This is a story where once friendly Nightmare Star is sent to live on the stars for 1,000,000 years and has come back for some great revenge.
Chapters (2)
Jack of a Few Trades
Joined 27th Nov, 2013 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- spiderkink · 6.5k words · 226 14 · 6.4k views
- Wolokai · 31k words · 107 8 · 4.7k views
- BlackRoseRaven · 336k words · 228 6 · 3.2k views
- The Grimm Reaper · 29k words · 710 49 · 12k views
- Priceless911 · 147k words · 138 5 · 3.2k views
- Gravitiaxis · 57k words · 358 25 · 13k views
- Disorderly chaos · 11k words · 159 15 · 5.2k views
- Roran Dreamon · 22k words · 71 14 · 2.8k views
Featured In13
The Writers' Group56,376 stories ·9,290 members
Art for Fanfiction212 stories ·5,167 members
American Bronies3,785 stories ·1,062 members
- 502 Fiction2,201 stories ·367 members
Mentally Deficient Authors1,408 stories ·630 members
Plan 9 from Equestria.2,024 stories ·366 members
Rage Reviews!1,082 stories ·1,628 members
- Deleted and Blocked Club240 stories ·153 members
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.036 seconds
Total duration
912 users online
458,025 hits today, 2,004,447 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Being the first "like" of your own story is discouraged.
Time to read.
Dear God what the fuck.
OH MY GOD.
DAT WALL
Wow I can't believe this made it past moderation. You'll be the second person I tell to delete their fic. This reeks with laziness
Sweet Lord on a pogo stick, I honestly don't understand what I read. I got "Nightmare Star" and some sort of big decision being made, but... that's it.
I don't get it.
NO NO NO NO NO NO NO FUCKING NO
This, how did this even pass moderation.
THERE IS NO GRAMMAR PROBLEMS BECAUSE THERE IS NO GRAMMAR! Ever heard of a period, or perhaps fuking quotes!? What about dialogue or perhaps the enter key? Paragraphs?
*clears throat* congrats this is the most typical character, with a typical story, and typical shittyness from a first time writer. I admit, I was the same way... But damn dude, I at least knew what grammar was.
Faust have mercy on your soul.
2054250 At least he remembered to capitalize the title.
This is a fucking grammar Holocaust the Nazi's would even cringe.
Sweet Jesus MY fic is better then this!
2054268 No, just no. He doesn't even get that credit, he must have accidently pressed the shift key while typing it.
2054219 I hope for the love of Celestia that was intended to be read in a sarcastic tone
2054273 I agree
2054280 Did he really give himself the first like?
holy hell we have a new level of noob.
2054273 Nice. If I had to choose between a finger in the eye and reading this story, I would shoot myself for fear of catching another glimpse of this.
2054298 DO you have the Up Syndrome? This story clearly needs some help in the form of demolition.
2054282 Thank you sir.
I'm glad someone has some common sense.
Sweet Jesus titty fucking Christ. How did you even write this? You should truly feel guilty about the annihilation of my hopes in a new generation.
2054343 Ok, so do you actually think this isn't that great story? Cause you are definitely sending mixed messages here.
Oh yea and one more thing. ALICORN, REALLY!
cyan-studios.net/faceroll/wp-content/uploads/2010/03/faceroll.gif
Is this how you wrote this materclass of shit?
2054369 I agree with that statement sir.
What...in Nurgle's Rot...?
The fuck is this shit??
Нет...Это просто ужасно.
2054439 Welcome to hell.
No, in fact, I will not. Asking writers to excuse bad grammar is just downright insulting.
Fuck you.
THIS CHANGES NOTHING!!!!!
Interesting idea, sorry to say though that the people below me are right. If anything good can be salvaged from this is the fact that I have been given a confidence that my story isn't as bad... also I have been given a new idea I can use.
Jesus Christ on a flying seahorse hopping on a pogo stick,
I can comprehend...
FELIX'FUCKING SHOOT ME, WHAT IS WITH YOUR GRAMMAR?'DAWN
better than this.
MODS. WHEN YOU'RE APPROVING STORIES MAKE SURE YOU AREN'T DRUNK!
Appleshort was fucking gold compared to this.
Ok. Person (I don't think the term writer applies), have you ever, ever, picked up and read a novel? A story book? Dr. Seuss? A picture with a caption below it?
I'm in agreement with these people saying that it should be immortalized as an example of how not to write.
HE WORKED AT THE RAINBOW FACTORY.
THE FUCKING RAINBOW FACTORY.
The only good thing I have to say about this is the best fucking character name out there.
Nightmare. Mumbling.
That.
Is the best.
Character name.
Ever.
The only other thing I got from this story was how you got Rainbow Dash, the ELEMENT OF LOYALTY, to betray her friends and Equestria.
As for this.
i.qkme.me/3r66jx.jpg
Yes. I got the flu flu from this too too.
Good riddance.
terrariaonline.com/attachments/1299781811479-png.19349/
apple short pls go
Not going to give my two cents. Just hope that half of the guys who said something about the mods allowing this to pass don't get in trouble.
Not to be rude or anything, but please learn proper grammar and spelling before you write a story. 'I'm lazy' isn't a valid excuse.
How can I describe this inhumane word-genocide? Aside from the fact that excusing your piss-poor grammar (Which isn't really even apparent, anyhow) insults us as writers given that that shouldn't be issue, especially due to laziness.
But my main quarrel? In the words of former-United States president Ronald Reagan at his famous speech at the Berlin Wall circa 1988:
"Mister Gorbachev, tear this wall down."
What in the name of Baby Moses's Reed-Covered Bum?
No. Just...no...
Please tell me, by Celestia's nonexistant beard, what is going on here?!? I mean, is it one Nightmare or two? The lack of quotation marks... Please, please, if you are too lazy (as you said) to have basic grammar, then don't post the story.
And as to your account name being the name of the pony that is somehow getting revenge, and the picture being the same as your account's picture...
I should be a moderator. Shit like this is not gonna get past me.
You know what.
I'm copying this into google drive so it never disappears. Then when I find a bad author I can say 'well, at least it wasn't this'
img703.imageshack.us/img703/4043/lookatthawwot.png
Mod's... Stop being Lazy like this numpt.
I don't even.... cdn.memegenerator.net/instances/400x/30780625.jpg
2055696 One step ahead. I have the .txt docs so I can riff this someday.
2055696 It happened.
i2.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/009/505/13021220502518.jpg
Normally, I try super hard to be positive about all fics that I read. I really do. However, if this is true:
Why should I add effort into being nice to this fic if you won't put effort into give us something readable?
So here's a list of questions that popped up as I read on:
What the hell just happened with Nightmare Moon?!
Who is they?!
Why are they so friggin surprised?!
What does "unexplainable faces" mean!?
Who is doing all the "getting up"!?
Where is this story going!?
Is this even a story or is this a record of a mad man's thoughts as he slipped out of his sanity?!
Why are they glaring at a pony for his voice?!
Why did RD yells "GASP"?!
How many times can I exclaim my questioning frustrations with "?!" ?!
Why is Nightmare Mumbling not the main character?!
What is happening?!
Where is what?!
Who is when?!
Why?!
Why, why, why, why ,why?!
Lastly, WHY?!
Here's my favorite line:
Yup. As friends we decide things. Dumb things. It's just what we do.
My final thought: I think the mods were just trolling us by letting this story pass, teasing us, knowing full well that that we can no longer post riff fics here!
2061265
You might want to take a look at my page. And yes, this story is now on my queue.
2061953
Well we can't post 'em here, HERE (RiP MPPT) but Google Docs works for me! Thank you fellow warrior of riffing justice!
Also, my dear story writer, not sure if I've asked this, but...
rethinkmarketing.com.au/wp-content/uploads/2011/04/Why.jpg
25.media.tumblr.com/fbe6a5fb7a56f669f6995965c99dacba/tumblr_mhijvh1eNj1rwej9io10_400.gif