Bad Company

by Symphony

Arc 2 - A Type of Normalcy

Arc #2
of
Bad Company

In which Jay attempts to make a regular life happen. With his luck however, things can only go so well...

Comments

[Jack Kellar]

8637690
For sure. Ow.

[D48]

8638462
Eh, fair enough, but I would have expected you to handle this differently to transition into a lighter mood. The heart attack in particular was unnecessary (and stupid to someone like me who knows real lightning safety), and you could have achieved basically the same outcome with just the nasty burn to keep the overall tone a lot lighter. That's why I said it seemed like you were going for a darker overall tone for the story after reading this chapter, and I'm honestly not sure how you're going to transition from here as a result.

[pootdispencer]

I don't trust the arc description, the last one only applied to 1/6 of the arc