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I decided to add a bit more flair to these familiar stories that we all know and love: Nightmare Moon's creation and Discord's initial defeat. I thought to myself, Why not combine the two? So I did, and I'm pretty happy with the result. I hope you will be too. If not, criticism is always welcomed. Enjoy.

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He snapped his claws again, tightening the ropes around the Princess and driving out what little air she had left in her lungs. ”And again, that means that this land will. Be. Mine!” With heavy emphasis on the last word he kicked her hard in her ribs, and Celestia was sure that she heard a couple of her ribs crack as the blow landed.

DO. NOT. WANT!!! :fluttershbad: :fluttershyouch:

Well, I guess you could mix up his personalities because... stuffs, but the word chaos literally means "Without Order"; Not evil, not malice, and not...

The only sound Celestia was able to make was a small groaning sound. It was all she could manage due to the pain.

This... I mean, sure, he'd constrict her until she could be immobilized, but... :twilightoops:

Comment posted by forgottenscholar deleted Jan 26th, 2013

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I totally get what you're saying, but again, I decided to try something a little different out. I mean, when we first met him he was more than a little crazy, I like to think of that being caused by being encased in stone for a thousand years. You know, solitary times break solitary minds.

Yep i know what u mean
And thanks for the story!
Can you maybe write one of a little bit before and what happened during the Princesses fight?

Wow such an evil and diabolical Discord you have there. I like it yet feels like he is Out of character to me. O well. I will continue to read this. It seems rather good. The plot seems well thought out, it is written well and descriptive. A very interesting story you have.

A very well written story. I truly enjoyed reading this. I admit I'm not a fan of the way you wrote Discord in this story but considering he was trapped for over a thousand years in stone he could of definitely changed in that time. All in all good story. Descriptive, well paced and not a single grammar or spelling error.

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You mean like a follow up after Luna changed? ...Ya I guess I could do that. I had been toying with the idea, truth be told. Time for fun stuff.:trixieshiftright:

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Eeyup, thats what i mean. Thanks!

This was a wonderful read. You have a lot of talent. Great work.
As well, Discord, in my opinion, seemed more violent than he is in the show, more bent on destruction than the fun chaos he is portrayed with. Once the reader understands this, however, it's a great read.

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