The year is 1943, Germany has so far lost all three key battle to turn the tide of the war into their favor. They know that they are losing and are desperately looking for a solution for the situation. When a German scientist say that he has a solution, Berlin is all ears. The solution, a peaceful country in another world. Its time for the iron eagle to strike down on its new prey and bring the war with it.
(Authors note: I am not a Nazi or anything like that just so you know. I have just always been a fan to alternative timeline stories and I am also a huge fan when it comes to World War 2 fiction as well so I deiced to write my own story about it for a change. And what better way is there then inserting ponies into the mix.
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Its late, I am going to reed it tomorrow BUT I love the title! Good one Sir Indeed good one
Please tell me you can speak German and that you're not using that shitty Google Translator (I'm German myself)
Sounds really interesting! Will read later!
And no, I don't think your a Nazi. Not all Germans were Nazis in the 1930-40s. Many German soldiers were horrified when they heard about the holocaust. I wish people would stop thinking of history as 2 dimensional.
2026669Both yes and no. I can speak a little German but for the harder parts I used Google translate. hope you don't mind. and if there is grammatical errors (which I believe there is) I could use some help to fix them.
2026673Glad that someone agrees with me.
2026684 If that's the case, then of course I can help if you'd like
2026689 Dankeschön
2026684
Personally, i'd consider asking for a proofreader who can speak German to help you with the German parts.
(Don't look at me, you'd be better of asking a cow carcass)
EDIT: Note to self, read comments before commenting.
Ah, a good ole WWII fic. This is going into favorites to read later.
If you'd like a history buff (My minor is history), I'd be more than glad to both edit, provide insight, and give information.
EDIT: I'm interested. Your story is a bit more on the wall of text side, but that can be easily fixed. There are quite a few errors, but with one or two proofreaders they can be quickly fixed.
One really big thing though: The description and introduction both say the year is 1943. However, in the story the Allies have already landed on Normandy and are pushing through France. The Normandy landings happened in June 1944, so that's a bit off. Also, the Sigfried line wasn't rebuilt until the Germans were routed from France. Once the few remaining German divisions made it across the Reine, the bunkers were quickly rebuilt and their divisions brought back to fighting strength. This event is also referred to as the 'Miracle of the West'.
This idea...I love it; can't wait for more (I'm a WWII history buff/alternate-history fan too
).
However, I think you have an extra sentence at the beginning that should be omitted:
The bolded sentence contradicts the previous sentence and 1943 setting, since the Normandy landings took place in 1944.
I could help you with the german parts in the story ;)
Awww I just know germans are gonna get their asses whooped....................but hey then again the endings are never truly clear.
Good story so far.
I think it is funny that the only sentences that were fully correct were "Hast du das gehört?" and "F*** dich ,du kleine sch*****!"
Do we germans really cuss that much?
Anyway i read that you needed help i can help you if needed.
Just send me the parts you want to have translated.
Btw:I really loved the sentence:"Wo der Mensch geht ,folgt Krieg." it´s really poethical.
Camo Flash
So many errors. I don't know German, but there are tons of English grammar and spelling mistakes.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Frühling Für Hitler! (Oder Wie Ich Lernte, Bombe Und Schreiben Sie Einfach Dunkel Mensch Stories)
In English: Springtime For Hitler! (Or How I Learned Stop Worrying And Just Write Dark Human Stories)
I cant get this out of my inbox for new updates :<
Anyone got ideas?
Ohhhhh Just what I need to fulfill my pony/WW2 Tastes
MOAR
Great story, you should continue it!
2026802Nice, and don't worry. That is fixed now.
2026913No no no, just him.
And I worked hard to figure out a good title, thanks for liking it.
2026980 Name five.
In your description...
"I am also a huge fan of World War 2"
You may wish to change how you word that part of your description.
2029366 OH shit you're right.
I feel wrong for humming the german anthem, while reading the story and by anthem, I mean the first verse.
It is a great story, but you should get someone to proofread the german lines.
Es wird schon genug Deutsche auf Fimfiction geben. In deine Kommentare sind schon drei.
2026913 Depends, some of us cuss constanly (like me) and some don't. But still german is a very aggresive language.
When I first saw this story, this was all I could think of.
Ich geh davon aus dass die Deutschen am Ende verlieren.
Trotzdem interessante Geschichte.
2029741 not quite.
I have a nice story line build up. just wait and see.
solltest du hilfe mit den deutschen text zeilen brauchen ich wäre bereit dir zu helfen
2029272 I don't get it
"Name five"? I come back to this single chapter over and over, but I still have it in my inbox 
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2030096 I meant the grammar errors.
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[The bunker looked like simple mortar bunker in early model with a couple of machinegun nest on each side.
The bunker looked like simple mortar bunker, an early model with a couple of machine gun nest on each side.] grammar and machine gun
[ Bunkers were scattered across the French – German border, waiting for the inventible attack from the allies.
Bunkers were scattered across the French – German border, waiting for the inevitable attack from the allies.] Misspelled word.
[ On the eastern front, the Russians had broken through as well and were now racing towards Berlin, the capital of the third Reich.
On the eastern front, the Russians had broken through as well and were now racing towards Berlin, the capital of the Third Reich.] Third Reich is a pronoun
[In Africa the Africa core was on the Retreat as well.
In Africa, the Africa core was on the Retreat as well.] Grammar and I'm sure you should use a different line instead of 'Africa core', I don't know German for the soldier types or units.
[ Even with superior technology and well trained troops the third Reich was no match against the United States industries and the Soviet Union’s manpower.
Even with superior technology and well trained troops, the Third Reich was no match against the United States industries and the Soviet Union’s manpower.] Third Reich again
[“My name is Hans Hoffmann. But you can call me Hans.” Hans said before exiting the door, leaving Trixie with her thoughts.
“My name is Hans Hoffmann, But you can call me Hans.” Hans said before exiting the door and leaving Trixie with her thoughts.] Small grammar swap.
Almost every sentence in the first paragraph has an error so far. Not that I mean to offend you
2030531 Name two more
2030563
[The car in the front was Horch 1A Volkswagen armed with a MG 42 on the back of it and was seated by three Wehrmacht soldiers.
The car in the front was Horch-1A Volkswagen armed with a MG-42 on the back of it and was occupied by three Wehrmacht soldiers.]
[“No, what we are really doing here is so top secrets that only me, the führer and those that work here knows about it.
“No, what we are really doing here is so top secret that only me, the führer and those that work here knows about it.]
Though 'Top secrets' looks like a small slip
[“I told you two that sew cutie marks were just a stupid idea to try.” Scootaloo said to her tow friends.
“I told you two that a sewing cutie mark was just a stupid idea to try.” Scootaloo said to her two friends.]
2030563
You are just screwing with him now, aren't you?
Anyway, interesting story. Quite interesting indeed, hmmm hmmm.
2031453 Yeah.
2031084 Man I really need to work on that. I'm sorry that were so many errors. I forgot to proof read it because i wanted to first see if it got popular here. Kind of an idiotic though now when I think of it.
Still, thanks for the help.
2031453
Only partially.
Shit I love this episode cant sthap reading it from the beginning write the next one comon faster I fucking hate you!
Make the germans win plz
I WOULD describe how much I love this but I can't find any word or combination of words that would successfully describe my sheer awe.
This story made me make an account.
do you have any plans on continuing this?
This needs to be edited desperately. Sorry to say, but even though I want to read this, the giant block of text right at the beginning made me close the window. Looking at it ended up hurting my eyes before even getting to the third paragraph.
Another thing, break into more paragraphs. Not every sentence, but maybe three-five sentences as well as making the sentences shorter so you don't have those giant text blocks.
Lots of misspellings, but I don't know your first language (I'm going to assume English but I won't hold it against you since you'll hopefully get better with time, like the rest of us.) And this is more of a pet-peeve for me as it might not bother somebody else, but the whole you combining English and German in the same sentence is... annoying to say the least. It's okay to have one sentence in English and then the next in another language, but to combine the two in one sentence kinda makes it hard to understand what's going on. Not to mention it's sort of unnecessary and somewhat annoying... Ah who am I kidding, I'm guilty of the same damn thing in my own story.
I'm still serious about the paragraphs though, break the larger paragraphs up more, so it doesn't put strain on the reader's eyes.
2184460Sorry, tried to give the Germans the stereotype German accents when they speak English and I know that there is a lot of misspelling in the text and lots of grammar faults. I will fix that when i got the time.
was zum fick ist das Scheiße
please do some editing before you post
When can we expect the next chapter? It's been half a year now
We really don't need another Nazis take over Equestria fanfic. There's already one too many.
3445992 Name one