the possible future this story may or may not have.
152421 Where do people get the smiling ponies like that?! So adorable
154682 Screencapped from S2E7 (Fluttershy/Rainbow Dash duet)
154692 Soooooo cutee :33333
Spending a lot more time to rewrite this than I thought I would. You guys are in for a treat, my friend Alex assisted me with my structure and whatnot and has improved my writing a lot in just the past few hours. God I love having a friend whose mother is a Doctorate of English.
Finally finished Chapter 1 FFS that took WAY too long. after hours and hours of procrastination, I give you the fruit of my labors. Enjoy!
Hey I read your story like ya asked sirisma, and the only thing I have to complain about is you haven't updated to explain the great story you told me about.
" You lean back and start to kiss her forehead, only to black out as the drugs that were put into the mug take effect."
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"You wake up in a hotel room several hours later, coated in sweat and VERY tired." “Last night was great, hope you had as much fun as I did.”
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How the...? How does this have 1.7k views??? It's terrible!!! xD