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Spike, faithful assistant to Twilight Sparkle, has accidentally gotten his life force sucked out by a magical artifact. In that state, he was only considered mostly dead, not fully dead. As long as the artifact was taken away from him, he could recover. Before Twilight and the others could do so, one of the employees from the land of the dead already took Spike's soul away.

Now, in order to save him, Twilight and her friends will have to travel into Lot D, the land of the dead. There, they will beseech the land's ruler herself for the return of Spike's soul.

Notes: Takes place before Alicorn Twilight.

Let me know in the comments how you like the story, or don't like it, or any other random thoughts. It would be helpful.

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Grim Fandango...

Keep this up, and ponies are going to be crossed over with EVERYTHING.

Finally added a random cover image that I macackred myself. Apparently, macackre isn't a real word at all :rainbowhuh:.

Oh god, I'm sorry but that transliterated Greek in the cover image is an immediate turnoff for me. I understand that you probably don't know Greek, but you could at least have written the ending sigmas as ς and not σ. Also, it might help that Tartarus is spelled "Tartaros" or "ταρταρος" in its original Greek form. What you have now spells "tartarys" when transliterated into English. If those things were changed, I would probably read this.

Also, in actual Greek, which I'm assuming you didn't adopt so that English speakers could have a chance at reading it, this line "Ponies in Tartarus" would read "ἵπποι εν ταρταρῳ" or "ΙΠΠΟΙ ΕΝ ΤΑΡΤΑΡΩΙ" noting the rough-breathing mark above the first iota and the iota subscript below the omega in the uncapitalized version.

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You're right in that I don't know a lick of actual Greek. I'm wondering what causes Tartarus to be rendered as Ταρταρος in the, well, "English" version but in actual Greek, it would turn into ταρταρῳ? Is some conjugation going on or is the name of the place different in English and Greek?

:moustache: Only 4 comments and 10 likes...I'll give it a looksie just out of curiosity

:moustache: Finally got around to reading this and here's what I think: I like the Idea and all but you need to work on the grammar and pacing on some parts over all I'm giving it a 7/10 but I'm still not finished with the story so I'll come back after I get caught up completely
Lazy :trixieshiftleft:
:moustache: Shut up Trixie

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Yes indeed, hooray Pinkie. :pinkiegasp:

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Thanks for coming back to read my story and thanks for the comments. Glad you're sorta okay with it. Hope you continue to read.

Why are you describing characters we are all bound to know? That's called padding, and it is completely unnecessary.

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When doing stories, it feels more proper to describe characters when they first appear. Sure, in this case, there are tons of visuals around, but this is a story medium. No reason to ignore part of writing just because there's a television show.

Please continue! :pinkiesmile:

This is great! I like how you added Greek mythology, but at the same time kept it creative and added your own enhancements! I really liked the fight with Rarity and Sticks, who i still don't trust. Can't wait for the rest of the story!

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Thank you for reading, glad you like my story.

I find Greek Mythology pretty interesting. The show already had a bunch of Greek mythological creatures and having Tartarus actually exist in their world, I thought it would be cool to work with it in a pony kind of way.

Wuved it :rainbowkiss:
Write moar stuff :D

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Thanks for reading my story!

2396475 I love the God of War references you put in. The Blades of Exile, the Colossus of Rhodes, and the Nemean Cestus

Listened to this the entire time

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Haha, yeah. It's an awesome series, and I just had to toss it in somewhere.

This story has been reviewed by: The Equestrian Critics Society

Story Title: Ponies in Tartarus

Author: ff0000

Reviewed by: Shahrazad

Ponies in Tartarus is entertaining, that much can be said. It’s an action-adventure fic, through and through. It’s about the mane six trying to save Spike from, well, death. They journey to the underworld, which is inhabited by a colorful and interesting cast of characters.

The story entertains, but don’t expect deep mythological symbolism or introspection. It’s still worth a light read, but the story doesn’t do anything spectacular. This story focuses on the action and sacrifices things that get in the way. It’s fun, and if that’s all you’re looking for, read on.

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Score: 7.0/10

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